Library— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, like), correct tense and grammar, and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., "However," "For example").

Example: Not really. I am not a big reader, but I used the university library for research. For example, I often went there to find articles and books for my project work.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence and organize supporting details with linking words. Fix grammar (plural/singular, verb forms) and be specific about activities and purpose.

Example: I usually study and take notes in the library. Because there is a wide range of books, I copy important information into my notebook and then use those notes to prepare lessons or revise for exams.

Suggestion: Answer directly and use past tense correctly. Avoid repetition and give a concise reason with a linking word (e.g., "because"). Add one specific example to support your statement.

Example: Not really. When I was a child, teachers and my parents prepared most of my lessons, so I didn't need to visit the library. For example, my mother would review my homework and bring books for me to read at home.

Suggestion: Be careful with generalizations and grammar. Start with a clear statement, avoid hesitations, and give a balanced, specific explanation. Use linking words like "because" or "for example" and correct word choice (e.g., "primary school children").

Example: Generally, primary school children in China do not go to the library often because their curriculum focuses on basic activities like crafts and worksheets. For example, many classes include in-school craft sessions rather than library visits.

× Not really because I'm not a book person, but uh, when I was in university that time I went to the library for some project work or some getting information about my theory.

✓ Not really because I'm not a book person, but when I was at university I went to the library for project work or to get information for my theory.

Incorrect use of tense/verb forms and awkward phrasing. 'When I was in university that time' is redundant and should be 'when I was at university'. 'Some project work or some getting information about my theory' mixes noun phrases and gerund awkwardly; use parallel infinitives: 'for project work or to get information for my theory'. Ensure preposition 'at university' and consistent verb forms.

× Usually I take notes from the library because there are variety of books and from that book I collecting notes and after that I may I prepare my lesson.

✓ Usually I take notes in the library because there are a variety of books, and from those books I collect notes, and after that I prepare my lessons.

Several errors: 'take notes from the library' -> 'take notes in the library' (preposition). 'there are variety of books' needs the article 'a variety of books'. 'from that book I collecting notes' uses incorrect verb form; change to 'from those books I collect notes'. Remove extra 'may I' and pluralize 'lesson' to 'lessons' for general meaning. Use base verb after subject for present tense.

× Not really because that time all the lessons prepared by our teacher or sometimes our parents helps helps us.

✓ Not really because at that time all the lessons were prepared by our teacher, and sometimes our parents helped us.

Tense and agreement errors: 'that time' -> 'at that time'. Passive past needs 'were prepared'. 'our parents helps helps us' repeats word and uses present tense 'helps'; it should be past 'helped'. Remove duplication.

× Especially my mother helped me about my lesson.

✓ Especially my mother helped me with my lessons.

Incorrect preposition 'about' with 'helped'; correct collocation is 'helped me with'. Also pluralize 'lessons' for general context. Keeps past tense.

× So for that reason there were no need for going library.

✓ So for that reason there was no need to go to the library.

Wrong structure: use 'there was no need to' + base verb 'go'. Also require preposition 'to the library' and singular 'there was' for 'no need'.

× Uh, no, Chinese kids are don't, uh, go to the library because in their primary section, they are only doing the some basic work.

✓ No, Chinese children don't usually go to the library because in primary school they only do some basic work.

Incorrect auxiliary order 'are don't' should be 'don't'. 'Chinese kids' -> 'Chinese children' more natural. 'primary section' -> 'primary school'. 'they are only doing the some basic work' has extra 'the' and awkward continuous tense; use simple present 'they only do some basic work'.

× It could be crafting, uh, pasting and that type of lesson are prepared for them.

✓ It could be crafting, pasting, and that type of lesson is prepared for them.

Subject-verb agreement: singular subject 'that type of lesson' requires 'is prepared'. Also list items should be separated by commas and avoid filler 'uh'. Keep simple present passive 'is prepared'.

× So for that reason, Chinese store and don't go to the library in kid.

✓ So for that reason, Chinese children don't go to the library when they are kids.

Major sentence structure and word choice errors: 'Chinese store' is incorrect; should be 'Chinese children'. Placement of 'don't' is wrong in relation to subject. 'in kid' is ungrammatical; use 'when they are kids' or 'as children'. Adjust word order to subject + auxiliary + verb.