Library— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to reduce hesitation and filler words such as 'uh' to make your speech more fluent and natural. Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating the same idea multiple times. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details with linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

Example: Yes, I often go to the library about once a week because it provides a quiet environment that helps me concentrate better. I usually study for my examinations there, which makes it a very useful place for me.

Suggestion: Focus on speaking more fluently by avoiding hesitation and correcting grammar mistakes such as 'a books' and 'borrow my'. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, provide more specific details about the types of business books you read and how they help you.

Example: I usually read business books that I borrow from the library. These books help me understand topics related to business and marketing, which is my major at university. Therefore, reading them is very useful for preparing for my exams.

Suggestion: Try to improve sentence structure and grammar, for example, use 'the library' instead of 'library' and correct verb forms. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to make your answer coherent. Also, avoid hesitation and filler words. Provide more vivid descriptions to enrich your answer.

Example: When I was a kid, I didn't go to the library because it was quite difficult for me to focus on reading, and I didn't like quiet places. Instead, I preferred going to the park to play with my friends, which was a very memorable experience for me.

Suggestion: Avoid uncertainty by giving a clear opinion or stating that you are not sure. Improve grammar and sentence clarity, for example, 'library offers many opportunities to learn about different subjects'. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. Try to be more concise and avoid repetition.

Example: I'm not sure about Chinese kids, but in Japan, many children often go to the library because it offers various opportunities to learn about different subjects. I think this is a very positive trend.

× I often go to the library, uh, maybe once a week, uh, which, uh, which provides us a real, provide me a lot of good opportunity to, uh, concentrate better.

✓ I often go to the library, uh, maybe once a week, uh, which, uh, provides me with a lot of good opportunities to, uh, concentrate better.

The phrase 'provide me a lot of good opportunity' is incorrect because 'provide' should be followed by 'with' when indicating what is given. Also, 'opportunity' should be plural 'opportunities' to match 'a lot of'. The verb 'provides' agrees with 'which' referring to the library.

× I do, uh, read a books that I borrow my, borrow them and I usually read, uh, business book.

✓ I do, uh, read books that I borrow, and I usually read, uh, business books.

The phrase 'a books' is incorrect because 'a' is used with singular nouns, but 'books' is plural. Also, 'business book' should be plural 'business books' to match the context of reading multiple books.

× This really, uh, which is really helpful to understand the business work and marketing.

✓ This is really helpful for understanding business work and marketing.

The phrase 'helpful to understand' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'helpful for' followed by a gerund ('understanding'). Also, 'the business work' is better as 'business work' without 'the'.

× I, my course that I, I take in the university is business marketing.

✓ My course that I take at the university is business marketing.

The phrase 'in the university' is less common than 'at the university' when referring to attending an institution. Also, the sentence is corrected for clarity and fluency.

× When I was a kid, I didn't go to library because it quite difficult for me to focus on reading and I didn't like the quiet places I prefer to, I prefer to the park.

✓ When I was a kid, I didn't go to the library because it was quite difficult for me to focus on reading and I didn't like quiet places. I preferred to go to the park.

The phrase 'go to library' requires the definite article 'the' as it refers to a specific place. Also, 'it quite difficult' is missing the verb 'was'. The sentence is split for clarity and corrected for tense consistency.

× So when I was a kid I went to a park to play with my friends, which was really, uh, memorable thing for me.

✓ So when I was a kid, I went to a park to play with my friends, which was really a memorable thing for me.

The phrase 'memorable thing' requires the article 'a' before it. The rest of the sentence is correct in past tense.

× I don't know exactly if Chinese people go to the library or not, but I think I live in Japan, so I think Japanese people, Japanese kids often go to the library recently because library offers a lot of opportunities to them to about to learn about different kinds of measure.

✓ I don't know exactly if Chinese people go to the library or not, but I live in Japan, so I think Japanese people, especially Japanese kids, often go to the library recently because the library offers them a lot of opportunities to learn about different kinds of subjects.

The phrase 'I think I live in Japan' is corrected to 'I live in Japan' for clarity. 'Library offers a lot of opportunities to them to about to learn' is incorrect; it should be 'offers them a lot of opportunities to learn'. Also, 'different kinds of measure' is unclear and corrected to 'different kinds of subjects'. The definite article 'the' is added before 'library'.

× So I think it's really good things.

✓ So I think it's really a good thing.

The phrase 'good things' is plural but preceded by 'it's' (it is), which is singular. It should be 'a good thing' to match the singular verb 'is'.