Patience— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but unclear and a bit awkward. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No and brief reason), avoid unrelated names or metaphors, and keep it concise (max 3 sentences). Add one concrete example or brief explanation to support your statement.

Example: Yes, I am somewhat impatient, but I'm actively working on it. For example, I notice I get irritated quickly in stressful situations, so I practice deep breathing to calm myself before reacting.

Suggestion: You give several causes, which is good, but the answer is repetitive and has grammatical errors. Use linking words (for example, firstly/also/because) and be more specific about one or two main triggers. Explain briefly how they affect you rather than repeating similar phrases.

Example: I get impatient mainly because of external delays and physical discomfort. For example, when traffic makes me late or when I'm overheating, I become short-tempered because I feel stressed and uncomfortable.

Suggestion: This answer is clear and structured but needs smoother phrasing and one linking phrase to connect ideas. Start with a topic sentence, then give the condition and an example or brief reason to support it.

Example: It depends on the activity; I'm not always patient with repetitive tasks. However, if I understand how the task fits into a long-term goal, I become more committed and willing to persist until it's finished.

Suggestion: Good content and clear occupation reference, but there are grammatical issues and a confusing phrase (“you can't write designing”). Use a concise topic sentence and one or two specific examples of why patience is needed in your job, linking them logically.

Example: Yes, my job as a structural engineer requires a lot of patience. For example, designing safe buildings involves checking many detailed calculations and coordinating carefully with architects and mechanical engineers to avoid mistakes.

Suggestion: Your answer is honest but a little fragmented and contains grammatical errors. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give a brief reason and a specific example of how you control yourself now compared to childhood. Use linking words (for example, therefore/so) to improve flow.

Example: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because I understand my emotions better. For instance, when I start to feel irritated, I recognize the physical signs and choose to take a short break or breathe deeply, which helps me calm down.

× Emerald Cesar may have a bit of hot temperatures, but I know that I have this problem and I'm working on it.

✓ Emerald Cesar may have a bit of a hot temper, but I know I have this problem and I'm working on it.

The phrase 'hot temperatures' is incorrect for describing a personality trait; 'hot temper' is the correct noun phrase. Also 'I know that I have' is wordy; 'I know I have' is more natural. Use 'a hot temper' to refer to being easily angered.

× Or it could be anything, it could be the people, it could be the traffic or it could be myself, it could be the weather.

✓ It could be anything: people, traffic, myself, or the weather.

The original repeats 'it could be' and uses 'myself' incorrectly as a subject; 'myself' is a reflexive pronoun and should not replace 'me' or 'I' as a subject. Use a clear list and the subject pronoun 'I' or 'myself' only reflexively. Here a simple noun list is appropriate.

× But it always start with myself.

✓ But it always starts with me.

Subject-verb agreement requires 'starts' for third-person singular 'it.' Also 'myself' is incorrectly used as a subject; use 'me' as the object of 'starts with.'

× So something trigger but it starts with my bodies getting hot and me getting hot temper because I don't like my body being hot.

✓ So something triggers it, but it starts with my body getting hot and my temper rising because I don't like my body being hot.

Use 'triggers' to agree with singular subject 'something.' 'Bodies' is incorrect plural; use 'body.' 'Me getting hot temper' is ungrammatical — use 'my temper rising.' Clarify clause order and possessive adjectives: 'my body' and 'my temper.'

× It depends what kind of activity that is and not that patient.

✓ It depends on what kind of activity it is; I'm not that patient.

Add the preposition 'on' after 'depends.' Use a semantically complete clause 'it is' rather than 'that is.' 'Not that patient' should be part of a full clause with subject 'I.'

× But if I know it's part of my longer plan, if I know the end goal, then I'm more committed to see it through.

✓ But if I know it's part of a long-term plan and I know the end goal, then I'm more committed to seeing it through.

Use 'long-term' instead of 'longer' to describe a plan. Use parallel conjunction 'and' to combine conditions. After 'committed' use the gerund 'to seeing' (a preposition + gerund), not the base verb 'see.'

× Yes, of course. I'm working as a structural engineer and you can't write designing of buildings otherwise it's going to collapse.

✓ Yes, of course. I work as a structural engineer, and you can't design buildings carelessly; otherwise they might collapse.

'I'm working as' is acceptable but 'I work as' is more natural for occupation. 'You can't write designing of buildings' is ungrammatical — use 'design buildings' or 'design them incorrectly.' Also connect the clauses logically and use 'they might collapse' to refer to buildings.

× Like there's so many little details that we need to work with and both within our team and also with the architects and the mechanical engineer.

✓ There are so many little details we need to work on, both within our team and with the architects and the mechanical engineers.

Use 'There are' for plural 'many little details' (there be issue and subject-verb agreement). 'Work with' is acceptable but 'work on' is more natural for details. Use plural 'mechanical engineers' to match coordination if more than one; keep parallel structure 'both... and.'

× I think so. I have more reasonings.

✓ I think so. I have more reasons.

'Reasonings' is not idiomatic English; use the plural noun 'reasons.'

× I learn how to control myself more.

✓ I have learned how to control myself better.

Use the present perfect 'have learned' to indicate a change from past to now. 'More' modifying 'control' is awkward; use adverb 'better.' Reflexive 'myself' is correct here.

× At least now that I feel a bit of that discomfort within my body, I know to be aware of it and let it go.

✓ At least now that I feel that discomfort in my body, I know to be aware of it and let it go.

'A bit of that discomfort' is wordy; 'that discomfort' or 'a bit of discomfort' are better. 'Within my body' is wordy; 'in my body' is more natural. The structure 'I know to be aware of it' is slightly awkward but acceptable; alternatively 'I know to notice it and let it go.'