Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, avoid unclear phrases like 'the shoes are very fashionable person,' and provide specific details about how often you buy shoes. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

Example: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes quite a lot. I usually buy new shoes every two to three months because I like to keep up with the latest fashion trends.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and could be clearer. Avoid repeating phrases like 'from abroad' and 'from foreign countries.' Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons why you prefer buying shoes online from other countries.

Example: Yes, I often buy shoes online from foreign websites because I believe that shoes made in other countries are of higher quality and use better materials.

Suggestion: Your answer has some unclear phrases like 'I think she's enough.' Try to express your ideas clearly and directly. Also, provide more specific details about your spending habits and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

Example: I usually buy two or three pairs of shoes each year, spending around $2000 in total. I think this amount is reasonable because it allows me to buy high-quality and comfortable shoes.

Suggestion: Your answer contains unclear and contradictory phrases like 'I would like to be inconvenienced.' Make sure to express your preference clearly and support it with reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

Example: Although many people prefer fashionable shoes, I prioritize comfort because I work long hours. Therefore, I usually choose comfortable shoes like sneakers or boots.

× The shoes are very fashionable person.

✓ The shoes are very fashionable.

The phrase 'fashionable person' is incorrect here because 'fashionable' should describe 'shoes', not 'person'. The word 'person' is unnecessary and causes confusion. Removing 'person' corrects the sentence.

× I think I buy it very often because I want to start.

✓ I think I buy them very often because I want to start.

The pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to 'shoes', which is plural. The correct plural pronoun is 'them'. This ensures agreement between the pronoun and its antecedent.

× So usually I purchase my shoes from the online shops from abroad because I think it is shoes from other countries from foreign countries are more qualified and contain good materials.

✓ So usually I purchase my shoes from online shops abroad because I think shoes from foreign countries are of better quality and contain good materials.

The phrase 'from the online shops from abroad' is redundant and awkward; 'from online shops abroad' is clearer. Also, 'it is shoes from other countries from foreign countries are more qualified' is grammatically incorrect and confusing. Rephrasing to 'shoes from foreign countries are of better quality' improves clarity and correctness.

× I think she's enough and I spent for it.

✓ I think that's enough and I spend on it.

The phrase 'she's enough' is incorrect; likely intended as 'that's enough'. Also, 'I spent for it' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'I spend on it'. The tense should be present to match 'usually' in the context.

× Maybe $2000. For this amount you can buy great and convenient shoes.

✓ Maybe $2000. With this amount, you can buy great and comfortable shoes.

The preposition 'for' is less appropriate here; 'with this amount' is the correct phrase to indicate the money used to buy something. Also, 'convenient shoes' is incorrect; 'comfortable shoes' is the proper collocation.

× So to be fashionable is a very significant for many people.

✓ So being fashionable is very important for many people.

'To be fashionable is a very significant' is incorrect because 'significant' is an adjective that needs a noun to modify. 'Very important' is a better choice here. Also, 'to be fashionable' is better expressed as 'being fashionable' in this context.

× But As for me, I would like to be inconvenienced because I work a lot and I must have comfortable boots or shoes, maybe sneakers.

✓ But as for me, I would like to be comfortable because I work a lot and I must have comfortable boots or shoes, maybe sneakers.

The phrase 'I would like to be inconvenienced' is incorrect and opposite in meaning to the intended idea. The correct adjective is 'comfortable' to express preference for comfort.