Memory— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise, avoid repetition and grammatical errors, and use a clear topic sentence plus one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words like 'however' or 'nowadays' correctly.

Example: I used to have a very good memory when I was a child, but nowadays I often forget things because I am very busy with my ACT schedule. For example, because of stress and lack of time, I sometimes forget small tasks like appointments.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence describing the incident, then add one or two specific details (why it happened, result, or what you learned). Reduce filler words ('uh', 'umm') and correct tense usage.

Example: Yes. Last week I missed an important meeting with my manager about investors because I forgot the time. As a result, I apologised and rescheduled the meeting, and I learned to set clearer reminders on my phone.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence, then list two or three specific items using linking phrases such as 'for example' or 'such as'. Avoid vague endings like 'and so on.'

Example: I need to remember several daily tasks. For example, I prepare meals for my husband, attend my French classes twice a week, and practise English for thirty minutes each day to improve my language skills.

Suggestion: Give one clear topic sentence describing your main methods, then provide specific examples and use linking words like 'also' and 'for instance'. Remove redundancy and correct grammar.

Example: I rely on digital and paper reminders to remember important things. For instance, I set alerts on my phone for meetings, mark key dates on a wall calendar, and write daily tasks in a notebook so I don't forget them.

× Nowadays I have ACT schedule.

✓ Nowadays I have an ACT schedule.

Article error (use of indefinite article). 'Schedule' is a singular countable noun and requires an article. Use 'an' before a vowel sound. Suggestion: say 'an ACT schedule' or 'a schedule for the ACT'.

× I do not have much time to remember the the things but when But when I was a child I I had a very a good memory.

✓ I do not have much time to remember things, but when I was a child I had a very good memory.

Multiple issues: repetition of words and extra articles create ungrammatical structure. Remove duplicated words ('the the', extra 'But', duplicated 'I', extra 'a') and use a comma before 'but' to join clauses. Suggestion: keep sentences concise and avoid repetition.

× We can easily keep the things on my mind.

✓ I could easily keep things in my mind.

Pronoun error and collocation: 'We' does not match speaker's personal experience; 'on my mind' is less natural than 'in my mind' for memorising. Use 'I' and 'could' for past ability. Suggestion: use appropriate subject and preposition 'in'.

× But nowadays I have too much stress and I easily forget the things.

✓ But nowadays I have too much stress and I easily forget things.

Article error and redundancy: 'the things' is incorrect here; use the plural noun without article. Also tense and aspect are acceptable. Suggestion: remove 'the' to say 'forget things'.

× Yes, I still remember, uh, last week I had urgent meeting with, uh, my company manager.

✓ Yes, I still remember. Last week I had an urgent meeting with my company manager.

Article error: 'urgent meeting' needs the indefinite article 'an'. Also sentence fragments and filler words should be removed or punctuated. Suggestion: insert 'an' and split into two sentences.

× That time I just, uh, forgot to attend the meeting.

✓ At that time I simply forgot to attend the meeting.

Preposition and style: 'That time' is acceptable but 'At that time' is more natural. Replace filler 'uh' and 'just' with 'simply' for clarity. Tense 'forgot' is correct. Suggestion: use 'at that time' and avoid fillers.

× Uh, actually for the, uh, it was the meeting related to the investors.

✓ It was a meeting related to investors.

Article errors and unnecessary fillers: remove 'the' before 'investors' unless specifying particular investors; use 'a meeting' not 'the' when first mentioning. Suggestion: be concise: 'It was a meeting related to investors.'

× Umm, actually, I also forget.

✓ Actually, I also forgot.

Tense error: describing a past event requires past tense 'forgot' not present 'forget'. Suggestion: use past tense when referring to past incidents.

× There are several things which I need to remember in my daily life, such as making uh, meals for my husband, uh, taking classes or taking French classes, improving my, umm, English language skills and so on.

✓ There are several things I need to remember in my daily life, such as making meals for my husband, taking classes like French, and improving my English skills.

Wordiness and redundancy: remove fillers and repeated phrases. 'Taking classes or taking French classes' is redundant; 'English language skills' can be shortened to 'English skills'. Use parallel structure in the list. Suggestion: keep list items parallel and concise.

× Nowadays I set remind reminders on my phone as well as I also mark the important days on calendars.

✓ Nowadays I set reminders on my phone and also mark important days on my calendar.

Incorrect collocation and redundancy: 'set remind reminders' is incorrect; use 'set reminders'. 'On calendars' is plural and less natural than 'on my calendar'. Remove redundant 'also'. Suggestion: use correct verb-noun collocations and keep parallel structure.

× So sometime I also write down the important things on my daily routine notebooks.

✓ Sometimes I also write important things in my daily notebook.

Plurality and preposition issues: 'sometime' should be 'sometimes'; 'daily routine notebooks' is awkward—use 'daily notebook' or 'planner'; use 'in' rather than 'on' for writing in a notebook. Suggestion: correct adverb form and preposition.

× So it is the way of reminder things so I'll not have to so I did not have to.

✓ So it is a way to remind myself, and I do not have to worry about forgetting things.

Multiple grammar issues: article misuse ('the way of reminder things'), awkward phrasing, mixed tenses ('I'll not have to' then 'I did not have to'). Use a clear infinitive 'a way to remind myself' and consistent present tense 'do not have to'. Suggestion: use simple, consistent structure and avoid mixing tenses.