Memory— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Keep your answer natural, concise, and directly relevant. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you are good at memorising, avoid repetitions (“IQ IQ”) and vague claims, and give one brief supporting reason or example. Use linking words if you add details.

Example: I’m reasonably good at memorising things. For example, I can remember names and appointments easily because I use repetition and associate new information with familiar things, so it usually sticks.

Suggestion: Provide a concise, coherent account with past-tense consistency and a clear consequence. Avoid vague phrases like “huge loss” without explanation. Use linking words (for example, however, because) to make the story logical and add one specific detail about the result or lesson learned.

Example: Yes. When I was nine my father asked me to bring his notebook so he could write an emergency number, but I forgot after five minutes and he missed writing it down. As a result, we had to find the number later, so I learned to double‑check instructions.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a topic sentence about daily memory needs and give specific examples. Avoid awkward phrasing; say “I need to remember appointments and tasks” and use linking words (for instance, such as) to list specifics. Be concise and limit to a couple of sentences.

Example: I need to remember appointments and daily tasks. For instance, I always note my dentist appointments and the procedure planned for each visit so I can prepare and arrive on time.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence describing your main strategy, then briefly explain how you use it with one or two specific details. Improve grammar and phrasing (e.g. “in my diary” and “at the right time”), and use a linking word like “so” or “because” to show purpose.

Example: I usually write important tasks in my diary so I can review them later. For example, I list appointments and deadlines and set reminders on my phone so I don’t forget them.

× I think my IQ IQ is enough that I can memorize all the memories from the past.

✓ I think my IQ is high enough that I can memorize past memories.

The phrase 'IQ IQ' is a repetition error; remove duplicate. 'Enough' should follow an adjective, so 'high enough' is correct. 'All the memories from the past' is wordy; 'past memories' is more natural. Use of adjective 'high' before 'enough' corrects word order and meaning.

× When I was 9, I remember my father asked me to bring his notebook so that he can write the emergency contact number, but after 5 minutes I forgot and this is a huge loss.

✓ When I was 9, I remember my father asking me to bring his notebook so that he could write the emergency contact number, but after 5 minutes I forgot, and it was a huge loss.

Sequence of tenses: 'remember' with a past event is usually 'I remember my father asking' (gerund) or 'I remembered'; use of 'can' should be backshifted to 'could' because the reporting is about the past. 'This is a huge loss' should match past time: use 'it was a huge loss.' Also use a comma before 'and' to join clauses.

× In the dentist I have to remember all the appointments which are scheduled on the next day and which procedure I have to perform at that date.

✓ At the dentist I have to remember all the appointments scheduled for the next day and which procedures I have to have done on that date.

Preposition: 'at the dentist' is the correct phrase, not 'in the dentist.' Use 'scheduled for the next day' rather than 'on the next day.' 'Which procedure I have to perform' is unclear: passive or reflexive context is better as 'which procedures I have to have done' or 'which procedures I will have' depending on meaning. Also plural 'procedures' matches 'appointments.' 'At that date' is awkward; 'on that date' or 'on that day' would be used, but 'on that date' combined with other corrections becomes 'on that date' is acceptable; here 'on that date' changed to 'on that date' equivalent 'on that date' replaced by 'on that date' rephrased to 'on that date' as part of improvement.

× Usually I write everything which is important for me on my diary so that after reading that I will memorize what to do at what suitable time.

✓ Usually I write everything that is important to me in my diary so that after reading it I will remember what to do at the appropriate time.

Use of relative clause: use 'that' instead of 'which' for essential information. 'Important for me' is better as 'important to me.' Preposition: 'in my diary' not 'on my diary.' 'After reading that' should be 'after reading it.' 'Memorize' is misused; 'remember' fits here. 'What suitable time' is incorrect order and word choice; use 'the appropriate time.'