Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to give a clear and direct answer with a complete sentence. Avoid filler words like 'umm' and repetition. Also, provide specific details about how often you buy shoes using linking words to make your answer coherent.

Example: Yes, I like buying new shoes. Usually, I purchase a new pair every six months because I want to keep my collection updated and comfortable.

Suggestion: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using linking words and more specific details to explain your experience. Also, try to use past tense consistently and avoid minor grammar mistakes.

Example: Yes, I bought shoes online once a few years ago. However, my experience was disappointing because the shoes did not match the description, so I returned them.

Suggestion: Avoid filler words like 'uh' and try to form a complete sentence. Use linking words to explain your reason clearly and provide more specific details about your spending habits.

Example: I usually spend around $200 on shoes because comfortable and branded shoes tend to be expensive, but I think it's worth the investment.

Suggestion: Try to use clearer language and correct grammar. Provide a direct answer first, then explain your preference with linking words and specific reasons. Avoid vague phrases like 'in journal' and 'required depend on requirement'.

Example: I generally prefer comfortable shoes because I wear them daily. However, for special occasions, I choose fashionable shoes to match the event's style.

× Yes, I like, umm, purchase the new shoes, shoes or finally, I purchased new shoes after a six, after six months, uh, by doing by this way, I, I can, uh, by this way, I can, I can.

✓ Yes, I like to purchase new shoes, and finally, I purchased new shoes after six months. By doing it this way, I can.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure errors including awkward phrasing and repetition. The phrase 'purchase the new shoes, shoes or finally' is confusing and redundant. Also, 'after a six, after six months' is incorrect; 'after six months' is correct. The phrase 'by doing by this way' is incorrect; it should be 'by doing it this way'. Simplifying and restructuring the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Just once years ago I bought shoes online, but my experience was not so good because the shoes are not according to the description.

✓ Just once, years ago, I bought shoes online, but my experience was not so good because the shoes were not according to the description.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the action happened in the past, 'are' should be changed to 'were' to maintain past tense consistency. Also, adding commas after 'once' and 'years ago' improves readability.

× Usually I spend $200 on shoes because, uh, comfy and branded shoes are not less than that.

✓ Usually, I spend $200 on shoes because comfy and branded shoes are not less than that amount.

The phrase 'not less than that' is awkward and unclear. Adding 'amount' clarifies the reference to money. Also, adding a comma after 'Usually' improves sentence flow.

× Actually in journal I prefer comfortable shoes but for the function purpose I need fashionable shoes.

✓ Actually, in general, I prefer comfortable shoes, but for functional purposes, I need fashionable shoes.

The phrase 'in journal' is incorrect; it should be 'in general' to express a general preference. 'For the function purpose' is awkward; 'for functional purposes' is the correct expression. Adding commas improves readability.

× So it's the required depend on requirement.

✓ So it depends on the requirement.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'It's the required depend on requirement' is incorrect. The corrected sentence 'So it depends on the requirement' is concise and grammatically correct.