Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to reduce filler words like 'umm' and 'uh' to make your speech more fluent and natural. Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating similar ideas. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide more specific details about your preferences and buying habits.

Example: I really enjoy buying shoes because they are more comfortable and easier to walk in than sandals. However, I don't buy shoes very often since I prefer to save money and invest in high-quality pairs that last a long time.

Suggestion: Avoid excessive hesitation and filler words to improve fluency. Organize your answer with clear linking words to make it coherent. Be more specific about your experience, such as what kind of shoes you bought and why you found the product good.

Example: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times. For example, I recently purchased a pair on Amazon during the Big Billion Days sale. Although I was worried about receiving fake products, the shoes I received were genuine and of very good quality.

Suggestion: Work on reducing hesitation and unclear phrases to improve clarity. Provide a more precise estimate of your spending and use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Avoid vague expressions like 'UH2UH' and be specific about your buying frequency and budget.

Example: I usually don't spend much money on shoes because I prefer to save and invest in high-quality pairs that last a long time. Typically, I buy one or two pairs of shoes per year, spending around $100 to $150 in total.

Suggestion: Reduce filler words and improve sentence structure for better fluency. Use linking words to contrast your preferences clearly and provide more detailed reasons for your choice. Avoid repetition and be concise.

Example: I definitely prefer comfortable shoes to fashionable ones because they are better for long walks or standing for extended periods. Although fashionable shoes are suitable for parties or clubs, I prioritize comfort in my daily life.

× I don't buy umm, uh, footwears often or I don't purchase often, uh, because I like to, uh, save money, umm, and invest in uh, a single product which comes for a long time.

✓ I don't buy umm, uh, footwear often or I don't purchase often, uh, because I like to, uh, save money, umm, and invest in uh, a single product which lasts a long time.

The word 'footwear' is an uncountable noun and does not have a plural form. Using 'footwears' is incorrect. Also, 'comes for a long time' is awkward; 'lasts a long time' is the correct expression to indicate durability.

× Yes, I definitely have bought shoes many shoes online recently I did a purchase on Amazon during the big billion days umm uh, it was on hoffer and umm uh, it was a very good product.

✓ Yes, I definitely have bought many shoes online recently. I made a purchase on Amazon during the Big Billion Days, umm uh, it was on offer and umm uh, it was a very good product.

The phrase 'did a purchase' is incorrect; the correct past tense form is 'made a purchase'. Also, 'big billion days' should be capitalized as 'Big Billion Days' as it is a proper noun. 'Hoffer' seems to be a typo and should be 'offer'.

× Even though online umm uh have uh fake products, they can send fake products, but uh even I was scared for this, but umm uh at last the product was worth it it.

✓ Even though online stores can have fake products and may send fake products, I was scared of this, but in the end, the product was worth it.

The original sentence is fragmented and repetitive. 'Online umm uh have uh fake products' is ungrammatical; it should specify 'online stores can have fake products'. Also, 'but uh even I was scared for this, but umm uh at last' is redundant and confusing. The corrected sentence is clearer and grammatically correct.

× Maybe UH2UH shoes per year is more if I buy.

✓ Maybe two shoes per year is more if I buy.

The phrase 'UH2UH' seems to be a placeholder or typo and should be replaced with 'two'. Also, 'shoes per year is more' is awkward; it would be better to say 'Maybe two pairs of shoes per year if I buy.' However, to keep close to the original, 'two shoes per year is more if I buy' is acceptable.

× Whereas uh, fashionable shoes, umm, uh, is uh, uh, where you uh, go for a partying, uh, or any other for clubs.

✓ Whereas uh, fashionable shoes, umm, uh, are uh, uh, for going to parties, uh, or clubs.

'Fashionable shoes' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. Also, 'where you go for a partying' is incorrect; it should be 'for going to parties' or 'to go to parties'.

× But comfortable shoes is what I prefer all the time.

✓ But comfortable shoes are what I prefer all the time.

'Comfortable shoes' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'.