Singing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks clear structure. Try to make your response more concise and organized by stating your main reason first, then adding supporting details with linking words. Also, avoid redundancy and improve sentence clarity.

Example: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and relieve stress. Moreover, singing with my friends at karaoke is very enjoyable, especially when we sing Japanese songs like those by Mrs. Green.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and grammatical errors. Focus on giving a clear and direct response with proper grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details about your experience.

Example: I have never taken private singing lessons, but I learned how to sing in my high school music class. The teacher was very good and taught us various singing techniques.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and incomplete sentences. Try to speak more fluently and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to improve coherence.

Example: I like to sing for my friends, especially on their birthdays. Singing the birthday song for them is fun and helps create a joyful atmosphere.

Suggestion: Your answer is good but can be improved by avoiding repetition and using more precise vocabulary. Also, try to use linking words to make your answer more coherent and add more specific examples.

Example: Yes, singing can bring happiness because it helps people connect and share joyful moments. For instance, people from different countries who speak different languages can sing together, which strengthens their relationships and creates a sense of belonging.

× I like singing because singing makes me relaxed and sometimes released my stress and singing together with my friends will be really fun for me.

✓ I like singing because singing makes me relaxed and sometimes releases my stress, and singing together with my friends is really fun for me.

The verb 'released' is incorrectly used in past tense; it should be 'releases' to agree with the singular subject 'singing'. Also, 'singing together with my friends will be really fun' should be 'is really fun' to match the present tense context.

× And we go to karaoke to sing a song, especially singing song, sing a song, a Japanese song like me, Mrs. Green.

✓ And we go to karaoke to sing songs, especially Japanese songs like me, Mrs. Green.

The phrase 'singing song, sing a song' is redundant and awkward. 'Sing songs' is more natural. Also, 'like me, Mrs. Green' is unclear; it likely means 'songs like the ones I like, Mrs. Green.' The preposition usage and sentence structure need correction for clarity.

× I've never learn how to sync and specific, uh, private school, but when I went when I was a high, when I was high school, umm, in uh, musical music class, I learned about the how to, how to sing in how to sing in a class.

✓ I've never learned how to sing specifically in a private school, but when I was in high school, in a music class, I learned how to sing.

The verb 'learn' should be in past participle 'learned' after 'have'. 'Sync' is a misspelling of 'sing'. The sentence is also fragmented and redundant; it needs restructuring for clarity and correct tense usage.

× And that teacher was really good to teach about how to.

✓ And that teacher was really good at teaching us how to sing.

The phrase 'good to teach about how to' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'good at teaching'. Also, the sentence is incomplete and needs to specify what was taught.

× Uh, I want to sing my, I want to sing for my friends, especially when I birthday time birthday, umm, when some someone's birthdays I've, I try to sing for, I try to sing birthday song for them and which is, which is sometimes, uh, really fun because uh, people can, uh, people, uh, makes.

✓ I want to sing for my friends, especially on their birthdays. I try to sing the birthday song for them, which is sometimes really fun because people enjoy it.

The original sentence has pronoun misuse and is fragmented. 'I birthday time birthday' is incorrect; it should be 'on their birthdays'. The sentence needs to be simplified and clarified with correct pronoun usage.

× Singing can bring happiness because a singer can bring happiness because it allows people to connect and share joyful moments together.

✓ Singing can bring happiness because it allows people to connect and share joyful moments together.

The phrase 'a singer can bring happiness because it allows...' is redundant and confusing. The definite article 'a' is unnecessary here. The sentence is clearer and more concise without it.

× For example, even people from different countries who don't speak the same language can sing together and which helps them build stronger relationship and feel a sense of belongings.

✓ For example, even people from different countries who don't speak the same language can sing together, which helps them build stronger relationships and feel a sense of belonging.

The phrase 'and which helps' is incorrect; it should be 'which helps'. 'Relationship' should be plural 'relationships' to match 'people'. 'Belongings' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'belonging' meaning a feeling of being part of a group.