Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn cần tự nhiên hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'I keen on' nên là 'I am keen on'. Ngoài ra, bạn nên sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh dùng từ không chính xác như 'chains' thay vì 'trends' hoặc 'styles'. Hãy thêm liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

Example: Yes, I am keen on buying shoes because I believe they reflect my personality. I usually buy new shoes twice a month to keep up with the latest trends.

Suggestion: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ 'buy you online' nên là 'buying shoes online'. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, tránh lỗi như 'marvel' không phù hợp trong ngữ cảnh. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý và mở rộng câu trả lời.

Example: Yes, I have bought shoes online. I find it easier than going to a store because I am shy to ask staff for help. Moreover, online shopping offers a wider variety of choices.

Suggestion: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi về số tiền chi tiêu và tránh câu trả lời dài dòng, thiếu mạch lạc. Câu trả lời cần có cấu trúc rõ ràng với câu chủ đề và chi tiết hỗ trợ. Hãy dùng từ vựng phù hợp và chính xác hơn.

Example: I usually spend quite a lot on shoes because I buy them twice a month. Sometimes, I purchase luxury brands like Louis Vuitton, which are quite expensive.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ 'they some fashionable shoes' nên là 'some fashionable shoes'. Bạn nên dùng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lỗi nhỏ để tăng tính tự nhiên.

Example: Of course, I prefer fashionable shoes because I want to express my personal style. Although some fashionable shoes cause foot pain, I still love them because they look great.

× Yet, I keen on buying shoes because I believe that shoes can reflect my own personality and I often buy it twice a month because I want to update the latest chains of shoes.

✓ Yet, I am keen on buying shoes because I believe that shoes can reflect my own personality and I often buy them twice a month because I want to update the latest chains of shoes.

The verb 'keen' requires the auxiliary verb 'am' to form the correct present tense expression 'I am keen'. Also, 'it' should be 'them' to agree with the plural noun 'shoes'.

× I often buy it twice a month because I want to update the latest chains of shoes.

✓ I often buy them twice a month because I want to update the latest chains of shoes.

The pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to 'shoes', which is plural. Therefore, 'them' should be used to match the plural noun.

× From my perspective, I think buy you online it's easier than going to store because I'm too shy to ask the staff about the shoes and marvel.

✓ From my perspective, I think buying online is easier than going to the store because I'm too shy to ask the staff about the shoes and marvel.

The phrase 'I think buy you online' is ungrammatical; it should be 'I think buying online'. Also, 'going to store' needs the article 'the' before 'store'. The word 'marvel' is unclear and likely incorrect in this context.

× I think I have more choice when I buy shoe online.

✓ I think I have more choices when I buy shoes online.

The noun 'choice' should be plural 'choices' to indicate multiple options. Also, 'shoe' should be plural 'shoes' to match the context.

× I don't know, but I'm sure that it's a big number because I often buy shoes twice a month and until now the amount of shoes in my house, it's a lot.

✓ I don't know, but I'm sure that it's a big number because I often buy shoes twice a month and until now, the number of shoes in my house is a lot.

The phrase 'the amount of shoes' is incorrect; 'number of shoes' is appropriate for countable nouns. Also, the sentence structure is awkward and needs rephrasing for clarity.

× I sometimes buy from luxury brands such as Louis Vuitton.

✓ I sometimes buy shoes from luxury brands such as Louis Vuitton.

The verb 'buy' usually requires an object; adding 'shoes' clarifies what is being bought.

× Of course, fashionable shoes because I always want to show people about my personal style even though they some fashionable shoes can get me foot pain, but I don't care about it.

✓ Of course, fashionable shoes because I always want to show people my personal style even though some fashionable shoes can give me foot pain, but I don't care about it.

The phrase 'show people about my personal style' is incorrect; 'show people my personal style' is correct. Also, 'they some fashionable shoes' is ungrammatical; 'some fashionable shoes' is correct. 'Get me foot pain' should be 'give me foot pain'.