Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer has good content but lacks clarity and natural flow. Try to avoid redundancy and grammatical errors, and organize your ideas more clearly. Use linking words to connect your ideas and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

Example: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and usually shop for them on weekends after I get paid. I have a collection from brands like Adidas, Nike, and Jordan. Although I don't like to spend too much, I prefer fashionable shoes regardless of the price.

Suggestion: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical mistakes and unclear phrasing. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, and use linking words to improve coherence.

Example: Yes, I have bought shoes online before, but it was a bad experience. Last weekend, I ordered safety shoes for work, but I chose the wrong size. When they were delivered, I was disappointed. I realize it was my mistake, so I will be more careful next time.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and be more precise about your spending habits.

Example: I don't have a fixed budget for shoes because I focus more on their style than the price. Sometimes I buy expensive shoes, and other times I choose affordable ones. It really depends on whether I like the design.

Suggestion: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to organize your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to improve coherence. Also, avoid confusing terms like 'fashion universities'.

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes for everyday use because fashionable shoes are often uncomfortable for long walks. However, for special occasions, I choose fashionable shoes even if they are less comfortable.

× I have a great collection of shoes like Samar from Adidas, Nike, Jordan.

✓ I have a great collection of shoes like Samar from Adidas, Nike, and Jordan.

The sentence lists multiple brands, so 'and' is needed before the last item to correctly join the list items.

× Actually whenever I get my pay so I usually go for shopping on weekends.

✓ Actually, whenever I get my pay, I usually go shopping on weekends.

The phrase 'go for shopping' is incorrect; the correct form is 'go shopping' without 'for'. Also, commas improve sentence clarity.

× I do not like to spend much on shoe but I like to collect more and more shoe like.

✓ I do not like to spend much on shoes but I like to collect more and more shoes.

The word 'shoe' should be plural 'shoes' because it refers to multiple items.

× It does not matter the cost of shoes but I like fashionable shoes.

✓ The cost of shoes does not matter, but I like fashionable shoes.

The phrase 'It does not matter the cost' is incorrect; it should be 'The cost does not matter' for proper sentence structure.

× Yes, but it was very bad experience.

✓ Yes, but it was a very bad experience.

The article 'a' is needed before 'very bad experience' to make the noun phrase correct.

× Last weekend I got a new pair of shoes like it was safety shoes for my work but I selected the wrong size so when they like delivered when I when I got my shoe I really got disappointed.

✓ Last weekend I got a new pair of shoes; they were safety shoes for my work, but I selected the wrong size. When they were delivered and I got my shoes, I was really disappointed.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'like' is unnecessary, 'it was safety shoes' should be 'they were safety shoes' (plural), 'shoe' should be 'shoes', and the sentence needs to be split for clarity and correct tense usage.

× I know it why my mistake but still on the next time.

✓ I know why it was my mistake, but still, next time I will be careful.

The original sentence has incorrect pronoun placement and missing words; the correction clarifies the meaning and corrects pronoun use.

× As I told you earlier, I lacked my fashionable shoes, so I do not consider their price.

✓ As I told you earlier, I like my fashionable shoes, so I do not consider their price.

The word 'lacked' is incorrect here; likely the intended word is 'like'. 'Lacked' means missing, which does not fit the context.

× Uh, it can be costly and it can be not much expensive, so it totally depends on my mind.

✓ Uh, it can be costly and it can be not very expensive, so it totally depends on my preference.

The phrase 'not much expensive' is incorrect; 'not very expensive' is the correct form. Also, 'depends on my mind' is better expressed as 'depends on my preference'.

× If I like the thing, I always go for it.

✓ If I like something, I always go for it.

'The thing' is vague; 'something' is more appropriate in this context.

× Yeah, sometimes we do not get both things like sometimes shoes are very fashionable but are they are not very comfortable for long walk.

✓ Yeah, sometimes we do not get both things; sometimes shoes are very fashionable but they are not very comfortable for a long walk.

The phrase 'are they are' is incorrect and redundant; it should be 'they are'. Also, 'long walk' needs the article 'a'.

× So if I want them on for special occasions, I like to go for fashion universities.

✓ So if I want them on for special occasions, I like to go for fashionable shoes.

'Fashion universities' is incorrect and likely a mispronunciation or error; the intended phrase is 'fashionable shoes'.

× So it does not matter they are comfortable or not.

✓ So it does not matter whether they are comfortable or not.

The phrase needs 'whether' to correctly introduce the clause expressing alternatives.

× But for regular I will prefer comfortable.

✓ But for regular use, I will prefer comfortable shoes.

The sentence is incomplete; 'comfortable' is an adjective and needs a noun like 'shoes' to complete the meaning.