Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but try to avoid minor grammatical errors and redundancy. For example, instead of saying "browse into a variety of brands," say "browse a variety of brands." Also, avoid mixing tenses like "love" and "loved" in the same context. Try to keep your sentences concise and natural.

Example: Personally, I love buying shoes and often shop online because I can browse a variety of brands and types. Additionally, reading customer reviews helps me make better decisions.

Suggestion: Your answer is good but could be improved by linking ideas more smoothly and avoiding starting sentences with conjunctions like "And." Also, try to combine related ideas to make your response more coherent and natural.

Example: Absolutely. I recently bought a pair of sneakers online that fit me perfectly and were reasonably priced, which I found fantastic because shoes can really transform an outfit.

Suggestion: Your answer contains some unclear phrases and grammatical errors that affect clarity. Try to organize your ideas more clearly, use correct grammar, and avoid awkward expressions like "leaning or anti." Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

Example: Well, it depends. For example, Nike shoes, which are foreign brands, usually cost a lot. However, I often choose national brands like Leaning or Anti because they are affordable and their styles suit me well.

Suggestion: Your answer expresses your opinion clearly but could be improved by using more natural phrasing and avoiding awkward expressions like "the reason of wearing shoe." Also, avoid starting sentences with "Then" in this context. Try to be concise and use linking words to explain your reasoning.

Example: Personally, I prefer comfortable shoes because I believe the main purpose of wearing shoes is to provide comfort and convenience, not just to look good.

× I find it convenient to shop online because I can browse into a variety of brands and types of the shoes.

✓ I find it convenient to shop online because I can browse a variety of brands and types of shoes.

The verb 'browse' is not followed by the preposition 'into'. The correct usage is 'browse' followed directly by the object. Therefore, 'browse into a variety' is incorrect; it should be 'browse a variety'. Removing 'into' corrects the sentence.

× Moreover, I also loved reading the customer reviews.

✓ Moreover, I also love reading the customer reviews.

The sentence is describing a habitual action or preference, so the present tense 'love' is appropriate rather than the past tense 'loved'. Using past tense here incorrectly suggests the action is no longer true.

× For example if I purchase the Nike shoes which is a foreign brand then it definitely costs an arm and a leg.

✓ For example, if I purchase Nike shoes, which are a foreign brand, then it definitely costs an arm and a leg.

'Nike shoes' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. Also, 'Nike shoes' does not need 'the' before it. Correct subject-verb agreement and article usage improve clarity.

× However if I choose to purchase the national brand which is leaning or anti which is quite reasonable and affordable and they also the style is also quite fit for me that it I definitely go with that.

✓ However, if I choose to purchase a national brand like Leaning or Anti, which is quite reasonable and affordable, and the style also fits me quite well, then I definitely go with that.

The original sentence is run-on and confusing. It lacks proper punctuation and connectors. Breaking it into clearer clauses and correcting article usage ('a national brand') and verb agreement ('style fits me') improves readability and grammatical correctness.

× Personally I will go for the comfortable shoes because I always think that the reason of wearing shoe is to make us more convenient and comfortable rather than just having a good look on the appearance.

✓ Personally, I will go for comfortable shoes because I always think that the reason for wearing shoes is to make us more convenient and comfortable rather than just having a good appearance.

The phrase 'reason of wearing shoe' is incorrect; it should be 'reason for wearing shoes'. Also, 'having a good look on the appearance' is awkward; 'having a good appearance' is more natural. Additionally, 'shoes' should be plural.