Patience— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No and brief reason), then add one supporting detail. Fix sentence fragments and verb forms, and avoid repetition.

Example: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I enjoy helping others. For example, when classmates ask me questions, I take time to explain the answers clearly and calmly so they understand.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence and give a specific, grammatical example. Use linking words (for example, because) and correct vocabulary (impatience). Avoid unclear phrases.

Example: I feel impatient when people show signs of impatience, such as frowning or tapping their feet. For example, if someone rolls their eyes while I’m explaining something, I feel they are unwilling to listen and the conversation becomes frustrating.

Suggestion: Start with a direct topic sentence and use correct tenses and nouns. Use linking words like however, but, or although. Be specific about how your feelings change over time.

Example: At first I usually feel interested and excited about a new task, but if it involves repeating the same actions for a long time, I quickly become bored. To stay motivated, I try to set small goals and take short breaks.

Suggestion: This answer is clear but can be improved by adding a linking phrase and a concrete example. Use more varied vocabulary (explain patiently, simplify legal terms) and one supporting detail.

Example: Definitely yes. My job requires sustained focus and a lot of patient communication because many clients do not know legal terms. For example, I often simplify complex legal concepts and repeat explanations until they understand.

Suggestion: Use correct past tense and avoid spelling errors. Provide a clear comparison with a linking word (because/whereas) and a specific example of what made you more patient.

Example: Yes, I am more patient now than as a child because I can focus on complex tasks for longer periods. For example, as a child I was easily distracted by toys, but now I handle demanding work projects that require sustained attention.

× I think so because I'm glad to help others who are in need.

✓ I think so because I'm glad to help others who are in need.

No preposition error here; sentence is acceptable. Keep as is.

× My classmates ask some questions in the.

✓ My classmates ask me some questions sometimes.

Original sentence has incorrect structure and an extra preposition 'in the' that makes it ungrammatical. Replace with 'ask me some questions sometimes' to show who is asked and when. Suggestion: include the object 'me' and a time adverb like 'sometimes'.

× I would like to answer it patiently and correctly.

✓ I would like to answer them patiently and correctly.

The pronoun 'it' does not agree with plural 'questions'; use 'them' to match plural. Also keep plural agreement between pronoun and antecedent.

× Maybe the facial emotions and the body language shows the impatiency.

✓ Maybe facial expressions and body language show impatience.

Use the noun 'expressions' rather than 'emotions' for facial cues; 'shows' must be 'show' to agree with plural subject. 'Impatiency' is uncommon; use the noun 'impatience'. Also remove unnecessary articles for natural phrasing.

× For example, when someone from their eyebrows or tap their feet.

✓ For example, when someone frowns or taps their feet.

Original has missing verbs and incorrect fragments ('from their eyebrows'). Use verbs 'frowns' and 'taps' to form a complete clause. Maintain subject-verb agreement: 'someone frowns' and 'taps their feet'.

× I would feel like they're inefficient and unwilling to continue this conversation.

✓ I would feel like they are impatient or unwilling to continue the conversation.

Use 'they are' instead of contraction 'they're' for clarity in writing is optional but acceptable; more importantly, 'inefficient' is inappropriate for a person in this context—use 'impatient'. Also change 'this conversation' to 'the conversation' for general reference.

× Maybe at the beginning I would be interested in it and very exciting, but if it ask me to repeat the same actions for long time I would feel bored.

✓ At the beginning I might be interested and very excited, but if it asks me to repeat the same actions for a long time I would feel bored.

Use 'excited' (adjective) not 'exciting' (which describes something that causes excitement). 'Might' fits better than 'would' for possibility. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'it asks'. Add article 'a' before 'long time'.

× Definitely yes, because it requires me to focus on one thing for a long time and communicate with other people who have less knowledge about the law.

✓ Definitely yes, because it requires me to focus on one thing for a long time and to communicate with other people who have less knowledge about the law.

Add 'to' before second verb for parallel infinitive structure ('to focus' and 'to communicate'). Otherwise tense and meaning are correct.

× So I need to repeat and explain.

✓ So I need to repeat things and explain them.

Make objects explicit: 'repeat things' and 'explain them' improves clarity. Grammar category corrected is use of verb objects and gerund/infinitive clarity.

× When I was a kid I have no ability to focus on one task for a long time because I usually distrapped by other friends or toys and so on.

✓ When I was a kid I had no ability to focus on one task for a long time because I was usually distracted by friends or toys.

Use past tense 'had' to match 'When I was a kid'. 'Distrapped' is incorrect; correct verb is 'distracted' and requires passive 'was distracted' or active 'I was usually distracted'. Remove 'other' before 'friends' and 'and so on' is unnecessary.

× But now I am facing a lot of complex tasks which asked me to.

✓ But now I face a lot of complex tasks that require me to concentrate.

Original 'which asked me to' is ungrammatical and mixes tenses. Use present simple 'face' to state current situation and 'require me to' to indicate what the tasks demand. Replace vague 'to' with specific verb 'concentrate' to complete the idea.