Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use correct grammar. For example, start by stating whether you like buying shoes and how often, then add a supporting detail if needed.

Example: I don't buy shoes very often because I only have two pairs at home. However, I enjoy shopping for other items more than shoes.

Suggestion: Your answer lacks clarity and has grammatical mistakes. Try to organize your response with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, be specific about your experience and avoid filler words like 'umm' and 'uh'.

Example: Yes, I have bought football shoes online. Before purchasing, I asked my friend for advice, and I like that online store because they have a good selection and excellent service.

Suggestion: Your answer is confusing and contains unclear numbers and grammar errors. Provide a clear and concise response with specific details, and avoid repetition. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

Example: As a student, I usually spend between 200,000 to 500,000 Vietnamese dong on shoes. This amount is average for me, especially since I need shoes suitable for playing football.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and repetitive. Try to express your preference clearly with a topic sentence and support it with reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid redundancy.

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes because I want to feel at ease when I wear them. Comfortable shoes are suitable for both school and workouts, which makes them more practical for me.

× Ask myself, have only two shoes on in my house so I think I'm not a person who like to buy shoes but I think I love to shoppings for other things.

✓ I ask myself, I have only two pairs of shoes in my house, so I think I'm not a person who likes to buy shoes, but I think I love shopping for other things.

The original sentence has subject-verb agreement errors such as 'I ask myself' missing the subject 'I' and 'like' should be 'likes' to agree with 'a person who'. Also, 'shoppings' is incorrect; the correct form is 'shopping' as a noun. Additionally, 'two shoes' should be 'two pairs of shoes' because shoes come in pairs.

× Just umm, I bought football shoes from the e-commerce or e-commerce store. Uh, before that I asked, I asked my friend to for advice also, I think I love that store because they carry me very good at.

✓ Just, umm, I bought football shoes from an e-commerce store. Before that, I asked my friend for advice. Also, I think I love that store because they serve me very well.

The phrase 'from the e-commerce or e-commerce store' is awkward; 'from an e-commerce store' is clearer. 'Asked my friend to for advice' is incorrect; it should be 'asked my friend for advice'. 'They carry me very good at' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'they serve me very well' or 'they treat me very well'.

× I think not much as I'm still a student. So I think it will be around 2 to 200 to 500 Vietnam domes. So I think it's a average amount in my countries or for my for myself as a footballer in the in the community.

✓ I think not much as I'm still a student. So I think it will be around 200 to 500 Vietnamese dong. I think it's an average amount in my country for me as a footballer in the community.

The original sentence has quantifier and article errors: '2 to 200 to 500' is confusing; it should be '200 to 500'. 'Vietnam domes' is incorrect; the currency is 'Vietnamese dong'. 'A average amount' should be 'an average amount' because 'average' starts with a vowel sound. 'My countries' should be 'my country'.

× As I'm a fat guy so I will be lean on more lean on more comfortable shoes so I can carry more comfortable and I can carry whatever I want for school or workout or.

✓ As I'm a fat guy, I prefer to lean more on comfortable shoes so I can wear them comfortably and carry whatever I want for school or workout.

The phrase 'lean on more lean on more comfortable shoes' is repetitive and incorrect. It should be 'prefer to lean more on comfortable shoes'. 'Carry more comfortable' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'wear' for shoes and 'comfortably' is the correct adverb form. The sentence is also incomplete and needs to be finished properly.