Patience— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make your answer more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), then give one specific example. Reduce hesitations and grammar errors (use comparative forms correctly). Use linking words like "because" or "for example".

Example: Yes, I am more patient now than a year ago because I pause to think before I speak. For example, I used to react quickly in arguments, but now I take a deep breath and choose my words carefully to avoid hurting others.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear cause and one specific example. Correct grammar (use "when you are angry" and "you might say things you regret"). Use a linking phrase like "for example" to connect cause and example.

Example: Strong emotions, especially anger, make me impatient because I feel like reacting immediately. For example, when I'm angry I might snap at someone and later regret what I said, so I now take a moment to calm down before I speak.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence about your feeling, then give one focused example. Avoid repetition and fix small grammar issues. Use linking words like "for example" and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Example: I don't mind doing things for a long time; I actually enjoy sustained activities. For example, I love spending time looking after my dog and would happily do that every day for the rest of my life.

Suggestion: Give a firm topic sentence and one specific reason or short example. Correct grammar ("requires" without extra 's', "customers" etc.). Reduce hesitations and use linking words like "because" or "for example".

Example: Yes, my job requires a lot of patience because I work in customer service. For example, I often help upset customers with different personalities, so I stay calm and listen carefully to solve their problems.

Suggestion: Give a clear direct answer then one specific example showing change. Fix grammar ("much more patient"; "I think more carefully before buying things"). Use linking words like "for example" or "because" and avoid filler words.

Example: Yes, I am much more patient now than when I was a child because I think carefully before making decisions. For example, I now consider whether I really need an item before buying it, whereas before I bought things impulsively.

× While comparing myself in the previous year, I'm, I'm, I'm most more patient than I was, umm, in term of, uh, thinking carefully before speaking, Something that also a, umm, special skill, avoiding saying too much, uh, unnecessary things that might hurt people.

✓ Compared with last year, I am much more patient than I was in terms of thinking carefully before speaking. It is also a special skill to avoid saying unnecessary things that might hurt people.

The student used inconsistent verb forms and awkward present-tense phrasing (repeated 'I'm, I'm'), and mixed comparative forms ('most more'). Use present simple 'I am' for current states and 'compared with last year' to compare time. Replace 'in term of' with 'in terms of'. Combine ideas into clear sentences and use 'much more patient' instead of 'most more patient'. Use infinitive or noun phrases correctly: 'to avoid saying unnecessary things' or 'avoiding saying' consistently.

× I will say emotion would make you forget about being patient for some.

✓ I would say that emotions can make you forget to be patient sometimes.

Pronoun and noun number mismatch: 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions' to match general statement; 'for some' is incorrect — use 'sometimes'. Use modal 'can' to express general tendency and 'forget to be patient' is the correct verb pattern.

× For for instance when you angry you always try to say something that you could have did the person who you speaking to.

✓ For instance, when you are angry you often try to say something that you could have done to the person you are speaking to.

Missing auxiliary 'are' for 'you are angry' (present). Use 'often' for frequency. The past perfect/modal structure 'could have done' requires the past participle 'done', not 'did'. Also correct relative clause order: 'the person you are speaking to.'

× So it's always important to be a patient person.

✓ So it's always important to be a patient person.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable but article use can be optional; however, keeping 'a patient person' is correct. No change needed. (Included to acknowledge correctness.)

× Well, it's something I really enjoy.

✓ Well, it's something I really enjoy doing.

The verb 'enjoy' usually requires a gerund when followed by an action. Adding 'doing' completes the idea and matches the following explanation about duration.

× I wouldn't mind doing it for a long time, such as looking at the my dog is something I would I would be happy to do in my entire life because I really love my dog and I can't live without him.

✓ I wouldn't mind doing it for a long time. For example, looking at my dog is something I would be happy to do for my entire life because I really love him and I can't live without him.

Remove duplicate 'the' before 'my dog' and fix repetition 'I would I would'. Use 'for example' instead of 'such as' to introduce an example clause. Use 'for my entire life' (preposition 'for') and avoid repeating subject pronouns unnecessarily. 'My dog' then 'him' is acceptable pronoun reference.

× So something like that I would do for the rest of my life.

✓ So I would do something like that for the rest of my life.

Word order is slightly awkward; move subject before verb for natural English. Tense 'would' indicates hypothetical preference and is acceptable.

× Yes, it's, it's always requires me to be patient the whole time, especially with customer services, umm, because dealing with their different personalities, you need to be patient.

✓ Yes, it always requires me to be patient, especially in customer service, because dealing with different personalities requires patience.

Remove duplicate 'it's', use 'it always requires' (not 'it's always requires'). Use 'customer service' (uncountable) instead of 'customer services'. Recast final clause to match subject-verb agreement and use noun 'patience' or verb 'requires patience'.

× Umm, not everybody, umm at what kind.

✓ Not everybody is the same type of person.

Original fragment is incomplete and ungrammatical. Provide a clear clause: 'Not everybody is the same type of person' to convey differing personalities.

× So therefore you need to be a patient.

✓ Therefore, you need to be patient.

Article 'a' is unnecessary before uncountable adjective 'patient' used predicatively. Use 'patient' (adjective) without article.

× Wow, yes, I'm worth more patient now.

✓ Wow, yes, I'm much more patient now.

'Worth more patient' is incorrect. Use 'much more patient' to form comparative degree with adverb 'much' modifying 'more'.

× Comparing myself in the past, umm, I think more carefully before buying something, before spending uh, excessively on something that I, umm, not really need it.

✓ Compared with the past, I think more carefully before buying something and before spending excessively on things that I don't really need.

Use 'Compared with' or 'Compared to' for comparisons. Use parallel structure 'before buying... and before spending...' Use negative form 'I don't really need' (subject+auxiliary+negation) and remove redundant 'it'. 'Excessively' should modify spending; place it accordingly.

× Umm, so therefore I'm much more patient now.

✓ So, therefore, I'm much more patient now.

Sentence is acceptable; only punctuation/pausing improved. Tense 'I'm' present is correct to state current condition.