Singing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is positive and relevant, but it has some grammatical errors, awkward phrasing, and redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two concise supporting reasons using linking words. Correct common errors (e.g., ‘melody sounds bring to my ear’ → ‘melodies sound’ or ‘the melodies’ and ‘give me some calms’ → ‘calm me’). Keep sentences natural and under five sentences.

Example: Yes — I really enjoy singing. The melodies relax me and help me relieve stress, so I often sing when I need to unwind. For example, after a long day at work I listen to music and sing along to feel calmer.

Suggestion: Good content: you explained informal training and future plans. Improve by using correct tense and clearer phrases (e.g., ‘I haven’t trained professionally’), and use a linking word to show contrast. Keep it concise and use specific details about what you learned in choir.

Example: I haven’t had professional singing lessons, but I joined a choir at my church where I learned basic music theory and harmonizing. As a result, I can read simple sheet music, and I hope to take formal voice lessons in the future to improve my technique.

Suggestion: Nice, personal response with emotion. Reduce repetition and refine wording (‘my best person’ → ‘my favourite person’). Use linking words to order ideas (e.g., ‘first’ and ‘also’). Limit to two to three sentences and include a brief reason for each choice.

Example: My first choice would be my father because he’s my favourite person and has inspired me throughout my life. I would also like to sing for my partner on our wedding day to make the moment special.

Suggestion: Your answer agrees with the question and gives a personal example, but wording is unclear and there are grammatical issues (‘Logically is saying’ is incorrect). Avoid fillers like ‘umm’ and be more specific about how singing/music affects mood. Use a linking phrase before your example and keep it concise.

Example: Yes, I believe singing can make people happier because music often lifts the mood and inspires people. For example, after a hectic day at work I listen to or sing songs to relax and feel more positive.

× Yes I love singing a lot.

✓ Yes, I love singing very much.

'A lot' is informal and functions as an adverbial phrase; 'very much' is a clearer, more natural adverbial phrase to modify 'love' in this context. Also add a comma after 'Yes' for correct written punctuation.

× I mean the melody sounds bring to my ear is so refreshing and whenever I hear music I'm relaxed like it's what helped me to relieve stress and give me some calms.

✓ I mean the melody and sounds that reach my ear are so refreshing, and whenever I hear music I feel relaxed because it helps me relieve stress and calm down.

'Bring to my ear' is an awkward prepositional phrase; 'reach my ear' or 'reach me' is more natural. Subject-verb agreement: 'melody and sounds' is plural so use 'are'. 'I'm relaxed like it's what helped me to relieve stress' mixes tenses and uses informal connectors; replace with 'I feel relaxed because it helps me relieve stress and calm down.' 'Give me some calms' is ungrammatical; use 'calm down' or 'a sense of calm.'

× Yes, I am. I have not really professionally, but in my church I joined a choir group, a singing group 'cause I love songs.

✓ Yes, I have. I have not done it professionally, but at my church I joined a choir, a singing group, because I love songs.

The reply 'Yes, I am' is incorrect for 'Have you ever learnt how to sing?'; use 'Yes, I have.' 'I have not really professionally' is missing the verb 'done' and misplaces 'professionally.' Use 'I have not done it professionally.' Preposition: 'in my church' is acceptable but 'at my church' is more natural. Replace informal ' 'cause ' with 'because.'

× So from there I was able to learn the basis of music and I'm hoping that in the future I will engage in more formal classes for it.

✓ So from there I was able to learn the basics of music, and I'm hoping that in the future I will take more formal classes.

Use plural 'basics' rather than 'basis' when referring to fundamental elements. 'Engage in more formal classes for it' is wordy; 'take more formal classes' is more natural. Tenses are fine but wording improved.

× I always say my dad 'cause he's my best person in this world and he's my role model and my inspiration.

✓ I would always choose my dad because he is the most important person in my life; he is my role model and my inspiration.

'I always say my dad' is unclear for 'Who do you want to sing for?'; 'I would always choose my dad' or 'I would sing for my dad' fits better. 'Best person in this world' is unnatural; use 'the most important person in my life.' Replace informal 'cause' with 'because.'

× So if I have the opportunity to sing to 1 special person, I'll sing to my dad then also probably to my partner on my wedding day.

✓ So if I have the opportunity to sing to one special person, I'll sing to my dad, and probably also to my partner on my wedding day.

Use the word 'one' instead of the digit '1' in formal writing. Improve word order: 'I'll sing to my dad, and probably also to my partner' reads more naturally. Add commas for clarity.

× Yes, I think so. Logically is saying that music brings a form of inspiration.

✓ Yes, I think so. Logically, one could say that music brings a form of inspiration.

'Logically is saying that' is ungrammatical: missing subject and wrong verb. Use 'one could say' or 'it can be said' to express a general statement. Add comma after 'Logically.'

× It lightens more than all of that and I will attest to it personally.

✓ It lightens my mood more than many things, and I can attest to that personally.

'It lightens more than all of that' is vague and awkward. Specify 'lightens my mood' and use 'more than many things' or 'more than almost anything.' 'I will attest to it personally' is acceptable but 'I can attest to that personally' is more natural.

× For example, whenever umm, I have a hectic day at work, I do music and listen.

✓ For example, whenever I have a hectic day at work, I listen to music.

'Umm' is a filler and should be removed in written form. 'I do music and listen' is ungrammatical; the natural expression is 'I listen to music.' Simplify the sentence for clarity.