Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer needs to be clearer and more natural. Try to directly answer the question first, then add specific details. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Example: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes quite often. For example, just two days ago, I bought a pair of black shoes that I find very comfortable. I prefer black shoes because they match most of my outfits and feel good to wear.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Focus on directly answering the question, then add specific details with linking words. Use correct verb forms and sentence structure for clarity.

Example: Yes, I have bought shoes online before. Recently, I purchased a pair of black shoes from Instagram just before school started. They are very comfortable, and I prefer buying black shoes because they are versatile.

Suggestion: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Provide a direct response with specific details, including the currency and approximate amount. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

Example: I usually spend an affordable amount on shoes, around 200 Canadian dollars. For instance, I recently bought a pair of black shoes for that price, and they are very comfortable to wear.

Suggestion: Your answer is repetitive and could be more concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons using linking words to improve coherence.

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones because they make me feel good throughout the day. Moreover, comfortable shoes often look stylish too, so I usually choose them when I shop.

× Well I like buying shoes and recently when my school has started two days before I bought a very fascinated shoes black coloured and when I wear I feel very comfortable and I also prefer to all to wear new shoes with black coloured.

✓ Well, I like buying shoes and recently, when my school started two days ago, I bought a very fascinating black-coloured pair of shoes. When I wear them, I feel very comfortable and I also prefer everyone to wear new black-coloured shoes.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'shoes' with 'a very fascinated' which is singular adjective form and mismatched. 'Fascinated' is incorrect adjective here; 'fascinating' is appropriate. Also, 'shoes' should be referred to as 'pair of shoes' when singular. 'When I wear' needs an object 'them'. 'Prefer to all to wear' is incorrect; 'prefer everyone to wear' is better.

× Well I like buying shoes and recently when my school has started two days before I bought a very fascinated shoes black coloured and when I wear I feel very comfortable and I also prefer to all to wear new shoes with black coloured.

✓ Well, I like buying shoes and recently, when my school started two days ago, I bought a very fascinating black-coloured pair of shoes. When I wear them, I feel very comfortable and I also prefer everyone to wear new black-coloured shoes.

The adjective 'fascinated' is incorrectly used; it should be 'fascinating' to describe the shoes. Also, 'black coloured' should be hyphenated as 'black-coloured' to correctly modify the noun.

× Well I like buying shoes and recently when my school has started two days before I bought a very fascinated shoes black coloured and when I wear I feel very comfortable and I also prefer to all to wear new shoes with black coloured.

✓ Well, I like buying shoes and recently, when my school started two days ago, I bought a very fascinating black-coloured pair of shoes. When I wear them, I feel very comfortable and I also prefer everyone to wear new black-coloured shoes.

The phrase 'my school has started two days before' is incorrect. The past simple tense 'my school started two days ago' is appropriate to indicate a completed action in the past.

× Well I like buying shoes and recently when my school has started two days before I bought a very fascinated shoes black coloured and when I wear I feel very comfortable and I also prefer to all to wear new shoes with black coloured.

✓ Well, I like buying shoes and recently, when my school started two days ago, I bought a very fascinating black-coloured pair of shoes. When I wear them, I feel very comfortable and I also prefer everyone to wear new black-coloured shoes.

The pronoun 'I wear' lacks an object; it should be 'I wear them' referring to the shoes. Also, 'prefer to all to wear' is incorrect; 'prefer everyone to wear' is the correct pronoun usage.

× Well recently I boards are pair of black coloured shoes before just my school days and it is really fascinated me and when I where I felt very comfortable I bought from Instagram and I also prefer to buy black coloured shoes.

✓ Well, recently I bought a pair of black-coloured shoes just before my school days and they really fascinated me. When I wore them, I felt very comfortable. I bought them from Instagram and I also prefer to buy black-coloured shoes.

'I boards are pair' is incorrect; it should be 'I bought a pair'. 'It is really fascinated me' is incorrect; 'they really fascinated me' is correct because 'shoes' is plural. 'When I where' should be 'when I wore' (past tense).

× Well recently I boards are pair of black coloured shoes before just my school days and it is really fascinated me and when I where I felt very comfortable I bought from Instagram and I also prefer to buy black coloured shoes.

✓ Well, recently I bought a pair of black-coloured shoes just before my school days and they really fascinated me. When I wore them, I felt very comfortable. I bought them from Instagram and I also prefer to buy black-coloured shoes.

The verbs 'boards' and 'where' are incorrect forms. The correct past tense forms are 'bought' and 'wore' respectively.

× Well recently I boards are pair of black coloured shoes before just my school days and it is really fascinated me and when I where I felt very comfortable I bought from Instagram and I also prefer to buy black coloured shoes.

✓ Well, recently I bought a pair of black-coloured shoes just before my school days and they really fascinated me. When I wore them, I felt very comfortable. I bought them from Instagram and I also prefer to buy black-coloured shoes.

'Black coloured' should be hyphenated as 'black-coloured' to correctly modify the noun. 'Fascinated' is incorrectly used; 'fascinating' or 'fascinated me' as a verb is acceptable here.

× Well, usually I bought pair of shoes which are affordable and fascinated and recently I bought a shoe pair of shoes with black colored in 200,000 and when I where I feel.

✓ Well, usually I buy pairs of shoes which are affordable and fascinating, and recently I bought a pair of black-coloured shoes for 200,000. When I wear them, I feel comfortable.

'I bought pair of shoes' is missing an article; it should be 'a pair of shoes'. 'Shoe pair of shoes' is redundant; 'pair of shoes' is correct. 'Black colored' should be 'black-coloured'. 'When I where I feel' is incorrect; 'when I wear them, I feel' is correct.

× Well, usually I bought pair of shoes which are affordable and fascinated and recently I bought a shoe pair of shoes with black colored in 200,000 and when I where I feel.

✓ Well, usually I buy pairs of shoes which are affordable and fascinating, and recently I bought a pair of black-coloured shoes for 200,000. When I wear them, I feel comfortable.

The verb 'bought' is used inconsistently; 'usually' suggests present tense 'buy'. 'Where' is incorrect past tense; correct past tense is 'wore', but here present tense 'wear' fits better.

× Well, usually I bought pair of shoes which are affordable and fascinated and recently I bought a shoe pair of shoes with black colored in 200,000 and when I where I feel.

✓ Well, usually I buy pairs of shoes which are affordable and fascinating, and recently I bought a pair of black-coloured shoes for 200,000. When I wear them, I feel comfortable.

The pronoun 'them' is missing after 'wear' to refer to the shoes. Also, 'shoe pair of shoes' is redundant and confusing.

× Well, usually I bought pair of shoes which are affordable and fascinated and recently I bought a shoe pair of shoes with black colored in 200,000 and when I where I feel.

✓ Well, usually I buy pairs of shoes which are affordable and fascinating, and recently I bought a pair of black-coloured shoes for 200,000. When I wear them, I feel comfortable.

'Fascinated' is incorrectly used; 'fascinating' is the correct adjective to describe shoes. 'Black colored' should be hyphenated as 'black-coloured'.

× Well, in all way I also prefer to wear comfortable shoes because when you wear comfortable shoes, you look very gorgeous and feel very comfortable. And I also prefer to buy comfortable shoes.

✓ Well, in every way, I also prefer to wear comfortable shoes because when you wear comfortable shoes, you look very gorgeous and feel very comfortable. I also prefer to buy comfortable shoes.

'In all way' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'in every way' or 'in all ways' to indicate general preference.