Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to avoid minor grammatical errors and redundancy. For example, instead of saying "such as I prefer chunky shoes for a special events while I on daily basis I love to wear the comfortable sneakers," you could say "For special events, I prefer chunky shoes, while on a daily basis, I like to wear comfortable sneakers." Also, keep your sentences concise and clear to sound more natural.

Example: I love buying new shoes and usually get a pair every month. Shoes can transform an outfit, so I choose different styles for different occasions. For example, I prefer chunky shoes for special events, while I wear comfortable sneakers daily.

Suggestion: Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. For instance, "Which was the excellent deal" is repeated and the last sentence is incomplete. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. You could say, "I often buy shoes online because I can find great discounts. For example, I recently purchased two pairs with 25% off the second pair, which was an excellent deal. Overall, I find online shopping convenient and affordable, so I usually prefer it."

Example: Yes, I often buy shoes online because there are great discounts. For example, I recently bought two pairs and got 25% off the second pair, which was a fantastic deal. I find online shopping very convenient and affordable, so I usually prefer it.

Suggestion: Try to avoid filler words like "uh" and "umm" and improve sentence clarity. Also, the last sentence is incomplete and unclear. You could say, "I usually spend around $250 on shoes each month because I like to match them with my outfits. I am interested in buying new styles from fresh collections to keep my wardrobe updated and stylish. Compared to buying expensive clothes, I prioritize investing in shoes."

Example: I usually spend about $250 on shoes each month because I like to match them with my outfits. I enjoy buying new styles from the latest collections to keep my wardrobe fresh and stylish. Compared to expensive clothes, I prefer to invest more in shoes.

Suggestion: Focus on grammatical accuracy and avoid filler words like "you know" and repeated words like "boost boost." Also, clarify your points with linking words. For example, "Most of the time, I prefer comfortable shoes because they provide good support and allow me to stand for long periods without pain. However, I enjoy wearing fashionable shoes on special occasions, such as parties or formal events, because they enhance my look and boost my confidence. So, while comfort is my daily priority, I also like to choose stylish shoes."

Example: Most of the time, I prefer comfortable shoes because they provide good support and let me stand for long periods without pain. However, I enjoy wearing fashionable shoes on special occasions like parties or formal events since they enhance my appearance and boost my confidence. So, comfort is my priority daily, but I also like to choose stylish shoes.

× I prefer chunky shoes for a special events

✓ I prefer chunky shoes for special events

The phrase 'a special events' incorrectly combines the singular article 'a' with the plural noun 'events'. The article should be removed to correctly refer to multiple events.

× while I on daily basis I love to wear the comfortable sneakers

✓ while on a daily basis I love to wear comfortable sneakers

The phrase 'I on daily basis' is missing the article 'a' and the subject 'I' is redundant here. Also, 'the comfortable sneakers' should be 'comfortable sneakers' to generalize the statement.

× you can open find a great discount on online sites

✓ you can often find a great discount on online sites

The word 'open' is incorrect here; the intended word is 'often' to indicate frequency. This is a misuse of vocabulary rather than a preposition, but it affects sentence clarity.

× I purchased 2 pairs of shoes with the 25% off on the second pair, which was an excellent deal. Which was the excellent deal.

✓ I purchased 2 pairs of shoes with 25% off on the second pair, which was an excellent deal.

The repeated sentence 'Which was the excellent deal.' is redundant and should be removed. Also, 'the 25% off' should be '25% off' without 'the' to be grammatically correct.

× I have a keen interest to buy the new styles, that is uh, that is a fresh collection in a market.

✓ I have a keen interest in buying new styles, that is, a fresh collection in the market.

The phrase 'keen interest to buy' should be 'keen interest in buying' to use the correct preposition and verb form. Also, 'in a market' should be 'in the market' to refer to the general market context.

× I prefer to be a comfortable shoes

✓ I prefer to wear comfortable shoes

The phrase 'be a comfortable shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and cannot be preceded by 'a'. The verb 'be' is also incorrect here; 'wear' is the appropriate verb.

× they provide a good sport and allow me to stay, you know, on my feet on a long periods without any pain

✓ they provide good support and allow me to stay, you know, on my feet for long periods without any pain

The word 'sport' is incorrect; it should be 'support'. Also, 'on a long periods' should be 'for long periods' to use the correct preposition and plural agreement.

× I do enjoy wearing a fashionable shoes on a special occasion such as party or the formal events

✓ I do enjoy wearing fashionable shoes on special occasions such as parties or formal events

The phrase 'a fashionable shoes' incorrectly combines singular article 'a' with plural noun 'shoes'. Also, 'a special occasion such as party or the formal events' should be pluralized and articles adjusted for consistency.