Machine— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答较为冗长且有重复表达，建议简洁明了地表达观点，并适当使用连接词使内容更连贯。

Example: My favourite machine at home is the refrigerator because it works efficiently without any problems, which makes my life much easier and less stressful.

Suggestion: 回答内容具体且有逻辑，但可以使用更多连接词使表达更流畅，同时避免口头语“umm”。

Example: Yes, washing machines and sweeping machines are increasingly important because they save a lot of time, allowing people to focus more on education and health, which benefits them in the long run.

Suggestion: 回答中存在重复和口头语，建议简化表达，避免重复，并用更自然的语言描述困难。

Example: I try to read the instructions, but they often contain complex terms that make it difficult and tiring to understand.

Suggestion: 回答表达清晰，但口头语较多，建议减少“umm”等填充词，使用更正式的表达。

Example: Although I don't always read instructions carefully, I believe it is important because it helps people use devices safely and avoid accidents.

× I love it because it has been functioning really well for the past few years since I bought it and there was actually no problem and no technical issues.

✓ I love it because it has been functioning really well for the past few years since I bought it and there were actually no problems and no technical issues.

这里的主语是复数（problems 和 technical issues），所以谓语动词应该用复数形式 were，而不是单数 was。

× And so that that made me really, really relaxed and not as stressful as in the past.

✓ And so that made me really, really relaxed and less stressed than in the past.

这里的 'not as stressful' 用法不当，stressful 是形容词，表示使人感到压力的，应该用形容词 'stressed' 来描述人的状态，且比较级用 'less stressed' 更合适。

× I would say that these days, these two types of devices are becoming more and more important than in the past.

✓ I would say that these days, these two types of devices are becoming more and more important than they were in the past.

比较时需要明确比较对象，原句缺少比较对象，应该补充 'they were' 来明确比较。

× allowing them to invest more time in education and healthcare activities, which would be quite rewarding in the long term.

✓ allowing them to invest more time in education and healthcare activities, which would be quite rewarding in the long term.

此句无语法错误，无需修改。

× Well, I have always been trying to, but there are all kinds of technical issues.

✓ Well, I have always been trying to, but there are all kinds of technical issues.

此句无语法错误，无需修改。

× Umm, one of the greatest problems for me is that there are so many terminologies or even jargon on on those instructions.

✓ Umm, one of the greatest problems for me is that there are so many terminologies or even jargon in those instructions.

介词用法错误，应该用 'in' 来表示“在说明书中”，而不是 'on'。

× So I find these types of reading really really time demanding and mentally tiring.

✓ So I find these types of reading really time-consuming and mentally tiring.

'time demanding' 不是常用表达，应该用 'time-consuming' 来表达“耗时的”。

× Umm, well, while I personally do not read instructions as frequently as I should, I do think that these types of reading is really important for people to use their devices in a wise and proper way.

✓ Umm, well, while I personally do not read instructions as frequently as I should, I do think that this type of reading is really important for people to use their devices in a wise and proper way.

'these types of reading' 语法错误，应该用单数 'this type of reading' 来表示“这种阅读”。

× There are all kinds of accidents or other important problems umm for people who are not reading the instructions really carefully.

✓ There are all kinds of accidents or other important problems for people who do not read the instructions really carefully.

时态和表达更自然，使用一般现在时 'do not read' 更符合习惯表达。