Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to avoid repetition and provide a more natural and complete response. Start with a clear topic sentence and then add specific details about your buying habits. For example, mention why you don't care much about buying shoes and explain your buying frequency more smoothly.

Example: I don't really enjoy buying shoes because I don't pay much attention to fashion. Usually, I buy new shoes about twice a year when my old ones wear out.

Suggestion: Improve your answer by using more formal language and linking words to make it coherent. Avoid informal phrases like 'wanna' and 'yeah'. Also, clarify your points with specific reasons and structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details.

Example: Yes, I usually buy shoes online because it is more convenient. I can easily select the size and color, and then I just wait at home for the delivery.

Suggestion: Provide a clearer and more structured answer. Avoid filler words like 'like' and 'yeah'. Start with a direct answer and then explain your reasoning with specific details. Also, clarify the currency consistently.

Example: I usually spend between 200 and 300 Chinese yuan on shoes because I don't pay much attention to the brand; I just want something affordable and practical.

Suggestion: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain your preference with specific reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid incomplete sentences.

Example: I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because I am a practical person. Comfort is more important to me than fashion since I wear shoes for long periods every day.

× if I wanna purchase a new shoes, I usually purchase it online 'cause it's more convenient to choose size and color and I just wait in my home and yeah, get it.

✓ if I wanna purchase new shoes, I usually purchase them online 'cause it's more convenient to choose size and color and I just wait in my home and yeah, get them.

The word 'shoes' is plural, so it should not be preceded by 'a new' which is singular. Also, the pronouns referring to 'shoes' should be plural ('them') instead of singular ('it'). This correction ensures proper agreement between nouns and determiners/pronouns.

× I think it's about like 200 to CN¥300, 'cause I don't care about what brand my shoe is, yeah.

✓ I think it's about like 200 to CN¥300, 'cause I don't care about what brand my shoes are, yeah.

The word 'shoes' is plural, so the verb should agree in plural form ('are' instead of 'is'). This correction ensures subject-verb agreement with plural nouns.

× So 'cause I am a very practical person and the more comfortable need.

✓ So, 'cause I am a very practical person, I need more comfort.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. It lacks a proper verb and subject in the second clause. The correction restructures the sentence to clearly express the intended meaning with proper sentence structure.