Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors and informal language like 'dude say' and 'drawable ones'. Try to use clear, formal language and organize your ideas logically. Also, avoid redundancy and ensure your sentences are complete and coherent.

Example: I really enjoy buying shoes, but due to financial restrictions, I don't purchase them very often. Usually, I buy shoes when I have a special occasion to attend. I prefer quality over quantity, so I look for durable and comfortable pairs.

Suggestion: Your answer is generally clear but contains filler words like 'uh' and incomplete sentences. Try to avoid fillers and complete your thoughts fully. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Example: Yes, I have bought shoes online before. It was very convenient because I could browse a wide variety of brands and styles. Moreover, I was able to compare prices and read customer reviews easily.

Suggestion: Your answer has some grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'moderates amount' and 'long dusting materials'. Try to use correct grammar and precise vocabulary. Also, provide clearer examples to support your points.

Example: I usually spend a moderate amount on shoes, around $50 to $100 per pair. I prefer buying from reputable brands that offer good quality at a fair price. For instance, I look for shoes made with durable materials that last a long time.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant and structured but contains some informal expressions and minor grammatical errors. Try to use more formal language and vary your vocabulary. Also, use linking words to improve coherence.

Example: It depends on the occasion. For example, if I am attending a wedding, I prefer fashionable shoes even if they are less comfortable. However, for activities like walking or when I need to wear shoes for a long time, I prioritize comfort.

× I'm not able to buy a shoes a lot so if I need to buy if I need to attend an occasion I am buying shoes.

✓ I'm not able to buy shoes a lot so if I need to buy, if I need to attend an occasion, I buy shoes.

The phrase 'a shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and does not require the singular article 'a'. Also, the sentence structure is repetitive and can be simplified for clarity.

× However dude say financial restrictions.

✓ However, due to financial restrictions,

The phrase 'dude say' is incorrect and unclear. It seems the speaker meant 'due to' to indicate a reason. Correcting this improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I'm looking for the drawable ones.

✓ I'm looking for the durable ones.

The word 'drawable' is incorrect in this context. The correct adjective is 'durable', meaning long-lasting, which fits the context of shoes.

× I've ordered for some shoes via a fashion app before

✓ I've ordered some shoes via a fashion app before

The verb 'order' does not require the preposition 'for' when followed directly by the object. Removing 'for' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× I usually spend a moderates amount of money on shoes, about 50 to $100 per pair.

✓ I usually spend a moderate amount of money on shoes, about $50 to $100 per pair.

The adjective 'moderates' is incorrect; the correct form is 'moderate' to describe 'amount'. Also, the dollar sign should precede the number consistently.

× I prefer buying from the goods brands that offers good quality and a fair price.

✓ I prefer buying from the good brands that offer good quality and a fair price.

'Goods brands' is incorrect; it should be 'good brands'. Also, 'brands' is plural, so the verb should be 'offer' instead of 'offers' to agree with the plural subject.

× For example, they have long dusting materials.

✓ For example, they have long-lasting materials.

The phrase 'long dusting materials' is incorrect. The intended phrase is 'long-lasting materials', meaning materials that endure over time.

× I need to wear a fashionable 1 and I don't really care about whether it is comfortable or not.

✓ I need to wear a fashionable one and I don't really care about whether it is comfortable or not.

Using the numeral '1' is informal and incorrect in this context; it should be spelled out as 'one'.

× Or let's say I'm going to have a walk, I prefer the comfortable one.

✓ Or let's say I'm going to have a walk, I prefer the comfortable ones.

Since 'shoes' is plural, the pronoun referring to them should also be plural ('ones') to maintain agreement.

× Or I'm going to wear the shoes very long time, I prefer comfortable.

✓ Or if I'm going to wear the shoes for a very long time, I prefer comfortable ones.

The phrase 'very long time' needs the preposition 'for' to indicate duration. Also, 'comfortable' should be followed by 'ones' to refer to shoes properly.