Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to form a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, and use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for naturalness.

Example: I like buying shoes, especially on weekends when I have free time. Usually, I go to the shopping mall to buy different types of shoes, such as sneakers and heels. I prefer comfortable shoes rather than expensive ones because comfort is more important to me.

Suggestion: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Use a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons, using linking words to connect ideas. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences.

Example: Yes, I prefer buying shoes online because shoe websites offer a wide variety of options. This allows me to choose shoes that suit different occasions, and I enjoy wearing them.

Suggestion: Your answer is vague and contains many fillers. Provide a clear and direct response with specific details about your spending habits. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and avoid unnecessary pauses.

Example: I usually spend a moderate amount on shoes because I prefer comfortable shoes at affordable prices. When I have time, I visit shopping malls to find good deals that fit my budget.

Suggestion: Your answer is generally clear but can be improved by using more precise vocabulary and better sentence structure. Use linking words to contrast your preferences effectively.

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes because they allow me to walk easily and feel relaxed. However, I also enjoy buying fashionable shoes for special occasions to look stylish.

× Every I prefer to buying shoes when I get weekend, uh, usually I go to shopping mall and, and buy, uh, different kind of shoes like sneakers, heels, and I prefer a comfort, uh, rather than an expensive shoes, uh.

✓ Every weekend, I prefer buying shoes. Usually, I go to the shopping mall and buy different kinds of shoes like sneakers and heels. I prefer comfort rather than expensive shoes.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and article usage. 'Every I prefer to buying shoes when I get weekend' is incorrect; it should be 'Every weekend, I prefer buying shoes.' Also, 'different kind of shoes' should be 'different kinds of shoes' to match plural form. 'A comfort' is incorrect; 'comfort' is uncountable and does not need an article. 'An expensive shoes' is wrong because 'shoes' is plural and should not have 'an'. Suggestions: use correct article usage, plural forms, and proper word order.

× Every I prefer to buying shoes when I get weekend, uh, usually I go to shopping mall and, and buy, uh, different kind of shoes like sneakers, heels, and I prefer a comfort, uh, rather than an expensive shoes, uh.

✓ Every weekend, I prefer buying shoes. Usually, I go to the shopping mall and buy different kinds of shoes like sneakers and heels. I prefer comfort rather than expensive shoes.

The phrase 'prefer to buying' is incorrect. After 'prefer', the correct form is either 'prefer to buy' or 'prefer buying'. Here, 'prefer buying' fits better. This is a common error involving verb + -ing form usage.

× Every I prefer to buying shoes when I get weekend, uh, usually I go to shopping mall and, and buy, uh, different kind of shoes like sneakers, heels, and I prefer a comfort, uh, rather than an expensive shoes, uh.

✓ Every weekend, I prefer buying shoes. Usually, I go to the shopping mall and buy different kinds of shoes like sneakers and heels. I prefer comfort rather than expensive shoes.

The phrase 'different kind of shoes' should be 'different kinds of shoes' because 'kinds' must be plural to agree with 'shoes'. Also, 'an expensive shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and cannot take the singular article 'an'.

× Frankly, I prefer to buy shoes in online because uh, in in shoe website I can choose any kind of shoes as my preference.

✓ Frankly, I prefer to buy shoes online because on shoe websites I can choose any kind of shoes according to my preference.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used with 'online' and 'shoe website'. The correct preposition is 'online' without 'in' and 'on' for websites. Also, 'in in' is a repetition error. 'According to my preference' is a better phrase than 'as my preference'.

× Frankly, I prefer to buy shoes in online because uh, in in shoe website I can choose any kind of shoes as my preference.

✓ Frankly, I prefer to buy shoes online because on shoe websites I can choose any kind of shoes according to my preference.

The phrase 'shoe website' should be plural 'shoe websites' to match the general meaning of multiple websites. Also, 'any kind of shoes' is acceptable but 'any kinds of shoes' could be better; however, the main issue is singular/plural agreement with 'website'.

× Frankly, I don't love to buy expensive shoes. I prefer comfort in little price.

✓ Frankly, I don't like to buy expensive shoes. I prefer comfort at a low price.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect with 'little price'. The correct preposition is 'at' and the phrase should be 'a low price' instead of 'little price'. Also, 'love to buy' is awkward here; 'like to buy' is more natural.

× Uh, frankly, I don't love to buy expensive shoes. I prefer comfort in little price. Uh, so, uh, when I get time, I love to buy shoes in shopping malls with a minimum price.

✓ Uh, frankly, I don't like to buy expensive shoes. I prefer comfort at a low price. So, when I have time, I like to buy shoes in shopping malls at the lowest price.

'When I get time' is a literal translation and unnatural; 'when I have time' is better. 'Love to buy' is too strong for preference; 'like to buy' is more appropriate. 'With a minimum price' is awkward; 'at the lowest price' or 'at a low price' is better.

× Uh, frankly, I prefer comfortable shoes because, umm, to wear comfortable shoes, I can go any places is uh, easily and comfortably.

✓ Uh, frankly, I prefer comfortable shoes because when I wear comfortable shoes, I can go to any place easily and comfortably.

The phrase 'to wear comfortable shoes' is incorrect; it should be 'when I wear comfortable shoes' to indicate the condition. 'Go any places' is incorrect; it should be 'go to any place' or 'go anywhere'. Also, 'is uh' is unnecessary and incorrect. The adverb 'easily' should come after the verb 'go'.

× On the other hand, I also love to buy fashionable shoes for any kind of occasions.

✓ On the other hand, I also love to buy fashionable shoes for any kind of occasion.

The phrase 'any kind of occasions' is incorrect because 'kind of' should be followed by a singular noun. It should be 'any kind of occasion' or 'any kinds of occasions' if plural is intended.