Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや冗長な表現が見られます。例えば、「once we get a new shoes」は「once we get new shoes」に修正し、より自然な表現にしましょう。また、理由を述べる際に接続詞を使って論理的に繋げると良いです。

Example: Yes, I like buying shoes, but I rarely buy new ones because they usually last for two or three years, so I don't need to buy them often.

Suggestion: 回答に文法の誤りと不自然な表現があります。例えば、「by ecommerce」は不要で、「try before we buy」は「try them on before buying」にすると自然です。また、最後の文は意味が不明瞭なので、明確に表現しましょう。

Example: No, I have never bought shoes online because I prefer to try them on before buying, which makes me feel more comfortable.

Suggestion: 回答は具体的ですが、文法と表現に改善の余地があります。「it costs on average 5000 to ¥20,000」は「they usually cost between ¥5,000 and ¥20,000」に修正し、より自然にしましょう。

Example: I usually spend about ¥10,000 on shoes because they typically cost between ¥5,000 and ¥20,000.

Suggestion: 回答は意図が伝わりますが、文法と表現が不自然です。「the fitting is very important to continue to put them on」は「a good fit is very important to wear them comfortably」に修正し、接続詞を使って論理的に繋げましょう。

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes because a good fit is very important to wear them comfortably. If they don't fit well, it is hard to wear them for a long time.

× once we get a new shoes, the shoes lasts for two or three years

✓ once we get new shoes, the shoes last for two or three years

'Shoes' is plural, so 'a new shoes' is incorrect; it should be 'new shoes' without 'a'. Also, 'shoes' is plural, so the verb should be 'last' instead of 'lasts' to agree in number.

× once we get a new shoes, the shoes lasts for two or three years

✓ once we get new shoes, the shoes last for two or three years

The subject 'shoes' is plural, so the verb must be plural 'last' to maintain subject-verb agreement.

× No, I have never bought shoes online by ecommerce because I'd like to try before we buy.

✓ No, I have never bought shoes online through e-commerce because I'd like to try them before I buy.

The preposition 'by' is incorrect here; 'through' is appropriate to indicate the method of purchase. Also, 'ecommerce' should be hyphenated as 'e-commerce'. Additionally, 'try before we buy' is unclear; it should be 'try them before I buy' for clarity and correct pronoun use.

× It makes me more comfortable to put on the put on.

✓ It makes me more comfortable to put them on.

The phrase 'to put on the put on' is incorrect and redundant. The correct pronoun 'them' refers to the shoes, and the phrase should be 'to put them on'.

× I spend about ¥10,000 on my shoes because it costs on average 5000 to ¥20,000.

✓ I spend about ¥10,000 on my shoes because they cost on average ¥5,000 to ¥20,000.

The verb 'costs' should agree with the plural subject 'shoes', so it should be 'cost'. Also, the currency amount '5000' should have the yen symbol '¥' for consistency. The preposition 'on' before 'average' is unnecessary.

× I spend about ¥10,000 on my shoes because it costs on average 5000 to ¥20,000.

✓ I spend about ¥10,000 on my shoes because they cost on average ¥5,000 to ¥20,000.

The pronoun 'it' incorrectly refers to 'shoes', which is plural; 'they' is the correct pronoun.

× If in contrast, if they are not they do not fit well, I think it hard to continue to work.

✓ If, on the other hand, they do not fit well, I think it is hard to continue working.

The phrase 'If in contrast, if' is redundant and awkward; 'If, on the other hand,' is more appropriate. Also, 'I think it hard' is missing the verb 'is'. The phrase 'continue to work' should be 'continue working' to express ongoing action.