Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is good but try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm' and correct pronunciation errors such as 'nooses' instead of 'shoes'. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep sentences concise within 5 sentences.

Example: Yes, I love buying shoes because it is one of my favorite shopping activities. I usually buy shoes every few months, especially when I plan outdoor activities like hiking. For example, I prefer comfortable, stylish, and durable shoes that suit outdoor trips. Therefore, I always make sure to get the right pair for my needs.

Suggestion: Try to improve grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words to explain your opinion clearly. Avoid vague phrases and be more specific about your reasons for not liking online shopping.

Example: I am not a big fan of buying shoes online because I believe that shoes seen online may not be comfortable. Moreover, they can be more expensive than those bought in physical stores. Therefore, I prefer to try shoes in person before purchasing.

Suggestion: Avoid irrelevant words like 'food' and filler words. Be clear and direct in your answer. Use linking words to explain your budgeting habits and reasons for spending that amount on shoes.

Example: I usually spend around 3,000 to 4,000 rupees on shoes. I set aside this money separately to buy comfortable and durable shoes for different activities. This helps me ensure that I get good quality footwear.

Suggestion: Try to avoid filler words and unclear phrases like 'watch for the SO'. Use clear sentences with linking words to explain your preference and reasons.

Example: For me, fashion is all about comfort. I always choose shoes that make me feel comfortable because this boosts my confidence. Therefore, I prefer comfortable shoes that also look stylish.

× I usually buy nooses every few months, especially when I plan activities like umm, going in hiking or somewhere else.

✓ I usually buy shoes every few months, especially when I plan activities like hiking or going somewhere else.

The word 'nooses' is a misspelling of 'shoes'. Also, 'going in hiking' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'hiking' or 'going hiking'. The preposition 'in' is unnecessary here.

× I prefer comfortables and stylies and a diet durable suits for outdoor trips so I make sure to get a right pair.

✓ I prefer comfortable and stylish and quite durable shoes for outdoor trips, so I make sure to get the right pair.

The words 'comfortables', 'stylies', and 'diet durable suits' are incorrect. The correct adjectives are 'comfortable' and 'stylish'. 'Diet durable suits' seems to be a mishearing or typo; it should be 'quite durable shoes'. Also, 'a right pair' should be 'the right pair' because 'pair' is singular and specific here.

× I'm not a quite big fan of online shopper as I believe the shoes that you might seen online will not be that comfortable and it will cost you more than the suit that you have shown in the real place.

✓ I'm not quite a big fan of online shopping as I believe the shoes that you might see online will not be that comfortable and they will cost you more than the shoes that you have seen in a real store.

The phrase 'online shopper' should be 'online shopping' to refer to the activity. 'You might seen' is incorrect; it should be 'you might see' (present tense). 'It will cost you more than the suit' is incorrect; 'suit' should be 'shoes' and 'have shown' should be 'have seen'. Also, 'real place' is better expressed as 'real store'.

× While talking about spending money on this food, it would uh, it would be around 3 to 4K like almost everyone I have to buy so, so I make sure to keep separately that money for buying a comfortable and the durable shoes for different activity purposes.

✓ When talking about spending money on shoes, it would be around 3 to 4K. Like almost everyone, I have to buy, so I make sure to keep that money separately for buying comfortable and durable shoes for different activities.

'Spending money on this food' is incorrect; it should be 'spending money on shoes'. The sentence structure is confusing and run-on; it needs to be broken into clearer sentences. 'Keep separately that money' should be 'keep that money separately'. 'A comfortable and the durable shoes' should be 'comfortable and durable shoes' without articles because it's plural.

× Umm for me fashion is all about being comfortable. So I always watch for the SO, which makes me feel comfortable so that umm so that I can boost off my confidence and the style comes in comfortable in being comfortable.

✓ Umm, for me, fashion is all about being comfortable. So I always look for the shoes which make me feel comfortable so that I can boost my confidence, and style comes from being comfortable.

'Watch for the SO' is unclear and likely a mishearing; it should be 'look for the shoes'. 'Boost off my confidence' is incorrect; it should be 'boost my confidence'. The phrase 'the style comes in comfortable in being comfortable' is awkward and incorrect; it should be 'style comes from being comfortable'.