Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer shows enthusiasm, which is great, but it lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence and avoid redundancy. For example, mention how often you buy shoes and why you like them, using correct grammar and linking words to make your answer coherent.

Example: Yes, I really enjoy buying shoes because I am a sneakerhead. I usually buy new shoes every few months since I love collecting different styles and wearing them for various occasions.

Suggestion: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical mistakes and incomplete sentences. To improve, use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons for your preference. Also, avoid incomplete sentences and clarify your points.

Example: Yes, I have bought shoes online, but I prefer shopping in stores because I can see a wider variety and try them on. Moreover, visiting the store gives me a better experience and helps me choose the right fit.

Suggestion: Your answer provides relevant information but has grammatical errors and could be clearer. Try to structure your answer with a topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to improve coherence.

Example: The most expensive shoes I have bought cost $3000. However, I usually focus on quality rather than price because I believe good shoes are worth the investment.

Suggestion: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be improved by combining sentences and using linking words to avoid repetition and enhance flow. Also, try to use more varied vocabulary.

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes because I often wear them for more than 10 hours. Since I enjoy adventurous activities, having shoes with good support helps prevent pain in my knees.

× Who will does the best part of my life?

✓ Shoes have been the best part of my life.

The original sentence is structurally incorrect and does not convey the intended meaning. 'Who will does' is ungrammatical. The corrected sentence uses a proper subject and verb agreement to express the idea clearly.

× I don't really trust on online because I am more of a experienced person.

✓ I don't really trust online because I am more of an experienced person.

The verb 'trust' does not require the preposition 'on' after it. Removing 'on' corrects the verb usage. Also, 'experienced' should be preceded by 'an' which is correct here.

× I like to visit store and see what's there because over there you get a lot of varieties in terms of even a single article of a shoe and plus it feels good, you know, visiting the store being there and then trying on shoes because.

✓ I like to visit stores and see what's there because you get a lot of variety even in a single type of shoe, and plus it feels good, you know, visiting the store, being there, and trying on shoes.

The phrase 'visit store' should be 'visit stores' to indicate plural. 'Varieties' should be 'variety' as it is uncountable here. The sentence was also run-on and needed restructuring for clarity and correctness.

× The costliest shoes that I have ever bought is for $3000 but apart from that I usually go with the quality so money doesn't really matter to me when it comes on buying shoes.

✓ The costliest shoes that I have ever bought cost $3000, but apart from that, I usually go with quality, so money doesn't really matter to me when it comes to buying shoes.

'Shoes' is plural, so the verb should be 'cost' not 'is'. Also, 'comes on buying' should be 'comes to buying'. The sentence needed correction for subject-verb agreement and preposition use.

× I would go for the comfortable shoes because your leg really needs a comfort sole to be in because you're gonna be wearing that that thing for more than 10 hours.

✓ I would go for comfortable shoes because my legs really need a comfortable sole to be in since I'm going to be wearing them for more than 10 hours.

The pronouns 'your leg' and 'that that thing' are incorrect in this context; they should be 'my legs' and 'them' respectively to refer to the speaker and the shoes. Also, 'comfort sole' should be 'comfortable sole'.

× Because I'm more of an adventure person. I like to go with comfortable ones because I don't wanna give pain to my knees.

✓ I'm more of an adventurous person. I like to go with comfortable ones because I don't want to cause pain to my knees.

Starting a sentence with 'Because' followed by a period creates a sentence fragment. Also, 'adventure person' should be 'adventurous person'. 'Wanna' is informal and should be 'want to'. 'Give pain' is incorrect; 'cause pain' is the correct expression.