Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be improved by adding a linking phrase and more specific details to make it more natural and effective. Try to avoid vague terms like 'other stuff' and specify your interests to enrich the content.

Example: No, I don't enjoy buying shoes very much. Instead, I prefer to spend my money on online courses related to photography and cooking, which are my main hobbies. This way, I feel I invest in my personal growth rather than material items.

Suggestion: Your answer addresses the question but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and correct tense usage. Also, be more concise and avoid redundancy.

Example: Yes, I have bought shoes online before, but it was not a very good experience. Although I checked the size chart carefully, the shoes still didn't fit me because I couldn't try them on beforehand.

Suggestion: Your answer provides useful information but has some unclear parts and incomplete sentences. Be precise with numbers and complete your thoughts. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid ambiguity.

Example: I usually spend between 1,000 and 3,000 New Taiwan dollars on shoes, depending on the style, brand, and whether there is a discount. However, for special shoes like those designed for mountain climbing, I might spend between 4,000 and 6,000 New Taiwan dollars because they need to be more durable and reliable.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use linking words to improve coherence and correct grammar. Also, try to provide more specific reasons or examples to support your preference.

Example: I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because I wear them every day for long periods. Comfortable shoes are more functional and better for my feet. Besides, I rarely attend events that require fashionable shoes, so comfort is my priority.

× Yes I have, but it was now a very good experience because I couldn't try the shoes by myself so even I checked the size indicated on the online shop but still it didn't fit my foot.

✓ Yes I have, but it was not a very good experience because I couldn't try the shoes by myself so even though I checked the size indicated on the online shop, it still didn't fit my foot.

The word 'now' is incorrect here; it should be 'not' to express a negative past experience. Also, 'even I checked' is incorrect; it should be 'even though I checked' to properly connect the clauses.

× I usually spend between 1003 thousand New Taiwan dollars on shoes depending on the style and brand and also if there was a discount.

✓ I usually spend between 1000 and 3000 New Taiwan dollars on shoes depending on the style and brand and also if there is a discount.

The original number '1003 thousand' is likely a typo or incorrect expression. It should be '1000 and 3000' to indicate a range. Also, 'if there was a discount' should be 'if there is a discount' to match the present tense of 'usually spend'.

× However, if I am buying special shoes like those design for mountain climbing, I might spend more around 4000 to 6000 New Taiwan dollars because they need to be more durable and.

✓ However, if I am buying special shoes like those designed for mountain climbing, I might spend more, around 4000 to 6000 New Taiwan dollars, because they need to be more durable.

The word 'design' should be the past participle 'designed' to correctly modify 'shoes'. Also, the sentence was incomplete and needed proper punctuation and completion.

× I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because shoes is something you need to wear every day and also you may wear it for a long time.

✓ I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because shoes are something you need to wear every day and also you may wear them for a long time.

The noun 'shoes' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is', and the pronoun should be 'them' instead of 'it' to agree in number.

× So I feel comfortable can make shoes is more functional and also I don't really have that that many situation I need fashionable shoes.

✓ So I feel being comfortable makes shoes more functional, and also I don't really have that many situations where I need fashionable shoes.

The original sentence has incorrect structure and word order. 'Comfortable can make shoes is more functional' is ungrammatical; it should be rephrased to 'being comfortable makes shoes more functional'. Also, 'that that many situation' should be 'that many situations', and 'I need fashionable shoes' needs a relative clause 'where I need fashionable shoes' for clarity.