Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現があります。例えば、「visited a lot of place」は「visited a lot of places」や「go to many places」が適切です。また、理由を述べる際に接続詞を使って論理的に繋げると良いでしょう。

Example: Yes, I like buying shoes and I usually buy them once a month. I think it might be too often because I often visit many different places, so I need different shoes for each occasion.

Suggestion: 回答が不明瞭で文法的な誤りが多いです。「scared of that my size meets」は意味が伝わりにくいので、「worried that the size might not fit」などの表現を使いましょう。また、「cheese shops」は誤りで「shoe shops」が正しいです。

Example: Actually, I've never bought shoes online because I'm worried that the size might not fit me. Therefore, I usually prefer to buy shoes at physical shoe shops.

Suggestion: 回答は内容が明確ですが、文法と表現を改善できます。「currently I'm student」は「I'm currently a student」が自然です。また、理由を述べる際に接続詞を使うと良いでしょう。

Example: I usually spend around ¥5000 on shoes. Some people say that's inexpensive because I'm currently a student and I want to save money.

Suggestion: 回答は意味が伝わりにくく、文法的な誤りが多いです。「went to many prices」は誤りで、「go to many places」が正しいです。また、「helps me easy to work and run」は「helps me to work and run comfortably」などに修正しましょう。

Example: I prefer buying comfortable shoes because I often go to many places and spend many hours walking and running. I believe comfortable shoes help me work and run more easily.

× I buy once a month.

✓ I buy shoes once a month.

The sentence lacks a plural noun after 'buy'. 'Buy' is a verb and needs an object here. Adding 'shoes' clarifies what is bought and corrects the singular/plural usage.

× I visited a lot of place so that I have to buy different shoes.

✓ I visited a lot of places so I have to buy different shoes.

The word 'place' should be plural 'places' because 'a lot of' refers to multiple locations. Also, 'so that' is incorrectly used here; 'so' is more appropriate to indicate cause and effect.

× I'm scared of that my size meets.

✓ I'm scared that my size won't fit.

The phrase 'scared of that my size meets' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'scared that my size won't fit' to express fear about the size fitting properly. 'Meet' is not used in this context.

× After buying so that I usually go to cheese shops.

✓ After buying, I usually go to shoe shops.

The phrase 'cheese shops' is a typo and should be 'shoe shops'. Also, 'After buying so that' is incorrect; 'After buying' followed by a comma is correct to indicate sequence.

× I've never bought shoes on the Internet actually because I'm scared of that my size meets.

✓ I've never bought shoes on the Internet actually because I'm scared that my size won't fit.

The preposition 'of' after 'scared' is unnecessary here. The correct structure is 'scared that...' to introduce the reason for fear.

× I usually spend on shoes around ¥5000.

✓ I usually spend around ¥5000 on shoes.

The placement of 'on shoes' is awkward. Moving 'around ¥5000' before 'on shoes' makes the sentence clearer and grammatically correct.

× Some people say it's inexpensive because currently I'm student so I want to save money.

✓ Some people say it's inexpensive because currently I'm a student, so I want to save money.

The sentence lacks the article 'a' before 'student'. Also, a comma before 'so' improves sentence clarity as it connects two independent clauses.

× I prefer buying comfortable shoes because I went to many prices and I run and walk many hours so that I believe it helps me easy to work and run.

✓ I prefer buying comfortable shoes because I have been to many places and I run and walk for many hours, so I believe it helps me work and run easily.

'Went to many prices' is incorrect; it should be 'been to many places'. The verb tense is corrected to present perfect 'have been' to indicate experience. 'Easy to work and run' should be 'helps me work and run easily' to use the adverb form correctly.