Patience— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Open with a direct topic sentence and make the supporting detail clearer and more relevant. Avoid fragments and ensure grammatical correctness (e.g., use full sentences and correct connectors). Add one concise reason or brief example linking your long tenure to patience.

Example: Yes, I would say I am a patient person because I have stayed at the same company for over ten years. This long tenure shows I can tolerate routine and handle workplace challenges calmly, for example by working through difficult projects without giving up.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence naming what makes you impatient, then give two brief, specific reasons connected with feelings. Use linking words (for example, furthermore) and avoid awkward phrasing ("important to daily routine" → "an important part of my routine").

Example: I feel impatient when my usual ways of relaxing are disrupted. For example, I get irritated if I cannot have a beer after work because it is an important part of my routine to unwind, and I also feel frustrated when I have to wait in long queues to get into popular ramen shops.

Suggestion: Use a clear topic sentence and correct grammar ("It depends on what I have to do"). Group examples and use linking words ("for instance", "however") smoothly. Be slightly more specific about why monotony is unpleasant.

Example: It depends on the task: if I enjoy it, time flies; if it is monotonous, I get bored. For instance, watching baseball, researching environmental issues and writing articles feel engaging because I am genuinely interested, whereas repetitive administrative procedures feel tedious and make time drag.

Suggestion: Good direct answer and relevant example. Improve fluency by tightening phrasing and correcting minor grammar ("wait for interviewees", "important interviews" → "important interviewees" or "key sources"). Also vary vocabulary slightly (e.g., "sources", "sensitive cases").

Example: Yes, patience is essential in my job as a journalist. For example, I often have to wait an hour or more for key sources to arrive, especially when covering sensitive cases like murder or corruption, and I must stay calm and prepared during the wait.

Suggestion: Clear and well-structured answer. To improve, make the contrast stronger with a concise linking phrase ("whereas now") and give one brief reason or consequence of increased patience (e.g., better relationships or work performance).

Example: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. For example, as a primary school baseball player I sometimes lost my temper with teammates, whereas now I make a conscious effort to stay calm to avoid conflicts and maintain better relationships.

× While it is common for people in Japan to quit jobs within a few years after entering companies.

✓ It is common for people in Japan to quit jobs within a few years after joining companies.

This fragment begins with 'While' but is a sentence fragment because it lacks a main clause to complete the contrast. Replace 'entering companies' with 'joining companies' for natural collocation and remove 'While' or attach to the previous sentence. Suggestion: combine with previous sentence or remove 'While' to form a complete sentence. Example combined: 'I consider myself a patient person because I have worked at my company for over 10 years, although it is common for people in Japan to quit jobs within a few years after joining companies.'

× I sometimes feel irritated when I cannot drink a cup of beer after finishing my work because it is important to daily routine for me to unwind and relax.

✓ I sometimes feel irritated when I cannot have a beer after finishing work because it is an important part of my daily routine to unwind and relax.

Errors: article and collocation. 'a cup of beer' is unnatural in this context; use 'have a beer' or 'drink a beer'. 'finishing my work' can be 'finishing work'. 'it is important to daily routine for me' is incorrect word order and missing article; use 'an important part of my daily routine.' Suggest using natural collocations and correct article use.

× I sometimes feel frustrated when I have to queue for a long time to enter ramen shops in Japan.

✓ I sometimes feel frustrated when I have to queue for a long time to get into ramen shops in Japan.

Use of verb for entering places: 'enter' is grammatical but collocates better with 'get into' or 'get into/into' when describing waiting in line. 'Queue for a long time to get into' is more natural English. Alternatively, 'queue for a long time to enter' is acceptable, but 'get into' improves naturalness.

× It depends on things what I have to do.

✓ It depends on what I have to do.

Incorrect word order and extra word 'things'. The correct pattern is 'It depends on what I have to do.' Remove 'things' and place 'what' directly after 'depends on.' This forms a correct subordinate clause.

× For example, I feel time flies when I do things what I like, such as watching baseball, researching environmental issues and writing articles because I'm genuinely interested in those topics.

✓ For example, time seems to fly when I do things that I like, such as watching baseball, researching environmental issues, and writing articles because I'm genuinely interested in those topics.

Use of relative pronoun: 'what I like' is nonstandard here; use 'that I like' or just 'I like.' Also 'I feel time flies' is awkward—use 'time seems to fly' or 'I feel time flies by.' Added commas in a list for clarity.

× However, I don't like monotonous things such as procedures.

✓ However, I don't like monotonous tasks such as administrative procedures.

'Things' is vague; 'tasks' fits better. 'Procedures' alone is acceptable but specifying 'administrative procedures' clarifies meaning. This is a lexical improvement rather than strict grammar, but it improves naturalness.

× Yes, I definitely think being patient is very important in my job because I am a journalist.

✓ Yes, I definitely think being patient is very important in my job because I am a journalist.

No correction needed; sentence is grammatical. Included here for completeness: article usage is correct.

× For example, it is common for us to wait interviewees to arrive for more than one hour, especially when I have to contact important interviews about the serious issues such as murder and corruption.

✓ For example, it is common for us to wait for interviewees to arrive for more than an hour, especially when I have to contact important interviewees about serious issues such as murder and corruption.

Missing preposition 'for' after 'wait.' 'More than one hour' is more naturally 'more than an hour.' 'Important interviews' should be 'important interviewees' (people), and 'the serious issues' should be 'serious issues' without 'the.' These changes fix preposition use and noun choice.

× Yes, I definitely think I'm more patient than I was in childhood.

✓ Yes, I definitely think I'm more patient than I was in childhood.

Sentence is grammatical; no third-person singular issue. Included to show no change needed.

× For example, when I was in primary school and in a baseball team, I sometimes lost my temper with my friends and teammates.

✓ For example, when I was in primary school and on a baseball team, I sometimes lost my temper with my friends and teammates.

Preposition: 'in a baseball team' is less natural than 'on a baseball team.' Tense 'I sometimes lost' is appropriate for past habitual actions. Correction improves preposition choice.

× However, now I try to keep calm as much as possible to avoid conflict.

✓ However, now I try to keep calm as much as possible to avoid conflict.

Sentence is correct. No reflexive pronoun needed; included for completeness.