Patience— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be clearer and more accurate: start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar, avoid filler words, and give one specific, concise example with linking words. Keep to under five sentences.

Example: Yes, I consider myself more patient now than before. For example, at work I listen carefully to my colleagues and think before I speak, so I follow instructions accurately and complete tasks more productively.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence, explain one specific trigger and describe how you react, using linking words and correct verb forms. Avoid vague phrasing and reduce hesitation.

Example: I become impatient when I feel strong emotions, especially if things don't go as I expected. For example, if a colleague makes a mistake on an important task, I sometimes get upset and speak sharply, but I try to pause and calm down before responding.

Suggestion: Start with a direct statement about your feelings, use specific examples and correct word choice, and avoid repetition. Limit to a few coherent sentences with linking words.

Example: If I enjoy an activity, I don't mind doing it for a long time. For instance, I happily spend hours caring for my dog and family members because they give me companionship and love, so time feels worthwhile.

Suggestion: Answer directly that your job requires patience, then give a specific example of a situation and describe how you handle it using linking words and correct grammar.

Example: Yes, my job in customer service requires a lot of patience. For example, when a customer becomes angry about a problem, I stay calm, listen to their complaint, and then work with them to solve the issue politely.

Suggestion: Make a clear comparison between past and present, give a specific example showing increased patience, and use correct comparative language. Keep it concise and coherent.

Example: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. For example, I now wait for sales before buying things, which helps me save money and avoid impulsive purchases.

× Well, I'm a much more patient now.

✓ Well, I'm much more patient now.

Remove the unnecessary article 'a' before the adjective 'much more patient'. 'Patient' here is an adjective describing a state, so we say 'I'm much more patient' rather than 'I'm a much more patient'. Suggestion: Use 'I'm much more patient now' for correct adjective usage and natural speech.

× Comparing myself in the past, I'm now think more toefully before saying anything because I don't want to hug the other people.

✓ Compared with the past, I now think more carefully before saying anything because I don't want to hurt other people.

Multiple errors: 'Comparing myself in the past' is awkward; use 'Compared with the past' or 'Compared to how I was before'. 'I'm now think' mixes auxiliary and base form; correct is 'I now think'. 'Toefully' is incorrect word; intended 'carefully' or 'thoughtfully'. 'Hug' is wrong in context; likely 'hurt'. 'the other people' should be 'other people' without 'the'. Suggestion: Use clear comparative phrase and correct adverb 'carefully' and verb 'hurt'.

× For instance, at work play, I usually descend fully to what my colleagues say.

✓ For instance, at work I usually listen carefully to what my colleagues say.

'At work play' is incorrect; 'at work' is sufficient. 'Descend fully to' is wrong verb choice and structure; likely 'listen carefully to' or 'take fully into account'. Use a natural collocation: 'listen carefully to what my colleagues say'. Suggestion: Replace unusual verbs with common collocations like 'listen to' or 'follow'.

× So from there I'll follow umm the instruction and do more and be more productive.

✓ So from there I'll follow the instructions and be more productive.

Simplify and correct noun number: 'instruction' should be plural 'instructions' in this context. 'Do more and be more productive' is wordy; 'be more productive' covers the meaning. Remove filler words for clarity.

× Well, when I have a strong emotion, I usually be impatient person.

✓ Well, when I have strong emotions, I am usually an impatient person.

Use 'am' for present simple rather than 'be'. 'A' is needed before 'impatient person'. Also plural 'strong emotions' is more natural. Suggestion: Use present simple 'I am' and include the article.

× For instance, when I, when something done, uh, not in how I want to say, usually get really upset and, uh, would say whatever to hurt the person when I'm speaking to.

✓ For instance, when something is not done the way I want, I usually get really upset and sometimes say things that hurt the person I'm speaking to.

Missing auxiliary 'is' in 'something done'; correct form is 'something is not done' or 'something is not done the way I want'. Subject 'I' missing before 'usually get'. 'Would say whatever' is vague; replace with 'sometimes say things that hurt'. Rearranged for clarity and grammatical correctness. Suggestion: Use complete clauses with auxiliaries and clear verbs.

× I know I should not because it's not fair for that person to.

✓ I know I should not because it's not fair to that person.

Incorrect ending 'to' and awkward preposition use. Use 'to that person' or 'toward that person'. Also 'I know I should not' is vague; better 'I know I should not do that' but kept concise for correction. Suggestion: Use 'to that person' or 'toward that person'.

× Well, I will say if something I really enjoy, I wouldn't mind doing it for the entire life.

✓ Well, I would say if something I really enjoy, I wouldn't mind doing it for my entire life.

Mix of modal tenses: 'I will say' → 'I would say' is more tentative. 'For the entire life' is unnatural; use 'for my entire life'. Keep conditional/modal consistency. Suggestion: Use 'I would say' and 'my entire life'.

× Uh, for instance, looking after my dog and beloved one in the family, uh, because they bring me the mentor, umm, and infection.

✓ For instance, looking after my dog and my loved ones in the family, because they bring me comfort and affection.

'Beloved one' is awkward; use 'my loved ones'. 'They bring me the mentor' is incorrect; likely 'comfort'. 'Infection' is wrong word; intended 'affection'. Suggestion: Use common nouns 'comfort' and 'affection'.

× They give me love. So something like that. I wouldn't mind doing it for the.

✓ They give me love, so I wouldn't mind doing that forever.

Fragment 'So something like that.' and incomplete 'for the.' Replace with a complete sentence 'I wouldn't mind doing that forever' to express duration clearly. Suggestion: Avoid sentence fragments and complete the thought.

× Well, my job info mainly in customer services and customer have different personality in temporary than sorry.

✓ Well, my job is mainly in customer service, and customers have different personalities at different times.

'Job info' is incorrect; use 'my job is'. 'Customer services' → 'customer service' as a field. 'Customer have' needs plural 'customers have' and 'different personality in temporary than sorry' is garbled; likely 'different personalities at different times'. Suggestion: Use clear subject-verb and correct prepositions.

× Umm, I need to be patient with uh any customers because if they get angry I need to be calm down and uh so the situation the issue.

✓ I need to be patient with any customers because if they get angry I need to stay calm and resolve the issue.

Incorrect form 'be calm down' should be 'stay calm'. 'So the situation the issue' is unclear; 'resolve the issue' expresses intent. Use base verb forms after modal 'need to'. Suggestion: Use 'stay calm' and 'resolve the issue'.

× I'm a small patient now, comparing myself when I want a choice.

✓ I'm more patient now compared with when I was a child.

'A small patient' is incorrect; use 'more patient'. 'Comparing myself when I want a choice' is unclear; context asks about childhood, so use 'compared with when I was a child'. Suggestion: Use 'more patient now' and specify the comparison.

× I think hopefully before making a purchase something and waiting for it to go on sale so I can save money and avoid spending excessively, possibly uh, on something I don't really need.

✓ I try to wait before making a purchase and wait for items to go on sale so I can save money and avoid spending excessively on things I don't really need.

'I think hopefully before making a purchase something' is ungrammatical. Use clear verb 'I try to wait' or 'I try to be patient before making a purchase'. 'Waiting for it to go on sale' should be 'wait for items to go on sale'. Streamline sentence and correct noun choices. Suggestion: Use 'I try to wait before making a purchase' and 'items' or 'things' consistently.