Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some irrelevant or confusing parts. Try to give a direct answer first, then add specific details about your preferences. Avoid unnecessary or unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Example: Yes, I like buying shoes quite often because I enjoy researching new models. For example, I prefer brands like Nike, Puma, and Adidas because they offer comfortable shoes. I usually choose comfort over style since I wear them for long periods.

Suggestion: Your answer is generally clear but contains a confusing word 'sauce' which seems out of context. Try to use precise vocabulary and add linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

Example: Yes, I recently bought shoes from an online store called Aesthetics Nepal. The quality was excellent because the shoes were very flexible and comfortable. I was very satisfied with my purchase.

Suggestion: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to directly answer the question with specific details about your spending habits. Avoid incomplete or unclear sentences and use linking words to organize your ideas.

Example: To be honest, I spend a significant amount of money on shoes because I like to follow the latest trends. I have a large collection at home, including popular models like Jordan 5 and Jordan 6.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but contains repetition and some unclear phrases. Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Use precise vocabulary to express your ideas naturally.

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones because I am a busy person who travels a lot. Therefore, I need shoes that are lightweight and flexible so I can walk comfortably throughout the day.

× I'm all 20%, so I love researching new shoes that are available in the market.

✓ I'm all about 20%, so I love researching new shoes that are available in the market.

The phrase 'I'm all 20%' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'I'm all about 20%' meaning the person is very interested or focused on something. The quantifier 'all about' is used to express enthusiasm or focus.

× I love the shoes especially of the company Nike and Puma and Adidas.

✓ I especially love shoes from the companies Nike, Puma, and Adidas.

The original sentence misuses 'of the company' and the conjunction 'and' repeatedly. The correction uses 'from the companies' to indicate origin and lists the brands properly with commas and 'and' before the last item.

× I prefer comfortable shoes over stylish because they have offers they.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes over stylish ones because they offer comfort.

The original sentence ends with 'they have offers they' which is unclear and incorrect. The correction clarifies the meaning by stating that comfortable shoes offer comfort, and uses 'ones' to refer to 'stylish shoes' properly.

× Yes, I recently bought shoes from online store called Aesthetics Nepal.

✓ Yes, I recently bought shoes from an online store called Aesthetics Nepal.

The phrase 'from online store' is missing the article 'an'. Also, 'online store' should be preceded by an article to be grammatically correct.

× I love the sauce.

✓ I love the shoes.

The word 'sauce' is a mispronunciation or typo for 'shoes'. Correcting it to 'shoes' makes the sentence meaningful in context.

× To be honest, my most money are spent on my shoes.

✓ To be honest, most of my money is spent on my shoes.

'Money' is an uncountable noun and takes singular verb 'is'. Also, 'my most money' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'most of my money'.

× There are varieties of shoes around my during loving.

✓ There are varieties of shoes around me during living.

The phrase 'around my during loving' is incorrect and unclear. It likely intends to say 'around me during living' or 'around me where I live'. The correction clarifies the preposition and wording.

× Jordan 6. Jordan 5.

✓ I have Jordan 6 and Jordan 5 shoes.

The original is a fragment without a verb or subject. The correction forms a complete sentence indicating possession of the shoes.

× I will say I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable shoes because comfortable shoes, because I'm a, I'm a really busy person.

✓ I will say I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable shoes because I'm a really busy person.

The phrase 'because comfortable shoes, because' is redundant and incomplete. The correction removes the redundancy and clarifies the reason.

× I have to try, I'm a, I have to travel here and there.

✓ I have to travel here and there.

The phrase 'I have to try, I'm a,' is incomplete and confusing. The correction removes unnecessary words to make a clear sentence.

× So I need more comfortable that I lightweight, that is flexible so that I can walk here there without any problem.

✓ So I need shoes that are comfortable, lightweight, and flexible so that I can walk here and there without any problem.

The original sentence misuses 'more comfortable that I lightweight' which is grammatically incorrect. The correction uses proper relative clauses and lists adjectives correctly.