List— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Keep your answer concise and correct minor grammar and cohesion issues. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, “because” and “so”). Avoid repeating ideas (e.g., saying both “avoid buying unnecessary stuff” and later “buy more things more systematically” is slightly redundant). Also simplify wording to sound natural (e.g., “big sales or discount” → “big sales”).

Example: Yes. I always make a shopping list because it helps me know exactly what I need to buy and prevents impulse purchases during big sales. For example, last month I stuck to my list at a supermarket sale and saved money by not buying things I didn’t need.

Suggestion: Improve grammar and clarity: avoid repetition (“currently a student right now”), finish your sentences, and structure the response with a clear topic sentence followed by a specific example and result. Use linking words like “however” and “for example” correctly. Quantify where possible and explain why the list doesn’t work (e.g., unrealistic goals, poor time estimates).

Example: I’m a student, so I don’t usually keep long study lists because they often feel overwhelming. For example, I might plan to study five topics in a day but realistically complete only two or three, so I now limit my daily list to two important tasks to make it manageable.

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar (e.g., “put extra pressure on them”). Use clear linking words such as “first” and “second” and finish the second point with a clear example. Avoid filler sounds (“uh”) and vague phrasing (“making this can restrict their freedoms”). Provide specific reasons like pressure, reduced flexibility, or loss of spontaneity.

Example: Some people dislike lists because they can create pressure and disappointment if tasks remain unfinished. Secondly, lists can limit spontaneity — for instance, someone shopping without a list can browse freely and discover things by chance.

Suggestion: Clarify and correct grammar (e.g., “it offers a strike-out function so items disappear when checked”). Use a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give two concise reasons with linking words like “because” and “also.” Remove fillers and awkward phrasing. Mention specific app features (tick boxes, reminders) if relevant.

Example: I prefer making lists on my phone because checklist apps let me tick items off and hide completed tasks. It’s also more convenient to carry my phone than a paper list, and apps can remind me of items I might forget.

× Yes, I love making a list when I go shopping.

✓ Yes, I love making a list when I go shopping.

No grammar error detected from the given list; sentence is fine.

× This is because by having a list I know exactly what I need to buy and I can avoid buying unnecessary stuff if I feel like I want to, even though there is a big sales or discount there.

✓ This is because by having a list I know exactly what I need to buy and I can avoid buying unnecessary stuff even if there are big sales or discounts.

Incorrect use of prepositions and number with countable noun: 'even though there is a big sales' is ungrammatical. Use 'even if' to introduce a hypothetical condition and 'there are big sales or discounts' to agree with plural 'sales' and include 'discounts' plural. Also remove 'if I feel like I want to' which is redundant; 'even if' conveys the idea. Suggestion: Use 'even if' for hypothetical contrast and match singular/plural nouns.

× So I think I can buy more things more systematically when I have a list.

✓ So I think I can buy things more systematically when I have a list.

Minor redundancy: 'more things more systematically' is awkward though not strictly wrong. Simplify to 'things more systematically' for clarity. No subject-verb disagreement present; adjustment improves naturalness.

× I'm currently a student right now, but I don't really make a list for my study because it's often seems to be too much.

✓ I'm currently a student, but I don't really make a study list because it often seems to be too much.

Tense and structure issues: 'I'm currently a student right now' is redundant ('currently' and 'right now'). 'for my study' is awkward; use 'a study list' or 'a list for studying'. Also 'it's often seems' incorrectly combines forms; use 'it often seems' or 'it's often'. Suggestion: Choose either contraction 'it's' or full verb 'it seems', and avoid redundant time markers.

× So for example, I will always make a list of what I need to study on the day.

✓ For example, I always make a list of what I need to study for the day.

Incorrect future implication: 'I will always make' suggests a future habit; use simple present 'I always make' for habitual actions. Also 'on the day' is awkward; use 'for the day'. Suggestion: Use simple present for routines.

× But eventually it turned out that it is too heavy and too overwhelming for me because in reality I can only achieve maybe two or three instead of.

✓ But eventually it turned out that it was too much and too overwhelming for me because in reality I could only achieve maybe two or three items.

Tense mismatch: narrative uses past 'turned out', so follow with past 'was' and 'could'. 'too heavy' is unnatural for tasks; use 'too much'. Sentence ended abruptly; add 'items' to complete thought. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent in narration and complete comparisons.

× The reason that some people don't like making lists is that the list can put extra pressure to them.

✓ The reason some people don't like making lists is that a list can put extra pressure on them.

Incorrect preposition: use 'put pressure on someone' not 'put pressure to them'. Also use 'a list' rather than 'the list' for general statements. Remove unnecessary 'that'. Suggestion: Remember verbs with fixed prepositions (pressure on).

× For example, after you make a list and you didn't complete some of them, it may feel, uh, overwhelming for them.

✓ For example, after someone makes a list and doesn't complete some items, it may feel overwhelming for them.

Mixed person and tense: sentence shifts from second person 'you' to third person 'them' and mixes past 'didn't' with general statement. Make it consistent: use generic subject 'someone' and present simple for general truths. Remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: Keep person and tense consistent in general statements.

× Secondly, making this can, uh, restrict their freedoms because if it's not making this, like, for example, go shopping, they can go.

✓ Secondly, making lists can restrict their freedom because if they don't make a list, for example when they go shopping, they can go more freely.

Awkward structure and word choice: 'making this' is vague; use 'making lists'. 'Restrict their freedoms' is pluralized awkwardly—use 'freedom'. The clause 'if it's not making this' is ungrammatical; replace with 'if they don't make a list'. Clarify example and complete idea. Suggestion: Use clear noun phrases and consistent subject pronouns.

× I prefer to make a list on my, for example, a shopping list on the iPhone because it offer the scrubbing out sessions means after I tick the box it will gone.

✓ I prefer to make a shopping list on my iPhone because it offers a way to cross items out: after I tick the box, they are gone.

Multiple errors: preposition/possessive 'on my, for example, a shopping list on the iPhone' is messy—simplify to 'on my iPhone'. Subject-verb agreement 'it offer' should be 'it offers'. 'scrubbing out sessions' is nonstandard; use 'a way to cross items out'. 'it will gone' is ungrammatical; use 'they are gone' or 'they disappear'. Also plural agreement for 'items'. Suggestion: Simplify phrasing, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use standard verbs for UI actions.

× So I don't need to, uh, check if I have bought it, if I need to check it repeatedly, if I bought it or no uh, it's and it's also convenient to bring along.

✓ So I don't need to check repeatedly whether I have bought an item, and it's also convenient to carry along.

Awkward adverb placement and repetition: move 'repeatedly' after 'check' for clarity. Use 'whether' instead of repeated 'if' clauses and correct tense 'have bought'. Remove fillers 'uh' and redundant phrases. Use 'carry' instead of 'bring' for portable convenience. Suggestion: Combine clauses cleanly, place adverbs near verbs, and avoid fillers.