Singing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami dan efektif. Hindari pengulangan dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih singkat dan jelas. Misalnya, gunakan "I like singing because it helps me relax and relieves my stress."

Example: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and relieves my stress after a long day.

Suggestion: Perbaiki struktur kalimat dan gunakan kosakata yang tepat. Hindari pengulangan dan buat kalimat lebih jelas dan terstruktur. Contohnya, "No, I have never taken singing lessons. I just sing by myself at home because I can't afford professional classes and I'm not interested in becoming a professional singer."

Example: No, I have never taken singing lessons. I just sing by myself at home because I can't afford professional classes and I'm not interested in becoming a professional singer.

Suggestion: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan buat jawaban lebih jelas dan terstruktur. Gunakan linking words untuk menghubungkan ide. Misalnya, "I usually sing for myself because I enjoy listening to my own voice. For example, I often sing alone in my room."

Example: I usually sing for myself because I enjoy listening to my own voice. For example, I often sing alone in my room.

Suggestion: Perbaiki penggunaan kosakata dan struktur kalimat agar lebih alami dan efektif. Hindari kata yang tidak tepat seperti "cupping mechanism" dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih jelas. Contohnya, "Yes, singing can relieve stress and bring happiness to people. For me, singing helps me relax after a busy day."

Example: Yes, singing can relieve stress and bring happiness to people. For me, singing helps me relax after a busy day.

× Yes, I'm very like singing because I feel like my voice was good.

✓ Yes, I really like singing because I feel like my voice is good.

The phrase 'I'm very like' is incorrect; 'like' is a verb and should not be used with 'am'. Also, 'was' should be 'is' to match the present tense context. Use 'I really like' to express preference correctly.

× I like singing because sometimes it can relax, it can relaxing my feelings.

✓ I like singing because sometimes it can relax me; it can relax my feelings.

The verb 'relax' should be followed by an object or used in the correct form. 'It can relaxing' is incorrect; it should be 'it can relax'. Also, 'relax' needs an object like 'me' or 'my feelings'.

× It uh, I used singing as one of uh, way to stress relief.

✓ I use singing as one way to relieve stress.

The sentence structure is incorrect and unclear. 'Used singing' should be 'use singing' to indicate present habit. 'One of way' should be 'one way'. 'Stress relief' is a noun phrase; the verb form 'relieve stress' fits better here.

× No I never learned how to sing, I'm just doing it by myself or auto deduct because I don't have that much money for doing that and also I don't have umm much of interest to singing in professional for for example I'm just singing in my room.

✓ No, I have never learned how to sing; I just do it by myself or self-taught because I don't have much money to pay for lessons, and also I don't have much interest in singing professionally. For example, I just sing in my room.

Use present perfect 'have never learned' for experience. 'Auto deduct' is incorrect; 'self-taught' is appropriate. 'Much of interest to singing' should be 'much interest in singing'. 'In professional' should be 'professionally'. Sentence is long and needs punctuation for clarity.

× Well, especially I one thing for myself 'cause I love hearing my votes, my voice, 'cause it sounds good.

✓ Well, especially for myself, because I love hearing my voice since it sounds good.

'I one thing for myself' is unclear and incorrect. 'Votes' is a mispronunciation or typo for 'voice'. The sentence needs restructuring for clarity and correct pronoun use.

× For example, I've always seen when I'm in my room alone, I play and try singing a lot of songs.

✓ For example, I've often seen that when I'm alone in my room, I play and try singing a lot of songs.

'I've always seen' is awkward; 'I've often seen' fits better. The sentence structure is improved for clarity. 'Try singing' is correct here.

× Yes, as I mentioned before, uh, singing can become one of the stress relief for us or a cupping mechanism for someone.

✓ Yes, as I mentioned before, singing can become one form of stress relief for us or a coping mechanism for someone.

'One of the stress relief' is incorrect; 'one form of stress relief' is correct. 'Cupping mechanism' is a mishearing or typo for 'coping mechanism'.

× So it can bring happiness to people, especially me because when I sing I feel I'm just relaxing after a busy day.

✓ So it can bring happiness to people, especially me, because when I sing, I feel relaxed after a busy day.

'I feel I'm just relaxing' is awkward; 'I feel relaxed' is more natural and grammatically correct.