Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is clear and relevant but can be improved by making it more concise and natural. Avoid redundancy like 'over consumers consumerism' which is unclear. Use simpler, more natural phrases and limit your answer to about 4-5 sentences. Also, try to add linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Example: Actually, I don't like buying shoes very often because I think it's unnecessary to have too many pairs. People tend to buy shoes just because of trends, but I believe having one or two good pairs is enough. So, I only buy new shoes when I really need them.

Suggestion: Your answer is detailed and includes a personal experience, which is good. However, try to avoid repeating phrases like 'a couple of months ago' and 'not too long ago' together. Use linking words like 'although' or 'but' to make your answer more coherent. Also, try to be more concise and natural in your expression.

Example: Yes, I have bought shoes online. Although I was a bit nervous at first because I had never tried shoes before buying, I ordered a pair from a website called Shane a few months ago. Fortunately, the shoes arrived in perfect condition, and I still wear them every day.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by avoiding repetition like 'I am very frugal' and 'I do tend to save money a lot'. Also, try to use linking words such as 'so' or 'therefore' to connect your ideas. Be more concise and natural in your response.

Example: I usually don't spend much on shoes because I like to save money. So, I spend around ₹50,000 or about $200 per year, and I try to stick to this budget every year.

Suggestion: Your answer has good ideas but is incomplete and a bit unclear at the end. Try to finish your sentences fully and use linking words like 'because' or 'since' to explain your preference clearly. Also, avoid long sentences that may confuse the listener. Keep your answer natural and concise.

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes because fashion trends change quickly. Since fashionable shoes may go out of style soon, I like to buy shoes that I can wear comfortably for many years.

× the trend of over consumers consumerism has influenced us all to buy excessive amount of shoes

✓ the trend of overconsumption has influenced us all to buy an excessive amount of shoes

The phrase 'over consumers consumerism' is incorrect. The correct term is 'overconsumption' which is singular and refers to excessive consumption. Also, 'excessive amount' should be preceded by 'an' because 'amount' is singular and countable in this context.

× a pair or two is enough for one person

✓ a pair or two are enough for one person

When referring to 'a pair or two', the subject is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is' to agree in number.

× I bought shoes from this website called Shane

✓ I bought shoes on this website called Shane

The correct preposition to use with websites when referring to purchasing is 'on' rather than 'from'.

× I do tend to save money a lot

✓ I do tend to save a lot of money

The phrase 'save money a lot' is incorrect. The correct order is 'save a lot of money' to properly quantify the amount of money saved.

× I do stay within budget in the future years as well

✓ I do stay within budget in future years as well

The phrase 'in the future years' is awkward. It is better to say 'in future years' without 'the' for general reference to upcoming years.

× I could be done with them in a.

✓ I could be done with them in a short time.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'in a.' which is incomplete. It needs a noun or phrase to complete the thought, such as 'in a short time' or 'in a while'.