Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや冗長な表現があり、自然さに欠けます。より簡潔で正確な表現を心がけ、文を5文以内にまとめると良いでしょう。

Example: I like buying shoes that fit my size, which is 26 centimeters. It is often difficult to find shoes that fit me well. Therefore, I rarely buy shoes because I prefer to use them for a long time.

Suggestion: 回答が途中で途切れており、内容が不明瞭です。話を整理して、理由や経験を明確に述べることが必要です。また、繰り返しや不要な言葉を減らしましょう。

Example: Yes, I have bought shoes online many times because it is more convenient than going to the store. Since I have little free time, online shopping saves me a lot of effort.

Suggestion: 回答が不明瞭で文法的な誤りが多いです。具体的な金額を明確に述べ、理由を簡潔に説明すると良いでしょう。

Example: I usually spend around a510,000 on shoes. Because my foot size is relatively large for a woman, I sometimes need to pay more to find the right shoes.

Suggestion: 回答は質問に答えていますが、文が不完全で繰り返しが多いです。理由を明確にし、文を簡潔にまとめることが大切です。

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes because I move around a lot in my daily life. For example, I often walk and go upstairs at school, so comfort is very important to me.

× I like buying a shoe that fit my size and my size is 26 centimeters so it is difficult to find the shoe that fit me.

✓ I like buying shoes that fit my size and my size is 26 centimeters so it is difficult to find shoes that fit me.

The word 'shoe' should be plural 'shoes' because the speaker is talking about shoes in general, not a single shoe. Also, 'fit' should be 'fit' for plural subject 'shoes'.

× But I really really buy.

✓ But I really rarely buy.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. The speaker likely means 'I really rarely buy' to express infrequency. 'Really really buy' is incorrect and lacks meaning here.

× I rarely buy shoes because I I would like to use the shoes that last long.

✓ I rarely buy shoes because I would like to use shoes that last long.

The phrase 'the shoes that last long' is better as 'shoes that last long' without 'the' to generalize. Also, 'I I' is a repetition error and should be corrected to 'I'.

× Actually I, I buy shoes online many times because it is more convenient than going shopping.

✓ Actually, I have bought shoes online many times because it is more convenient than going shopping.

The present perfect tense 'have bought' is appropriate here to indicate past experiences up to now, rather than simple present 'buy'. Also, a comma after 'Actually' improves clarity.

× Uh, I have less time to go out for buying material that I need.

✓ Uh, I have less time to go out to buy the materials that I need.

The phrase 'go out for buying' is incorrect; it should be 'go out to buy'. Also, 'material' should be plural 'materials' if referring to multiple items, and 'the' is needed before 'materials'.

× So I, I also, umm, there is an record that I.

✓ So I also, umm, have a record that I...

The original sentence is incomplete and ungrammatical. 'There is an record that I' is incorrect; it should be 'I have a record that I...' or rephrased for clarity.

× It depends on shoes, how much money I have to spend, but uh, my size or my foot size is 26 meters.

✓ It depends on the shoes, how much money I have to spend, but uh, my foot size is 26 centimeters.

'26 meters' is incorrect for foot size; it should be '26 centimeters'. Also, 'depends on shoes' should be 'depends on the shoes' to specify. 'My size or my foot size' is redundant; 'my foot size' suffices.

× That is rather bigger, bigger and female uh.

✓ That is rather big for a female, uh.

'Bigger, bigger' is repetitive and incorrect here. 'Big' is the correct adjective. The phrase is restructured for clarity.

× So I mostly I, it takes around ¥10,000 uh, to for my.

✓ So mostly, it takes around ¥10,000 for my shoes.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'To for my' is incorrect; it should be 'for my shoes'. Also, removing the repeated 'I' improves clarity.

× I like comforter shoes better because, uh, at my, in my daily lives, I have to move around.

✓ I like comfortable shoes better because, uh, in my daily life, I have to move around.

'Comforter' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'comfortable'. 'In my daily lives' should be 'in my daily life' as 'life' is uncountable here.

× Uh, I want, I want working at school and going upstairs.

✓ Uh, I want to work at school and go upstairs.

The verb 'want' should be followed by the infinitive form 'to work', not the gerund 'working'. Also, parallel structure requires 'go upstairs' instead of 'going upstairs'.

× My activity is like going upstairs and walking around and, uh, sit, sitting and.

✓ My activities include going upstairs, walking around, and sitting.

The sentence is incomplete and ungrammatical. 'Sit, sitting and' is incorrect; it should be 'sitting'. Also, 'My activity is like' is better expressed as 'My activities include'.