Library— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn có vẻ dài dòng và thiếu sự mạch lạc. Bạn nên tránh sử dụng các từ ngữ không cần thiết như "uh", "well", "umm" và cố gắng trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời trở nên mạch lạc và logic hơn.

Example: Yes, I usually go to the library every day because I am in my final year of high school and need to complete my assignments. Additionally, I like to visit on weekends to study in a quiet environment.

Suggestion: Bạn nên tránh lặp lại thông tin đã nói trước đó và giảm thiểu các từ ngữ thừa như "uh", "well". Hãy trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Đồng thời, hãy sử dụng từ vựng phong phú và chính xác hơn.

Example: I usually go to the library to do my homework because it provides a quiet place. Besides that, I enjoy reading books there to escape the noise of the city.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng rõ ràng nhưng bị ngắt quãng và có lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ. Bạn nên luyện tập cách nối câu và sử dụng thì quá khứ chính xác hơn. Hạn chế sử dụng các từ ngữ thừa và nói trôi chảy hơn.

Example: When I was a kid, I went to the library about once a week because I didn't have my own vehicle. My parents usually took me there.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều từ ngữ lặp lại, không cần thiết. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp hơn và sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp.

Example: I believe it depends on the child's personality. Those who enjoy reading often visit the library, while others may not be interested.

× I tend to go there in order to complete all of my assignment.

✓ I tend to go there in order to complete all of my assignments.

The word 'assignment' should be plural 'assignments' because it refers to multiple tasks, not just one.

× I'm also really into coming there to read book in order to avoid the hustle and bustle of the city.

✓ I'm also really into coming there to read books in order to avoid the hustle and bustle of the city.

The word 'book' should be plural 'books' because it refers to reading more than one book.

× Well, as a kid, I, I went to library, but I think is, uh, is what, one time a week for the reason that at that time I didn't have my private vehicle.

✓ Well, as a kid, I went to the library, but I think it was only once a week because at that time I didn't have my private vehicle.

The noun 'library' requires the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific place. Also, 'is what' is incorrect and should be replaced with 'it was only' to express frequency in the past.

× So I have to wait. My parents, uh, came and take and took me to that place.

✓ So I had to wait. My parents came and took me to that place.

The sentence is about past events, so 'have to' should be in past tense 'had to'. Also, 'take' is incorrect here and should be 'took' to match past tense.

× If they, if they are a a person who prefer reading books or umm or immerse in a piece, I think they will uh, like like this place.

✓ If they are a person who prefers reading books or immersing in peace, I think they will like this place.

'Person' is singular, so the verb should be 'prefers' (third person singular). Also, 'immerse in a piece' is incorrect; it should be 'immersing in peace' or 'immersing themselves in peace' to make sense.

× If they, if they are a a person who prefer reading books or umm or immerse in a piece, I think they will uh, like like this place.

✓ If they are a person who prefers reading books or immersing in peace, I think they will like this place.

After 'prefer', the verb should be in '-ing' form 'reading'. Similarly, 'immerse' should be 'immersing' to maintain parallel structure.