Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding redundancy and grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words. For example, instead of repeating "really," use varied vocabulary and connect your ideas smoothly.

Example: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes occasionally, especially when I need a new pair. I find it fascinating to wear different types of shoes that match my outfit, which helps me express my style.

Suggestion: Focus on clarity and coherence by organizing your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details linked logically. Avoid filler words and correct grammar mistakes. Use linking words like "however" to show contrast.

Example: Yes, I have bought shoes online once. Although the shoes looked beautiful and I thought they would fit me, they did not fit when they arrived. However, I still kept them because of their design.

Suggestion: Complete your sentences and avoid hesitation sounds. Provide a clear topic sentence followed by specific reasons using linking words. For example, explain why you set a budget and emphasize quality over quantity.

Example: I usually set a budget of around $100 for shoes because I believe quality is more important than quantity. This way, I ensure that the shoes I buy are durable and comfortable.

Suggestion: Make your answer more coherent by using linking words and avoiding repetition. Start with a clear preference, then explain your reasons with specific examples. Use varied vocabulary to express your ideas naturally.

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes because you are the one who wears them all day. Although fashionable shoes look good, they can be useless if they don't fit well. Wearing comfortable shoes helps me feel confident and focused throughout the day.

× Yes, I sometimes like to buy shoes if I needed one and it's really nice and it's really fascinating to wear different kind of shoes that really fit my outfit.

✓ Yes, I sometimes like to buy shoes if I need one and it's really nice and it's really fascinating to wear different kinds of shoes that really fit my outfit.

The phrase 'if I needed one' should be in the present tense 'if I need one' to match the habitual action expressed by 'sometimes like to buy'. Also, 'different kind of shoes' should be 'different kinds of shoes' to correctly use the plural form when referring to multiple types.

× Yes, I I just once uh bought shoes online because it really it really looks like a beautiful shoes and I think that it really fits me, but then when it arrive it does it didn't fit me so I got this.

✓ Yes, I just once bought shoes online because they really looked like beautiful shoes and I think that they really fit me, but then when they arrived, they didn't fit me so I returned them.

The sentence has several plural and singular agreement issues: 'a beautiful shoes' should be 'beautiful shoes' without 'a' because 'shoes' is plural; 'it really looks' should be 'they really looked' to agree with plural 'shoes' and past tense; 'when it arrive' should be 'when they arrived' to match plural and past tense; 'it didn't fit me' should be 'they didn't fit me' to agree with plural 'shoes'. Also, 'I got this' is unclear and was changed to 'I returned them' for clarity.

× I have my limits when buying some things, especially on shoes. I don't want to exceed to umm like $100 because for me quality over quantity is is important because even.

✓ I have my limits when buying some things, especially shoes. I don't want to exceed, um, like $100 because for me, quality over quantity is important.

The preposition 'on' is unnecessary after 'especially'; it should be 'especially shoes'. The phrase 'exceed to' is incorrect; 'exceed' does not require 'to'. The sentence was also cleaned up for clarity and completeness.

× I prefer the comfortable shoes because it is you who will wear the shoes. Although it is fashionable but it doesn't fit you well. I think it will become useless. What you project will be affected by the shoes that you wear and it's it's nice that you're wearing comfortable.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because you are the one who will wear the shoes. Although they are fashionable, if they don't fit you well, I think they become useless. What you project will be affected by the shoes that you wear, and it's nice that you're wearing comfortable ones.

The pronoun 'it' was incorrectly used to refer to 'shoes', which is plural; it should be 'they'. The phrase 'it is you who will wear' is better expressed as 'you are the one who will wear'. Also, 'it's nice that you're wearing comfortable' is incomplete; it should be 'comfortable ones' to refer to shoes. The sentence was restructured for clarity and correct pronoun usage.