Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains irrelevant information (e.g., 'online cars'). Try to keep your response focused and clear, directly answering the question. Also, avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Example: Yes, I really enjoy buying shoes. I usually purchase new pairs online about once a month because there are many brands and styles to choose from, which makes shopping exciting.

Suggestion: Your answer is difficult to understand due to unclear phrasing and grammar mistakes. Focus on giving a clear, concise response with proper sentence structure. Use linking words to explain reasons logically.

Example: Yes, I have bought shoes online because it saves time. Many people, especially young ones like me, are busy with work and studies, so online shopping is very convenient.

Suggestion: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Be specific about the amount or proportion of your salary spent on shoes. Use linking words to explain your reasons clearly.

Example: I usually spend a significant part of my monthly salary on shoes because I like to buy different pairs to suit various occasions. On average, I might buy one or two pairs each month.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Be specific about situations when you prefer each type of shoe.

Example: It depends on the situation. For example, when I hang out with friends, I prefer comfortable shoes. However, if I have to perform on stage or attend a formal event, I choose fashionable shoes to look my best.

× There's lots of brand and style for me to choose.

✓ There are lots of brands and styles for me to choose.

The subject 'lots' refers to multiple items, so the plural form 'brands' and 'styles' should be used instead of singular 'brand' and 'style'. Also, 'There are' is correct for plural subjects.

× Sure, buying shoes on eyes kind of simple things that in the young young age guys, 'cause it's it's save our time people.

✓ Sure, buying shoes online is kind of a simple thing for young guys, because it saves our time.

The phrase 'on eyes' is incorrect; it should be 'online'. 'Kind of simple things' should be 'kind of a simple thing' to match singular. 'In the young young age guys' is awkward and corrected to 'for young guys'. 'It's it's save' should be 'it saves' to agree with singular subject and correct verb form.

× People are cold acute with those jobs or works and study.

✓ People are so busy with their jobs, work, and studies.

'Cold acute' is incorrect and replaced with 'so busy' to convey intended meaning. 'Works' is uncountable in this context, so 'work' is used. 'Study' is corrected to plural 'studies' to match context. 'Those' is replaced with 'their' to correctly refer to people's own jobs and studies.

× So shopping buying shoes online.

✓ So shopping and buying shoes online.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks conjunction. Adding 'and' connects the two gerunds properly.

× I think it's maybe a great part of my salaries a month.

✓ I think it's maybe a great part of my salary each month.

'Salaries' is plural but the speaker likely refers to their own salary, so singular 'salary' is correct. 'A month' is better expressed as 'each month' for clarity.

× I like to buy different shoes that to to face different situation.

✓ I like to buy different shoes to face different situations.

'Situation' should be plural 'situations' to match 'different'. The phrase 'that to to' is redundant and removed.

× So maybe 1123 shoes months.

✓ So maybe 11 to 23 pairs of shoes per month.

The original phrase is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Clarified to express quantity properly with 'pairs of shoes' and 'per month'.

× I'd like to have a comfortable shoes, but maybe sometimes you have to go to the state, go on stage or perform or something fashionable shoes can.

✓ I'd like to have comfortable shoes, but sometimes you have to go on stage or perform, so fashionable shoes are better.

'A comfortable shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural; 'comfortable shoes' without 'a' is correct. 'Go to the state' is unclear and corrected to 'go on stage'. The last part is rephrased for clarity and grammatical correctness.