Memory— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise, correct awkward phrasing, avoid filler words and inappropriate censoring, and include one clear example or brief reason. Keep within 3–4 sentences and use linking words for coherence.

Example: No, I'm not very good at memorising things. For example, I often forget important dates like birthdays or appointments, which causes problems for me and my friends. Because of this, I now rely on reminders and written notes to stay organised.

Suggestion: Improve grammar and sequence of events, avoid trailing off, and include a clear outcome or consequence. Use linking words (for example, then, so) to make the story coherent and keep it to 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I once forgot an important admit card for my 10th-grade board exam. I realised this when I was already on my way to the exam centre, and I had only seven minutes to spare, so I had to rush home to collect it. Fortunately, I made it just in time, but the experience taught me to double-check my belongings the night before.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence about what you need to remember (e.g., tasks or habits), then provide specific examples and reasons. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and avoid vague phrases. Limit to 3–4 concise sentences.

Example: I need to remember daily habits that keep me healthy and happy. For example, I try to cook or bake something I enjoy each morning because it boosts my mood and helps me start the day positively. I also remind myself to exercise briefly or drink water so I stay energetic.

Suggestion: Be clearer and more confident: state your main method first, then explain steps and an evaluation. Avoid saying "I don't know" and use linking words (however, although) to contrast effectiveness. Keep to 3–4 sentences and include a brief improvement plan.

Example: I use my phone calendar and set multiple reminders to remember important events. However, sometimes they still fail to work for me, so I also write brief notes on paper and tell a friend to remind me as a backup. In this way I increase the chances of not forgetting important appointments.

× I'm the only person in my friend group that's the furthest thing so easily.

✓ I'm the only person in my friend group who forgets things so easily.

The relative pronoun 'that' is less appropriate for people; use 'who'. Also 'the furthest thing' is incorrect idiom for 'forget things'; verb form and object needed. Use present simple 'forgets' for habitual actions.

× I feel like I'm the most ******* and the most problematic person because I forget every single detail, mostly when it's about important dates or something like that.

✓ I feel like I'm the most forgetful and the most problematic person because I forget every single detail, especially when it's about important dates.

Use the adjective 'forgetful' to describe a person rather than asterisks. Replace 'mostly when' with 'especially when' for clarity. Remove redundant phrase 'or something like that'.

× It was doing my 10th final exam which was happened to be conducted by government called S EE.

✓ It was during my 10th final exam, which happened to be conducted by the government and was called SEE.

Original has incorrect word order and extra auxiliary 'was'. Use past simple 'happened' and include articles 'the government'. Place modifiers correctly: 'during my 10th final exam' and name the exam 'called SEE'.

× And during my time of the exams, when I was going to my center to give my board exams, I forgot to take my admit card which was back in my home and I had just like 7 minutes left and I.

✓ During the exams, when I was going to my center to take my board exams, I forgot to bring my admit card because it was back at my home, and I had only about seven minutes left.

Use 'to take' rather than 'to give' for attending exams. Use 'bring' instead of 'take' in this context. 'Back in my home' should be 'back at my home'. 'Just like 7 minutes' -> 'only about seven minutes'. Complete the sentence to avoid fragment.

× I'm not particularly sure about this, but every time I wake up I make sure I do something healthy every day, like for myself to make me happy someday.

✓ I'm not particularly sure about this, but every time I wake up I make sure to do something healthy each day, something that makes me happy.

Avoid redundant phrases 'every time... every day'; use 'each day'. Use infinitive 'to do' after 'make sure'. 'Like for myself to make me happy someday' is ungrammatical and vague; replace with 'something that makes me happy'.

× I just like to cook or make something that I like as I have a sweet tooth.

✓ I just like to cook or make things I enjoy because I have a sweet tooth.

Use 'things I enjoy' instead of repeating 'something that I like'. Replace 'as' with 'because' for causal meaning.

× I almost bake every day like it's something I want.

✓ I almost bake every day because it's something I enjoy.

'Like it's something I want' is colloquial and unclear; 'because it's something I enjoy' is clearer. 'Almost bake every day' is acceptable but clarify meaning with 'almost' or 'I bake nearly every day'.

× Well, for me, I do mark important that's important events in the calendar.

✓ Well, I mark important events in my calendar.

Original repeats 'important' and has misplaced words 'that's important'. Simplify to 'mark important events' and use 'my calendar' for possession.

× Before the event arrives, I just set a reminder in my phone.

✓ Before the event, I set a reminder on my phone.

'Before the event arrives' is awkward; 'Before the event' is natural. Use 'on my phone' rather than 'in my phone'. Remove filler 'just' which is unnecessary.

× I don't know, but honestly it didn't work out for me much.

✓ I don't know, but honestly it didn't work very well for me.

Use the adverb phrase 'very well' to modify 'didn't work' instead of 'much'. Maintain past tense 'didn't work' and improve collocation.

× But as long as I remember I do like this kind of stuff.

✓ But as long as I remember, I do things like this to help me.

Original lacks comma and is awkwardly phrased. Add a comma after the subordinate clause and rephrase 'I do like this kind of stuff' to 'I do things like this' and specify purpose 'to help me' for clarity.