Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to make your answer more structured and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words to make your response coherent and natural. Avoid repeating phrases like 'I just love'.

Example: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes quite a lot because they are comfortable to wear. However, I don't prefer sandals like some other girls. I usually buy new shoes every six months to keep my collection updated.

Suggestion: Your answer is a bit unclear and incomplete. Try to give a clear topic sentence and explain your experience with specific reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Example: Yes, I have bought shoes online before, but the size was not perfect for me. Since my feet are quite long, I find it difficult to choose the right size online, so I prefer buying shoes in physical stores.

Suggestion: Your answer is a bit confusing and lacks clarity. Try to answer directly and provide specific details. Avoid informal phrases like 'OK' and use linking words to improve coherence.

Example: I usually don't spend my own money on shoes because my parents buy them for me. They typically spend around 3000 to 4000 rupees, but I don't focus much on the price when choosing shoes.

Suggestion: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using more natural expressions and linking words. Avoid phrases like 'facade of the shoes' and try to be more concise.

Example: I always prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones because comfort is more important to me than appearance. Unlike many people, I prioritize how the shoes feel rather than how they look.

× I just love wearing shoes and I just love how comfortable they are for me.

✓ I just love to wear shoes and I just love how comfortable they are for me.

The verb 'love' is often followed by the infinitive form 'to wear' rather than the gerund 'wearing' in this context. Using 'to wear' sounds more natural and grammatically correct here.

× I don't like the sandals, of course, like other girls.

✓ I don't like sandals, of course, like other girls.

The article 'the' is unnecessary before 'sandals' when speaking generally. Removing 'the' makes the sentence grammatically correct and natural.

× But yeah, I do wear it often and just buy it every six months, I guess.

✓ But yeah, I do wear them often and just buy them every six months, I guess.

The pronoun 'it' is singular, but 'shoes' is plural. Therefore, the correct pronoun is 'them' to agree in number with 'shoes'.

× Yes, definitely, but it was not the perfect size I wanted and so I realized that it is not better to buy shoes online for me as my as my foot is quite long and it's not.

✓ Yes, definitely, but it was not the perfect size I wanted, so I realized that it is not better for me to buy shoes online as my foot is quite long.

The original sentence is awkward and contains repetition ('as my as my'). Reordering and removing redundancy improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I usually personally don't spend money on the shoes I buy but my parents do and they are generally like 3000 to 4000 bucks but I don't go after the prices only OK.

✓ I usually personally don't spend money on the shoes I buy, but my parents do, and they generally spend around 3000 to 4000 bucks. But I don't focus only on the prices, OK.

The phrase 'go after the prices' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'focus on the prices' or 'go by the prices'. Also, adding commas improves sentence clarity.

× I will go again and again over comfortable shoes only, not fashionable.

✓ I will choose comfortable shoes again and again, not fashionable ones.

The phrase 'go again and again over' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'choose again and again'. Also, 'fashionable' should be followed by 'ones' to refer to shoes.

× I just give much more priority to comfort than outer look or the facade of the shoes and everything like other people.

✓ I just give much more priority to comfort than to the outer look or the facade of the shoes, unlike other people.

The phrase 'than outer look' needs the preposition 'to' after 'than' for parallel structure. Also, 'unlike other people' is clearer than 'like other people' in this context.