Library— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: ਤੁਹਾਡੇ ਜਵਾਬ ਵਿੱਚ ਵਾਕਾਂ ਦੀ ਬਣਤਰ ਸਹੀ ਨਹੀਂ ਹੈ ਅਤੇ ਕਈ ਵਾਰ ਗਲਤ ਸ਼ਬਦਾਂ ਦੀ ਵਰਤੋਂ ਹੋਈ ਹੈ। ਜਵਾਬ ਨੂੰ ਸਧਾਰਨ ਅਤੇ ਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਬਣਾਓ ਅਤੇ ਵਾਕਾਂ ਨੂੰ ਲਾਜ਼ਮੀ ਤੌਰ 'ਤੇ ਸਹੀ ਕ੍ਰਮ ਵਿੱਚ ਰੱਖੋ।

Example: I don't often go to the library now, but I used to visit it regularly during college with my friends to read religious books.

Suggestion: ਤੁਹਾਡੇ ਜਵਾਬ ਵਿੱਚ ਵਾਕਾਂ ਦੀ ਸਹੀ ਬਣਤਰ ਨਹੀਂ ਹੈ ਅਤੇ ਵਿਚਾਰ ਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਨਹੀਂ ਹਨ। ਜਵਾਬ ਨੂੰ ਸਧਾਰਨ ਅਤੇ ਲਾਜ਼ਮੀ ਤੌਰ 'ਤੇ ਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਬਣਾਓ ਅਤੇ ਲਿੰਕਿੰਗ ਸ਼ਬਦ ਵਰਤੋਂ।

Example: Usually, I go to the library to read books on different subjects such as history, geography, and media to learn more about these topics.

Suggestion: ਜਵਾਬ ਵਿੱਚ ਗਲਤ ਵਾਕਾਂਸ਼ ਹਨ ਅਤੇ ਵਾਕਾਂ ਦੀ ਲਾਜ਼ਮੀ ਬਣਤਰ ਨਹੀਂ ਹੈ। ਜਵਾਬ ਨੂੰ ਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਅਤੇ ਲਾਜ਼ਮੀ ਤੌਰ 'ਤੇ ਸਹੀ ਬਣਾਓ ਅਤੇ ਵਧੇਰੇ ਵਿਸਥਾਰ ਦਿਓ।

Example: Yes, when I was a child studying in primary school, a new library was built for children where we could spend time reading comics and books and enjoy ourselves.

Suggestion: ਜਵਾਬ ਵਿੱਚ ਕਈ ਗਲਤੀਆਂ ਹਨ ਅਤੇ ਵਿਚਾਰ ਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਨਹੀਂ ਹਨ। ਜਵਾਬ ਨੂੰ ਸਪਸ਼ਟ, ਸਹੀ ਅਤੇ ਲਾਜ਼ਮੀ ਤੌਰ 'ਤੇ ਲਿੰਕਿੰਗ ਸ਼ਬਦਾਂ ਨਾਲ ਜੋੜੋ।

Example: I think Chinese children often go to the library because the country encourages kids to be more active in learning compared to other countries. They want to strengthen children's skills in various areas.

× In the present time I will not go to the library in the regular basis but in the college time.

✓ At present, I do not go to the library regularly, but I did during college time.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'will' to describe a present habit, which is inappropriate. 'Will' is used for future actions. The sentence should use the present simple tense to describe current habits and past simple for past habits.

× On that time we visit to the library with my friends to read the some religion books.

✓ At that time, we visited the library with my friends to read some religious books.

The phrase 'visit to the library' is incorrect; 'visit' does not require 'to' when followed by a direct object. Also, 'on that time' should be 'at that time'. 'Some religion books' should be 'some religious books' to use the correct adjective form.

× I think if I go to the library to read the books for the different structure so they can to learn about the history, about the geographical. Media.

✓ I think if I go to the library to read books on different subjects, I can learn about history and geography.

The phrase 'read the books for the different structure' is unclear and incorrect; 'on different subjects' is appropriate. 'They can to learn' is incorrect; 'can' should be followed by the base verb without 'to'. 'About the geographical. Media.' is fragmented and unclear; corrected to 'about history and geography'.

× Yes, in the childhood time when I study in my primary school, that time they can to make the new library for children and children.

✓ Yes, in my childhood when I studied in primary school, they built a new library for children.

'When I study' should be in past tense 'studied' to match the past time frame. 'They can to make' is incorrect; past tense 'built' is appropriate. The repetition 'for children and children' is redundant and removed.

× Can given the some time to read the comics, books and enjoy the time.

✓ They were given some time to read comics and books and enjoy themselves.

'Can given the some time' is grammatically incorrect; 'were given some time' is correct passive past tense. 'Enjoy the time' is awkward; 'enjoy themselves' is more natural.

× I think Chinese girls are often go to the library because these countries has always want two children's cash more active rather than other countries.

✓ I think Chinese girls often go to the library because this country has always wanted children to be more active than other countries.

'Are often go' is incorrect; 'often go' is correct. 'These countries has' is incorrect; 'this country has' is correct singular subject-verb agreement. 'Want two children's cash' is unclear; corrected to 'wanted children to be'.

× They want to strong the children to the different different scales.

✓ They want to strengthen children in different areas.

'Want to strong' is incorrect; 'want to strengthen' is correct. 'To the different different scales' is unclear and incorrect; 'in different areas' is appropriate.