Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer lacks clarity and has grammatical errors. Try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, followed by supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

Example: I don't like buying shoes very often because my mother usually buys them for me. Therefore, I seldom purchase shoes myself. She also takes care of buying my clothes, so I rarely need to shop for these items.

Suggestion: Your answer is understandable but contains some grammatical mistakes and redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas and express your opinion clearly. Keep your sentences concise and avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'sorry'.

Example: Yes, I have bought shoes online once, but the experience was disappointing because the quality was poor. As a result, I decided not to buy shoes online again in the future.

Suggestion: Your answer provides relevant information but has some grammatical errors and redundancy. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and avoid filler words. Also, try to be more specific and clear in your explanation.

Example: I usually spend about ₹5000 per month on shoes, which is enough to buy one pair. However, I prefer to spend more money on other things like my gaming setup or clothes.

Suggestion: Your answer is clear and relevant but has some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use linking words to connect your ideas and improve sentence structure. Also, avoid repeating similar words unnecessarily.

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes because fashion often sacrifices comfort. Wearing shoes that make me feel relaxed is important since comfort matters more than style for me.

× A Seldom purchasing any shoes my mother used to buy for me because I don't like to buy shoes.

✓ I seldom purchase any shoes; my mother used to buy them for me because I don't like to buy shoes.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and structure. 'A Seldom purchasing any shoes' is not a proper phrase. The sentence should start with the subject 'I' followed by the verb 'seldom purchase'. Also, 'my mother used to buy for me' needs an object, so 'them' (referring to shoes) is added. This correction improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× The clothes my mother always makes sure she buys shop to buy shoes and clothes for me.

✓ My mother always makes sure she goes to the shop to buy shoes and clothes for me.

The phrase 'she buys shop to buy shoes' is incorrect. The verb 'buy' requires an object, and 'shop' is a place, so the correct preposition is 'goes to the shop' to indicate the place where buying happens. This correction fixes the preposition and verb usage for clarity.

× I think yes, only once and I do not have a good experience at all because it was a fault issues and the quality was so messed up and I just decided to not to buy again in future.

✓ I think yes, only once, and I did not have a good experience at all because there were faulty issues and the quality was very poor, so I decided not to buy again in the future.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. 'Do not have' should be 'did not have' to match past experience. 'It was a fault issues' is incorrect; 'there were faulty issues' or 'there were faults' is better. 'Messed up' is informal; 'very poor' is more appropriate. 'Decided to not to buy' should be 'decided not to buy'. This correction aligns verb tenses and improves clarity.

× If I calculate monthly, I guess only ₹5000 and in ₹5000 you only buy one shoes.

✓ If I calculate monthly, I guess only ₹5000, and with ₹5000 you can only buy one pair of shoes.

The word 'shoes' is plural, so 'one shoes' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'one pair of shoes'. Also, 'in ₹5000' is better expressed as 'with ₹5000' to indicate the amount of money used for buying. This correction fixes plural usage and preposition.

× But uh, I'd rather spend try to spend in other things like my gaming setup or clothes.

✓ But uh, I'd rather try to spend on other things like my gaming setup or clothes.

The phrase 'spend in other things' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'spend on other things'. Also, 'I'd rather spend try to spend' is redundant; 'I'd rather try to spend' is clearer. This correction fixes preposition and redundancy.

× Having a good shoes that in which you feel so relaxed.

✓ Having good shoes in which you feel very relaxed.

'A good shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural; it should be 'good shoes' without 'a'. Also, 'that in which' is awkward; 'in which' suffices. 'So relaxed' is informal; 'very relaxed' is more appropriate. This correction fixes article usage and improves phrasing.

× I prefer those shoes because if you're not feeling relaxed or calm or soothing so it doesn't matter you buy a good shoes or bad shoes.

✓ I prefer those shoes because if you're not feeling relaxed, calm, or soothed, it doesn't matter whether you buy good shoes or bad shoes.

The sentence has redundant conjunctions and incorrect word forms. 'Soothing' should be 'soothed' to describe a feeling. The phrase 'it doesn't matter you buy a good shoes or bad shoes' is incorrect; it should be 'it doesn't matter whether you buy good shoes or bad shoes'. This correction improves sentence structure and word choice.