Machine— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to speak more clearly and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Also, use correct vocabulary and sentence structure. For example, say 'My favourite machine at home is the vacuum cleaner because it helps me do household chores efficiently.'

Example: My favourite machine at home is the vacuum cleaner because it helps me do household chores efficiently and saves time.

Suggestion: Good content but improve grammar and linking words. For example, use 'In the past, we did not have washing machines, so we had to wash clothes by hand, which was time-consuming and exhausting. However, with washing machines, we can do laundry while cooking or doing other chores.'

Example: In the past, we did not have washing machines, so we had to wash clothes by hand, which was time-consuming and exhausting. However, with washing machines, we can do laundry while cooking or doing other chores.

Suggestion: Try to use simpler and clearer sentences, and avoid repetition. For example, say 'I used to read the instructions before using a machine, but now I usually watch YouTube videos or search online to learn how to use it before I buy it.'

Example: I used to read the instructions before using a machine, but now I usually watch YouTube videos or search online to learn how to use it before I buy it.

Suggestion: Focus on clear and correct sentences. Avoid unclear phrases like 'upgrade machines' and 'understand that inflation is the vital part'. For example, say 'Yes, reading instructions is important to use machines safely and effectively.'

Example: Yes, reading instructions is important to use machines safely and effectively.

× The faving machine in my home will be the decent vacuum cleaner.

✓ The favourite machine in my home is the decent vacuum cleaner.

The word 'faving' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'favourite'. Also, 'will be' is inappropriate here as the student is stating a current preference, so 'is' fits better.

× I like to do household chores and having uh, efficient and, uh, and uh, aerobic machines like vacuum cleaner is a is a plus quite in.

✓ I like to do household chores and having efficient and aerobic machines like the vacuum cleaner is quite a plus.

The sentence has awkward phrasing and missing articles. 'Vacuum cleaner' needs 'the' before it. Also, 'a is a plus quite in' is incorrect word order and redundant; corrected to 'is quite a plus'.

× Last time we do not have washing machine then we need to wash our clothes by hand.

✓ Last time we did not have a washing machine, so we needed to wash our clothes by hand.

The sentence mixes present and past tense incorrectly. 'Do not have' should be 'did not have' to indicate past. Also, 'washing machine' needs the article 'a'. 'Then' is better replaced with 'so' to show consequence.

× Last time we do not have washing machine then we need to wash our clothes by hand.

✓ Last time we did not have a washing machine, so we needed to wash our clothes by hand.

The noun 'washing machine' requires the indefinite article 'a' when mentioned for the first time.

× But with the washing machine we can just wash our clothes when we cooking or doing household chores.

✓ But with the washing machine, we can just wash our clothes when we are cooking or doing household chores.

The verb 'cooking' needs the auxiliary verb 'are' to form the present continuous tense 'we are cooking'.

× Last time in the past I used to read the instruction before using the machine, but nowadays I always Google and go to YouTube to browse the use of how to use that those machine before I bind it.

✓ In the past, I used to read the instructions before using the machine, but nowadays I always Google and go to YouTube to learn how to use those machines before I buy them.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions'. 'That those machine' is incorrect; 'those machines' is correct plural form. 'Bind it' is incorrect; the intended word is 'buy them'. Also, 'browse the use of how to use' is awkward; 'learn how to use' is clearer.

× Last time in the past I used to read the instruction before using the machine, but nowadays I always Google and go to YouTube to browse the use of how to use that those machine before I bind it.

✓ In the past, I used to read the instructions before using the machine, but nowadays I always Google and go to YouTube to learn how to use those machines before I buy them.

The pronouns 'that those machine' and 'bind it' are incorrect. 'Those machines' is the correct plural demonstrative pronoun and noun agreement. 'Bind it' is a wrong verb choice; 'buy them' is appropriate.

× Yes. I think it's very important to read the instructions that came together with the machines in order to upgrade machines safely and effectively understand that inflation is the vital part, uh, so that we can operate the machine in a efficient way and in a Safeway.

✓ Yes. I think it's very important to read the instructions that come with the machines in order to use the machines safely and effectively. Understanding the instructions is vital so that we can operate the machine in an efficient and safe way.

'Came together with' is awkward; 'come with' is better. 'Upgrade machines' is incorrect in this context; likely meant 'use the machines'. 'Understand that inflation is the vital part' is unclear and incorrect; corrected to 'Understanding the instructions is vital'. 'In a efficient way' should be 'in an efficient way'. 'Safeway' is a noun; the correct adjective is 'safe way'.