Memory— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 응답은 내용을 전달하지만 문장이 장황하고 비문이 있어 자연스러움과 명료성이 떨어집니다. 먼저 주제문으로 직접 답한 뒤(예: "Yes, I am good at memorising things."), 그 다음 짧고 구체적인 근거를 1~2문장으로 연결하세요. 불필요한 반복(예: "really I'm very strong")을 피하고, 문법 오류(소유격 일치: "one of my strengths")를 고치세요. 연결어(For example, because, so)를 사용해 논리 흐름을 명확히 하고, 문장 수는 3~4문장 이내로 유지하세요.

Example: Yes, I am good at memorising things. For example, I pay close attention to details in everyday situations, which helps me recall facts more accurately than others. Because I practise observation, I can remember names, dates, and small events without much effort.

Suggestion: 답변이 경험을 설명하지만 문장 구조가 어색하고 반복과 시제 오류가 있습니다. 간단한 시간표현과 원인-결과 구조를 명확히 하세요. 예: 주제문 → 상황 설명(when/what) → 결과. 불필요한 말(예: "But anyway")은 줄이고 문장 연결을 위해 because/so/therefore 등을 사용하세요.

Example: Yes, I once forgot the due date for an assignment. I realised about five hours before the deadline, which made me very anxious because I usually plan ahead. However, I worked quickly and managed to finish and submit it on time.

Suggestion: 의도는 분명하지만 표현이 다소 어색하고 중복된 표현이 있습니다. 먼저 핵심을 밝힌 뒤 이유를 구체적으로 제시하세요. "threats and danger"처럼 중복어는 피하고, 자연스러운 표현으로 바꾸세요(예: "risk of fire"). 연결어(because, so, therefore)로 논리 흐름을 다듬고 문장 수는 2~3문장으로 유지하세요.

Example: I need to remember to turn off the lights whenever I leave a room. Because winters in Korea are very dry, there is a higher risk of fire, so I try to be careful to avoid accidents.

Suggestion: 방법을 잘 설명했지만 문장이 길고 일부 어휘 선택이 어색합니다("obvious"는 부적절). 주제문 → 방법 설명 → 구체적인 예 순서로 간결하게 말하세요. 'systematical' 대신 'systematic'을 사용하고, 반복되는 표현은 줄이세요. 필요하면 한 예시(알림 설정 등)를 덧붙여 구체성을 높이세요.

Example: I usually jot down important tasks on my smartphone, which is the most effective method for me. For example, I set reminders and calendar alerts, so I never miss deadlines and can keep my schedule very organised.

× Yes, I am. I'm actually not confident in any academic skills, but I really I'm very strong at memorizing because I think I observe every situation and phenomenon very specifically.

✓ Yes, I am. I'm actually not confident in any academic skills, but I am really very strong at memorizing because I think I observe every situation and phenomenon very specifically.

The sentence had redundant contraction 'really I'm' which disrupts present tense flow; use 'I am really' to maintain correct present simple statements and avoid clumsy phrasing. Also ensure consistency in present simple for habitual abilities (I am strong at memorizing). Suggestion: remove extra contraction and keep 'I am really' or 'I'm really'.

× I remember more accurately than other people and that is one of my strength in my life.

✓ I remember more accurately than other people and that is one of my strengths in my life.

The phrase 'one of my strength' is incorrect because 'one of' must be followed by a plural noun. Use 'strengths'. Suggestion: use plural after 'one of' (one of my strengths).

× I've once forgotten the due date of my assignment and I knew that I have to submit that assignment that day, almost like 5 hours left and because I I am a very systematic planner that made me anxious.

✓ I once forgot the due date of my assignment and I knew that I had to submit that assignment that day, with almost five hours left, and because I am a very systematic planner it made me anxious.

Mixing tenses: 'I've once forgotten' (present perfect) is awkward with specific past time; use simple past 'I once forgot'. Also 'I have to' should be past 'I had to' because the event is in the past. Keep 'am' for a present characteristic but the main narrative uses past tense. Suggestion: use past tense consistently when describing past events and write numbers in words in formal speech (five). Remove duplicated 'I'.

× But anyway I finished the assignment at time so it finished.

✓ But anyway I finished the assignment on time, so it was completed.

Awkward phrasing and redundancy: 'at time' should be 'on time'. 'So it finished' is incorrect because assignments do not 'finish' themselves; use 'it was completed' or 'I finished it'. Suggestion: use 'on time' and a clear subject for completion ('I finished it' or 'it was completed').

× I need to remember to turn off the light whenever I go out because it's winter and it's very dry in Korea.

✓ I need to remember to turn off the lights whenever I go out because it's winter and it's very dry in Korea.

Singular/plural mismatch with 'the light' vs general 'the lights'. When referring to turning off lights in general use plural 'lights' or 'the light' if specific; here plural is more natural. Suggestion: use 'the lights' for general habit of turning off lights.

× The threats and danger for the fire is very high, so that's why we have to make some attention for turning off things.

✓ The risk of fire is very high, so that's why we have to be careful to turn things off.

Unnatural collocations: 'threats and danger for the fire' and 'make some attention' are incorrect. Use 'risk of fire' and 'be careful' or 'pay attention' and use correct infinitive 'to turn things off'. Also subject-verb agreement 'risk ... is'. Suggestion: use natural phrases like 'risk of fire' and 'be careful to turn things off' or 'pay attention when turning things off'.

× I usually take notes in my smartphone, that's the most effective and obvious way to remember my schedule.

✓ I usually take notes on my smartphone; that's the most effective and obvious way to remember my schedule.

Incorrect preposition: use 'on' with 'smartphone' (take notes on my smartphone). Also semantically better to separate clauses. Suggestion: use 'on my smartphone' and consider using a semicolon or separate sentence.

× So whenever I can't really remember every event that I have to finish, I use it on the smartphone and that makes my life more systematical and very accurate.

✓ So whenever I can't remember every event I have to do, I use my smartphone and that makes my life more systematic and accurate.

Several issues: 'remember every event that I have to finish' is awkward; use 'event I have to do' or 'tasks I have to complete'. 'Use it on the smartphone' has wrong pronoun and preposition; say 'use my smartphone' or 'use it on my smartphone'. 'Systematical' is incorrect form; use adjective 'systematic'. Remove redundant 'really' and 'very' adjacency. Suggestion: simplify phrasing: 'whenever I can't remember events I have to do, I use my smartphone; it makes my life more systematic and accurate.'