Memory— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer has good content but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use simpler and clearer sentences, avoid redundancy, and correct grammar mistakes. For example, say "I have been good at memorizing things since school" instead of "I have been good at memorizing things since my school days." Also, avoid phrases like "more better" and incorrect relative clauses like "others who's helped me."

Example: Yes, I have been good at memorizing things since school. I think this is because I pay close attention and practice mindfulness, which helps me remember information better.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Try to organize your answer logically with clear supporting details. For example, explain what you forgot, why it was important, and what problems it caused.

Example: Yes, I have forgotten important things before. Once, when I was travelling to the capital city, I forgot to take my mobile phone. This was difficult because I needed to contact my family and use the map for directions.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by using more precise vocabulary and clearer linking words. Also, avoid vague phrases like "some small things." Try to be more specific about what you do to perform well in class.

Example: I need to remember many things daily. For example, when I go out, I always carry essentials like my mobile phone, wallet, and keys. In class, I try to remember my lessons and review notes to perform better.

Suggestion: Your answer has good ideas but contains repetition and some awkward phrasing. Avoid repeating words like "my my" and use clearer expressions. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Example: I often find it hard to remember important things. Therefore, my wife helps me by reminding me and returning items like my keys and wallet. Additionally, I write important tasks on my phone to avoid forgetting them.

× I believe that I have more better neural connections than others who's helped me to retrieve information faster.

✓ I believe that I have better neural connections than others who have helped me to retrieve information faster.

The phrase 'more better' is incorrect because 'better' is already a comparative adjective and does not need 'more'. Also, 'who's' is a contraction of 'who is' or 'who has', but here it should be 'who have' to agree with the plural subject 'others'. So, the correct form is 'better' and 'who have'.

× I believe that I have more better neural connections than others who's helped me to retrieve information faster.

✓ I believe that I have better neural connections than others who have helped me to retrieve information faster.

The pronoun 'who's' is incorrectly used here; it should be 'who have' to refer to the plural noun 'others'. Using 'who's' (who is/has) is singular and does not agree with the plural antecedent.

× I believe that I memorialize heavily on the attention, so people who are more attentive and practice mindfulness tend to remember things better.

✓ I believe that I memorialize heavily through attention, so people who are more attentive and practice mindfulness tend to remember things better.

The preposition 'on' is incorrectly used with 'memorialize'. The correct preposition to express the means or method is 'through'. So, 'memorialize heavily through attention' is correct.

× For example, once I was travelling from my home country to the capital city and I was and I forgot to take my mobile phones with me.

✓ For example, once I was travelling from my home country to the capital city and I forgot to take my mobile phone with me.

The phrase 'I was and I forgot' is redundant and incorrect; 'I was' should be removed. Also, 'mobile phones' should be singular 'mobile phone' if referring to one device. The past tense 'forgot' is correctly used here.

× So it creates a dual difficult situation for me because I was in the political contact with my family members and I couldn't use the map because I always.

✓ So it created a difficult situation for me because I was in political contact with my family members and I couldn't use the map because I always rely on it.

The phrase 'dual difficult situation' is incorrect; 'dual' is unnecessary and awkward here. 'Created a difficult situation' is better. Also, 'the political contact' should be 'political contact' without 'the'. The sentence is incomplete; adding 'rely on it' completes the thought.

× I need to remember many things in my daily life.

✓ I need to remember many things in my daily life.

This sentence is correct; 'many things' is the appropriate quantifier for countable nouns.

× For example, when I go out, I need to remember to carry some essentials with me such as mobile phone, money bag and key box.

✓ For example, when I go out, I need to remember to carry some essentials with me such as my mobile phone, money bag, and key box.

Adding possessive 'my' before 'mobile phone' clarifies ownership. Also, commas are needed to separate items in the list. 'Money bag' and 'key box' are acceptable but could be more natural as 'wallet' and 'key holder'.

× And when I am in the classroom, I need to remember my lesson and I would like to do some small things so that I can perform well.

✓ And when I am in the classroom, I need to remember my lessons and I would like to do some small things so that I can perform well.

'Lesson' should be plural 'lessons' to indicate multiple subjects or topics. The rest of the sentence is correct.

× Yes, most of the time I find it really challenging to remember important things.

✓ Yes, most of the time I find it really challenging to remember important things.

This sentence is grammatically correct and well-structured.

× In this case my my wife helps me by reminding many things and even bringing back to me the key chain and money back.

✓ In this case, my wife helps me by reminding me of many things and even bringing back to me the keychain and money bag.

The phrase 'my my wife' has a repeated word 'my' which is an error. 'Reminding many things' is incorrect; it should be 'reminding me of many things'. 'Key chain' and 'money back' should be 'keychain' and 'money bag' respectively for correct noun forms.