Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to avoid filler words like 'umm' and repeated conjunctions such as 'and'. Also, make your answer more concise and structured by combining related ideas and limiting the response to 5 sentences or fewer.

Example: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and usually do so about once a year. I prefer athletic shoes and sneakers because they are very comfortable for daily use.

Suggestion: Reduce the use of filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence clarity by breaking long sentences into shorter, clearer ones. Use linking words to connect ideas logically and avoid redundancy.

Example: No, I have never bought shoes online because I believe it's important to see and try them on in person. This way, I can ensure they are comfortable since I wear them every day.

Suggestion: Your answer is clear and detailed. To improve, try to use more varied vocabulary and linking words to enhance coherence, such as 'for example' instead of 'for instance', and avoid minor grammatical errors like 'worth of' which should be 'worth'.

Example: I usually spend around $100 to $150 on shoes because this price range offers good quality and value. For example, luxury brands like Louis Vuitton are very expensive but not always worth the high price. Therefore, I try to balance style, comfort, and cost when choosing shoes.

Suggestion: Avoid filler words and correct minor errors such as 'feats' which should be 'feet'. Also, improve sentence structure by combining ideas more smoothly and using linking words to clarify your reasoning.

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones because comfort is more important for daily use. Since we are always on the move, having shoes that support your feet well is essential.

× I believe that it's, uh, very important to see the shoe, uh, from near, uh, face to face and, uh, wear them before buying it so that you can see how comfortable they are

✓ I believe that it's very important to see the shoe up close, face to face, and try them on before buying so that you can see how comfortable they are

The phrase 'see the shoe from near' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'up close' to indicate proximity. Also, 'wear them before buying it' is incorrect because 'wear' is not the right verb here; 'try them on' is the appropriate phrase when referring to testing shoes for fit and comfort before purchase.

× wear them before buying it so that you can see how comfortable they are

✓ try them on before buying so that you can see how comfortable they are

The pronoun 'it' refers to 'shoe' (singular), but 'them' refers to 'shoes' (plural). This inconsistency causes confusion. Since 'shoes' is plural, the pronoun should be plural throughout. Also, 'wear' is not the correct verb for testing shoes; 'try them on' is the correct expression.

× Although I try to find balance between style, comfort and cost when I'm choosing a shoe.

✓ Although I try to find a balance between style, comfort, and cost when I'm choosing a shoe.

The phrase 'find balance between' is missing the article 'a' before 'balance'. The correct phrase is 'find a balance between'. Also, commas are needed in the list for clarity.

× because I think shoes are not about fashion and style. It's mostly about how comfortable you're in them and how versatile it is for you to use it in your everyday life because you're moving and your feats are important.

✓ because I think shoes are not about fashion and style. It's mostly about how comfortable you are in them and how versatile they are for you to use in your everyday life because you're moving and your feet are important.

The phrase 'how comfortable you're in them' is incorrect; it should be 'how comfortable you are in them' to correctly use the verb 'to be'. Also, 'how versatile it is' should be 'how versatile they are' to agree with the plural noun 'shoes'. Finally, 'feats' is a misspelling; the correct word is 'feet'.