Singing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên nhưng có một số phần lặp lại và thiếu sự liên kết mạch lạc giữa các ý. Bạn nên sử dụng các từ nối để làm cho câu trả lời trôi chảy hơn và tránh lặp từ như "I think" nhiều lần. Ngoài ra, hãy cố gắng cung cấp các chi tiết cụ thể hơn để làm câu trả lời phong phú hơn.

Example: Yes, I really enjoy singing, especially during my free time because it helps me relax and express my emotions. In addition, I find listening to music while singing very enjoyable, which enhances my mood.

Suggestion: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt cho chính xác hơn, tránh lặp từ như "busy busy" và câu cuối chưa rõ nghĩa. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và rõ ràng hơn. Ngoài ra, nên sửa lỗi ngữ pháp như "I think just to fun" thành câu hoàn chỉnh.

Example: No, I haven't taken any formal singing classes because they are quite expensive and I don't think it's worth the cost. Besides, I am very busy with my studies, so I usually sing just for fun.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng tốt nhưng cần chú ý đến đại từ số ít và số nhiều ("they" nên là "she" khi nói về mẹ). Ngoài ra, câu cuối chưa rõ nghĩa và thiếu sự liên kết. Bạn nên sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp.

Example: I want to sing for my mother because she used to think I wasn't good at singing. However, I have improved a lot recently, and I want to show her how much I appreciate her support by performing for her. It would make me very happy to see her reaction.

Suggestion: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp, ví dụ như "it provide" nên là "it provides". Câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng hơn với các từ nối phù hợp. Ngoài ra, hãy cung cấp các chi tiết cụ thể hơn để làm câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn.

Example: Of course, singing can bring happiness to people. Firstly, it provides a way to connect with many others. Moreover, singing helps people express their emotions, which can be very therapeutic.

× Moreover, I can enjoy the music.

✓ Moreover, I can enjoy music.

The article 'the' is unnecessary before 'music' when referring to music in general. Removing 'the' makes the sentence more natural.

× Not yet, I haven't learned how to sing in any formal classes because I think it's quite expensive and not worth the cost for it.

✓ Not yet, I haven't learned how to sing in any formal classes because I think it's quite expensive and not worth the cost.

The phrase 'for it' is redundant and incorrect here. The sentence is clearer and grammatically correct without it.

× Moreover, I am busy busy with my studies so I think just to fun.

✓ Moreover, I am busy with my studies, so I think it's just for fun.

The repetition 'busy busy' is incorrect. Also, the phrase 'just to fun' is ungrammatical; it should be 'just for fun'. Adding a comma before 'so' improves sentence clarity.

× I want to sing for my mother because they used to think that I wasn't good at singing.

✓ I want to sing for my mother because she used to think that I wasn't good at singing.

The pronoun 'they' is incorrect when referring to 'my mother' (singular). It should be 'she' to match the singular subject.

× However, I have improved a lot recently and I want to show them how much I appreciate their support by performing for them.

✓ However, I have improved a lot recently and I want to show her how much I appreciate her support by performing for her.

The pronouns 'them' and 'their' are plural and do not agree with the singular 'my mother'. They should be replaced with 'her' to maintain agreement.

× It could make me very happy to see.

✓ It would make me very happy to see her.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'her' clarifies the object, and changing 'could' to 'would' fits the conditional mood better.

× Firstly, it provide connection with other with many people.

✓ Firstly, it provides connection with many other people.

The verb 'provide' should be 'provides' to agree with singular subject 'it'. Also, 'with other with many people' is incorrect; it should be 'with many other people'.