Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors, such as 'I am my shop alcoholic person'. Try to use clearer and more natural expressions. Also, avoid redundancy like repeating 'yes' and 'I buy those shoes' unnecessarily. Keep your answer concise and directly address the question with a clear topic sentence and supporting details.

Example: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and do it quite often. I usually choose comfortable shoes that suit the current season, as I prioritize comfort and practicality.

Suggestion: Your answer has several grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases, such as 'I wear shoes online' instead of 'I bought shoes online'. Also, the sentence structure is confusing. Try to use correct verb forms and clearer sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

Example: Yes, I have bought shoes online, but my experience was disappointing. The size was too big for me, and it was difficult to return them, which made the process frustrating.

Suggestion: Your answer provides relevant information but has some redundancy and awkward phrasing, such as 'use shoes matching shoes with my dresses'. Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid repeating words unnecessarily. Also, provide a bit more detail to enrich your answer.

Example: I usually spend about one-third of my income on shoes because I enjoy matching them with my outfits. I believe having the right shoes can enhance my overall appearance.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors, such as 'As the IT depends' and 'if I want to be see a stylish person'. Try to use correct sentence structures and clearer expressions. Also, avoid filler words like 'Uh'. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

Example: It depends on the occasion, but I mostly prefer comfortable shoes. However, for parties, I choose fashionable shoes even though they might not be very comfortable because I want to look stylish.

× Yes, yes I like to buy shoes and I am my shop alcoholic person so I often do shopping and instead of other things I mostly prefer shoes which are very comfortable and according to the season, so I buy those shoes.

✓ Yes, yes I like to buy shoes and I am a shopaholic, so I often go shopping and instead of other things I mostly prefer shoes that are very comfortable and suitable for the season, so I buy those shoes.

The phrase 'I am my shop alcoholic person' is incorrect; the correct term is 'I am a shopaholic'. Also, 'do shopping' should be 'go shopping'. 'Which are very comfortable and according to the season' should be 'that are very comfortable and suitable for the season' to correctly describe the shoes.

× Yes I wear shoes online but my experience was very bad.

✓ Yes, I bought shoes online but my experience was very bad.

The verb 'wear' is incorrect here because the action refers to purchasing shoes online, which is a past event. The correct verb is 'bought' in the past tense.

× I wear shoes and the size was incorrect as it is very big to me and then I found it difficult it to return it to a bad experience.

✓ I bought shoes and the size was incorrect as it was too big for me, and then I found it difficult to return them, which was a bad experience.

The sentence misuses 'wear' instead of 'bought'. Also, 'it is very big to me' should be 'it was too big for me'. The phrase 'difficult it to return it' is incorrect; it should be 'difficult to return them'. Pronouns must agree in number and case.

× I spend approximately 1/3 of my income on the shoes because I love to use shoes matching shoes with my dresses, so I mostly prefer to buy shoes.

✓ I spend approximately one-third of my income on shoes because I love to match shoes with my dresses, so I mostly prefer to buy shoes.

The fraction '1/3' should be written as 'one-third' in formal speech. 'Use shoes matching shoes' is incorrect; it should be 'match shoes'. Also, 'on the shoes' should be 'on shoes' as it refers to shoes in general.

× As the IT depends on the occasion but mostly I prefer the comfortable shoes.

✓ It depends on the occasion, but mostly I prefer comfortable shoes.

The phrase 'As the IT depends' is incorrect; it should be 'It depends'. Also, 'the comfortable shoes' should be 'comfortable shoes' when speaking generally.

× But if there is enough party then I would like to wear party wear shoes.

✓ But if there is a big party, then I would like to wear party shoes.

The phrase 'enough party' is incorrect; it should be 'a big party' or 'an important party'. Also, 'party wear shoes' is better expressed as 'party shoes'.

× Uh these type of shoes are not so comfortable but if I want to be see a stylish person then I have to do.

✓ Uh, these types of shoes are not very comfortable, but if I want to be seen as a stylish person, then I have to wear them.

'These type' should be 'these types' or 'this type'. 'Want to be see' should be 'want to be seen'. The phrase 'I have to do' is incomplete; it should specify the action, such as 'I have to wear them'.