Machine— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to make your answer more structured and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words like 'because' or 'and'. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer within 4-5 sentences.

Example: My favourite machine at home is the vacuum cleaner because it helps my mother clean the house quickly. It saves time and prevents her from bending down, which is good for her back. Additionally, using it provides some light exercise, making cleaning less tiring.

Suggestion: Focus on clarity and grammar. Use linking words like 'because' to connect ideas and avoid repetition. Also, try to use gender-neutral language and be more specific in your explanation.

Example: I think washing machines and vacuum cleaners are very important at home because many people work both at home and outside. These machines save time and make household chores easier, allowing people to focus on other tasks.

Suggestion: Your answer is good but can be improved by using more formal language and clearer linking words. Also, avoid informal phrases like 'Yeah' and use 'Yes' instead.

Example: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine. This helps me understand how to operate it properly and allows me to explain it clearly to my mother when I am not at home.

Suggestion: Try to avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' properly to connect your ideas. Also, be more specific about why reading instructions is important.

Example: Yes, it is important to read the instructions because new machines can be complicated. By reading the manual, we learn how to use the machine safely and effectively, which prevents mistakes and damage.

× My favorite machine in my home is vacuum cleaner because it is very useful to my mother.

✓ My favorite machine in my home is the vacuum cleaner because it is very useful to my mother.

The noun 'vacuum cleaner' is countable and singular here, so it requires the definite article 'the' to specify the particular machine. Omitting the article causes the sentence to sound incomplete or incorrect.

× So we can save a little bit of time by using such type of machine and my mother no need to bend down during cleaning or anything and it gives her like a much exercise also at the same time.

✓ So we can save a little bit of time by using such a type of machine, and my mother does not need to bend down during cleaning or anything, and it gives her quite a bit of exercise at the same time.

The phrase 'such type of machine' should be 'such a type of machine' to be grammatically correct. Also, 'my mother no need' is incorrect; it should be 'my mother does not need' to express negation properly. The phrase 'like a much exercise' is incorrect; 'quite a bit of exercise' or 'a lot of exercise' is appropriate. Proper conjunctions and punctuation improve clarity.

× Nowadays it's really important in one's home, there should be at least a washing machine and as I mean vacuum cleaner.

✓ Nowadays it's really important in one's home to have at least a washing machine and, I mean, a vacuum cleaner.

The phrase 'and as I mean vacuum cleaner' is awkward and incorrect. It should be 'and, I mean, a vacuum cleaner' with the article 'a' before 'vacuum cleaner' because it is singular and countable. Also, the sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× Because nowadays each one is each woman is working and she's doing work in home and at office.

✓ Because nowadays each woman is working and she is doing work at home and at the office.

The phrase 'each one is each woman' is redundant; 'each woman' suffices. The preposition 'in home' is incorrect; it should be 'at home'. Similarly, 'at office' should be 'at the office' because 'office' is a specific place requiring the definite article.

× So it saves a little bit of time for her by use of this machine.

✓ So it saves a little bit of time for her by using this machine.

The phrase 'by use of this machine' is incorrect; the correct form is 'by using this machine' where 'using' is the present participle verb form used after 'by' to indicate the means.

× Yeah, I do read the instructions before using a machine so that I could explain that clearly to my mother whenever I'm not in my home.

✓ Yeah, I do read the instructions before using a machine so that I can explain that clearly to my mother whenever I'm not at home.

The modal verb 'could' suggests past ability or conditional mood, but here the speaker refers to a present or future ability, so 'can' is appropriate. Also, 'in my home' is better expressed as 'at home' in this context.

× So she'll be able to use that type of machines and she could understand clearly if I explain her rather than her reading directly.

✓ So she'll be able to use that type of machine and she could understand clearly if I explain it to her rather than her reading directly.

The phrase 'that type of machines' is incorrect; it should be 'that type of machine' because 'type' is singular. The verb 'explain' requires an object, so 'explain her' is incorrect; it should be 'explain it to her'. This clarifies the meaning and corrects pronoun usage.

× Yeah, it's very important to read the instructions because it's a very new machine and we are not experienced to such type of missions before.

✓ Yeah, it's very important to read the instructions because it's a very new machine and we are not experienced with such types of machines before.

The phrase 'not experienced to' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'experienced with'. Also, 'such type of missions' is incorrect; it should be 'such types of machines' to match the context and plural form.

× So read by reading manual or by reading instructions.

✓ So by reading the manual or the instructions,

The phrase 'read by reading manual' is awkward and incorrect. It should be 'by reading the manual' with the definite article 'the' before 'manual' and 'instructions' to specify them properly.

× So we can get to know what type of what type of the uses the users are there and what type we can do.

✓ So we can get to know what types of uses there are and what we can do with them.

The original sentence is repetitive and unclear. The corrected sentence removes redundancy and clarifies the meaning by properly structuring the sentence and using correct plural forms and word order.