Singing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding filler words like 'uh' and 'like'. Also, directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons. For example, mention how singing or listening to music helps you relax after a busy day.

Example: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax after a busy day. Although I'm not very good at it, I find listening to music very soothing and it helps me unwind.

Suggestion: Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure for clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence and add specific details about your experience learning to sing and playing instruments.

Example: Yes, I learned how to sing during music classes at school, where we also learned to play some musical instruments. However, I haven't practiced singing much since then.

Suggestion: Make your answer more fluent and structured by reducing hesitation and using linking words. Clearly state who you want to sing for and why, and explain how singing affects you personally.

Example: I want to sing for my daughter because she plays the guitar, and I think singing for her would make her happy. Moreover, singing helps me feel stress-free and peaceful.

Suggestion: Try to avoid repetition and filler words. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Provide a clear opinion and support it with a specific example.

Example: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it helps people relax and forget their worries. For instance, when I feel anxious, listening to my favourite music uplifts my mood and makes me feel better.

× I like, like I really enjoy to listen music, listen to music it, uh, unwind me after a busy day.

✓ I like, like I really enjoy listening to music; listening to music, it, uh, unwinds me after a busy day.

The verb 'enjoy' should be followed by the '-ing' form of the verb, not the infinitive. Also, 'listen music' is incorrect; it should be 'listen to music'. Additionally, the subject-verb agreement requires 'it unwinds' instead of 'it unwind'.

× Years in the school, uh, in music periods we learned how to, uh, sing and also to play some music instrument.

✓ During my years in school, in music periods, we learned how to sing and also how to play some musical instruments.

The phrase 'Years in the school' is incomplete and unclear; it should be 'During my years in school'. Also, 'music instrument' should be pluralized to 'musical instruments' to match the context.

× And singing also gives me umm, a stress free and uh, peaceful environment.

✓ And singing also gives me, umm, a stress-free and peaceful feeling.

The phrase 'a stress free and peaceful environment' is awkward because singing does not create an environment but rather a feeling or state. Also, 'stress free' should be hyphenated as 'stress-free' when used as an adjective.

× Yes, I believe singing brings happiness to the people because it, uh, it uh, relax them and they forget their worries.

✓ Yes, I believe singing brings happiness to people because it, uh, relaxes them and they forget their worries.

The pronoun 'it' refers to 'singing' which is singular, so the verb should be 'relaxes' not 'relax'. Also, 'the people' is unnecessarily definite; 'people' is more natural here.

× For example, when I'm, uh, anxious or umm, worried, I listen to my favorite music and that definitely uplifts my mood and uh, it's a great.

✓ For example, when I'm, uh, anxious or umm, worried, I listen to my favorite music and that definitely uplifts my mood; it's great.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'it's a great' which is incomplete. It should be 'it's great' to complete the thought. Also, using a semicolon improves sentence flow.