Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn có vẻ không tự nhiên và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng không chính xác (ví dụ: "self or discount", "buy the saltwater 1"). Bạn nên sử dụng câu trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và dùng từ vựng phù hợp với ngữ cảnh.

Example: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because I like to keep my style updated. I usually visit shopping malls once or twice a month, especially during sales, so I can find good deals and save money.

Suggestion: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, tránh lỗi như "crawl through on the Internet to buying shoes". Câu trả lời nên mạch lạc, có liên kết logic giữa các ý và dùng từ phù hợp.

Example: Yes, I often buy shoes online because it is very convenient. There are many customer reviews, a wide variety of brands, and attractive discounts that help me make better choices.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác (ví dụ: "my watches are tight", "something item I want"). Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và dùng từ vựng phù hợp với ngữ cảnh.

Example: As a student, my budget is limited, so I don't spend much money on shoes. I try to buy affordable shoes that still look good.

Suggestion: Bạn nên chú ý dùng từ chính xác (ví dụ: "personal stuff" nên là "style", "compliment" nên là "complement", "balanced between staff and comfort" nên là "balance between style and comfort"). Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, mạch lạc và dùng từ phù hợp.

Example: I prefer fashionable shoes because they help me express my personal style and complement my outfit. For example, when I wear a suit, stylish shoes make me feel confident and professional. However, I also try to find a balance between style and comfort.

× I usually spend a few days each month visiting shopping malls, especially when they are self or discount at my favorite resort.

✓ I usually spend a few days each month visiting shopping malls, especially when there are sales or discounts at my favorite store.

The phrase 'self or discount at my favorite resort' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'at' for location, and the terms should be 'sales or discounts' instead of 'self or discount'. Also, 'resort' is likely a mistake for 'store'. This correction improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Uh. This way I can find goods due and buy the saltwater 1 without spending too much.

✓ Uh. This way I can find good deals and buy the shoes without spending too much.

The phrase 'goods due' and 'buy the saltwater 1' are incorrect and unclear. 'Goods due' should be 'good deals' to express bargains, and 'saltwater 1' seems to be a mishearing or typo for 'shoes'. Correct quantifiers and nouns improve sentence meaning.

× I'm a digital native, so crawl through on the Internet to buying shoes is frequently.

✓ I'm a digital native, so browsing the Internet to buy shoes is frequent.

The phrase 'crawl through on the Internet to buying shoes' is incorrect. The correct verb is 'browse' or 'surf', and the infinitive form 'to buy' should be used instead of 'to buying'. Prepositions and verb forms must be correct for clarity.

× I enjoy shopping the Internet umm because quite convenient at same time.

✓ I enjoy shopping on the Internet because it's quite convenient at the same time.

The phrase 'shopping the Internet' lacks the preposition 'on'. Also, 'quite convenient at same time' needs the article 'the' before 'same time' and a subject 'it is' for clarity.

× Moreover, there's many customer review, a variety of brands and often attractive discount could help me better make me better choice.

✓ Moreover, there are many customer reviews, a variety of brands, and often attractive discounts that could help me make better choices.

The phrase 'there's many customer review' is incorrect because 'there's' is singular while 'many customer reviews' is plural. Also, 'discount' and 'choice' should be plural to agree with 'many' and 'better' respectively.

× Personally I'm a student so my watches are tight so I don't spend too much buying shoes or something item I want cause quite tough to keep up with the trends.

✓ Personally, I'm a student so my finances are tight, so I don't spend too much buying shoes or other items I want because it's quite tough to keep up with the trends.

The word 'watches' is incorrect; it should be 'finances' or 'budget'. Also, 'something item' is incorrect; 'other items' is appropriate. The conjunction 'cause' should be 'because' for formal correctness.

× I prefer fashionable shoes because they allow me to express my personal stuff and compliment my outfit.

✓ I prefer fashionable shoes because they allow me to express my personal style and complement my outfit.

The word 'stuff' is informal and vague; 'style' is more appropriate. Also, 'compliment' (to praise) is incorrect here; the correct word is 'complement' (to enhance). This is a common confusion between homophones.

× For example, when I wear a suit to the outfit stylist should make me feel confident and professional.

✓ For example, when I wear a suit, the outfit should make me feel confident and professional.

The phrase 'to the outfit stylist' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'the outfit' as the subject that makes the speaker feel confident. The sentence structure is corrected for clarity.

× However, sometimes fashionable shoes can be less comfortable, so I try to find a balanced between staff and comfort.

✓ However, sometimes fashionable shoes can be less comfortable, so I try to find a balance between style and comfort.

The word 'balanced' is an adjective; the noun 'balance' is needed here. Also, 'staff' is incorrect; the intended word is 'style'. Correct word choice and form improve meaning.